Reviews for Epilogue: A NaruSaku One Shot
Guest chapter 1 . 3/18
Sweet narusaku treat.
EMR-one7 chapter 1 . 11/12/2019
The genjutsu idea was really unique. Good job on this one-shot. Impressive!
LimJJ chapter 1 . 11/25/2016
this is good
Guest chapter 1 . 10/11/2016
That was beautiful
DUH BOMB chapter 1 . 10/4/2015
Narusaku forever! Good ending as well
herart chapter 1 . 5/29/2015
This NaruSaku fan liked your story.
samuraipanda85 chapter 1 . 4/3/2015
Happy NaruSaku Day!
waldo071 chapter 1 . 2/8/2015
A very well balanced fic written superbly. It touches all the right notes and all the relevant topics to cover all that an epilogue should.

I liked how the characters and their feelings weren't trivialized for the ending. Sakura's 'love' for Sasuke and Naruto was properly resolved. I could have gone for a more detailed resolution for Hinata but I am glad that she wasn't just ignored or remained the same. Similarly, Sakura didn't just fall in love with Naruto, it was the culmination of a journey that took her from the girls she was at twelve to the woman she is portrayed here.

Overall, I found nothing to complain about. But as you asked for feedback on your writing, here goes: There is definitely space for improvement. The sentence structure and the pacing could have been a tad bit different. Same for the character's entrance in a scene. E.g. Hinata and the husband came out of nowhere in the birthing scene. A sentence or two describing their arrival could have been done. There were also some slight grammatical oversights, nothing too jarring.

All in all, I am confident that you should be proud of this fic. It achieved all that it set out to and more which is the satisfaction of the writer and the reader. Thanks for sharing your creativity. You can be sure I'll be checking your other NS fics as well.
Trunksmybaby chapter 1 . 10/24/2014
aww that was so sweet! I love it!
sundes2013 chapter 1 . 10/5/2014
Awww cute! I also agree with the other reviewer that it was clever that you used Kureani to help Sakura to figure out for feelings.
Mangaka Shuzen chapter 1 . 8/13/2014
This is actually really good, hope to see more!
Guest chapter 1 . 7/1/2014
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Fanwoman chapter 1 . 6/28/2014
Since I think of Kurenai as such a Team 8/Hinata-centric character, it had never occurred to me how she might be helpful to others, like Sakura. Since we know so little of Kurenai's relationship with Asuma, using that as a parallel for Sakura and Naruto's relationship is both clever an effective.

I keep waiting for Sakura to find out the boy who complimented her forehead as a genin was Naruto, so I'm always pleased to find other fans who have not forgotten that significant little scene.

I love that you have Hinata want Naruto to be happy, even if it's with Sakura. It's such an honest way of dealing with the problem of him being loved by Hinata and one I can only hope becomes real in the series.

I also adore his belatedly learning of how he was kept alive when Yang-Kurama had been taken out of him. I keep waiting for him to find out in the series!

This was delightful and believable. Thank you for sharing your talents with us and them!
Wondering Knight chapter 1 . 3/29/2014
Pretty good. This would be an nice way to introduce a full story about their relationship and the future.
Lana605 chapter 1 . 3/28/2014
Really nice story! I like it
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