Reviews for That Which Makes Up The Land
EarthNocturn125 chapter 62 . 7/18
Love the story so far!
Alwayswithyou chapter 1 . 7/13
I love this story so much! Plz update soon
X-I-L2048 chapter 62 . 7/14
Okay, SO, I've been following this story off and on for a few years and figured that even though it's been 2 years since it's been updated, it was high time I wrote you a review, as it's definitely one of my favorite crossovers for either fandom. :D So, after catching up on the last few chapters that I missed, here we go!

First off, I really like what you've done with the worldbuilding here! At first I thought that Rome also going to the Avatar world back in the day was just a convenient plot thread to give the story momentum, but with the reveal of Maya being the founder of the Sun Warrior civilization, I'm starting to think that similarities of cultures from our world to the Avatar world may be more than just simple coincidence. Like Japanese being the Fire Nation High Court language; has Kiku been there, too? Or perhaps another ancient Japanese kingdom? How many Nations from our world have traveled there and left their mark in one way or another? Every Nation to come to the Avatar world has had an element, too; would they ALL have an element or only some of them? Really makes you think. I hope we get more answers at some point!

I also really like the OCs for the Avatar Nations that you've introduced thus far; they all feel like they've had their own long and complicated history with each other completely separate from Earth's history, and the fact that there are far fewer of them than there are on Earth just complicates things even further. How in the world are any of them going to move on from a 100 year war and genocide? What in the world would posses the Fire Nation to go and kill his friends like that? Does he have something like the same supernatural malady that Alfred has? And poor Western Air Temple, living as a mere wisp of consciousness for so long, clinging to ideas and bones to keep herself in the mortal plane. TT TT I got a lil misty eyed when she was finally able to move on and find peace, ngl. I hope they can save Foggy Swamp before it's too late, too! He's kind of a jackass to Al and Zuko, but tbh I can't blame him TOO much, given the current state of the world. Certainly no one deserves to go out the way he's going. :(

Speaking of Alfred's... /problem/, though, if I had one nitpick with this story, it would be that aspect of it, or rather, how OOC it makes him seem at certain points. Like, for the most part he's written superbly, but then out of nowhere he's on the brink of brutally murdering people and taking their teeth as trophies, and it's like WOAH, hold up, where did this all come from? I don't mind my Americas a little darker than usual in fic, but this seems a tad excessive for something that isn't a dark or snapped!fic, is all I'm saying. I really think it would be less jarring for people discovering your stuff through this fic to know from the get-go that he has baggage here that he doesn't have from canon or what he could be expected to have from general history. I finally got an aha moment in chapter 60 when you mentioned this being in the same ficverse as Bad Medicine, so I went off and read that to get some context, but perhaps a note in the first chapter or so saying that this fic takes place in an established AU where America has some bloodthirsty split personality of supernatural origin living in his head might mitigate confusion for new readers as to why America seems more violently bipolar than usual here? Just a thought. ;

All that being said, I do have to say that by far my favorite parts of the fic were where Alfred and Matthew were bonding with their respective groups and the relationships they forged with the two sets of main characters. The Gaang's sections tended to be a little linear when it came to AU vs canon storyline, especially in the beginning, but I absolutely LIVED for the times they interacted with Matthew and when his presence or advice ended up changing the story in new and interesting ways, especially in regards to Karara's character development. It felt like she didn't have to grow up quite as fast or spend as much time stewing in toxic rage and hatred because Matthew was there to challenge her worldview and shoulder the burden of taking care of the group, being as he's technically an adult and the rest of the Gaang are still just kids (the part with Hama was chilling in all the best ways). His moments of acting like a big brother to Aang and Sokka were always so sweet, and I adored his easy friendship with Toph and the way she low-key leaned on him for comfort/reassurance at certain points in the story. Her inventing metalbending not to save herself but him in this timeline was *chef's kiss* inspired, and I love that she has this sort of sixth sense when it comes to Nation identity because of her close connection to the Earth.

Alfred's interactions with Zuko and Iroh and later the henchladies were equally as fascinating, if not more so, because of how drastically his presence affected Zuko's storyline even from the beginning. I love that Zuko went from being totally exasperated with him at first to betraying his family and going undercover in the Fire Nation to save him from Azula's clutches, with his redemption going down a completely different path here than in canon even though the end result was the same, and Alfred in turn acts like this sort of surrogate big brother to him. You know, the kind that you want to hug and strangle in equal measures. :P The Alfred & Ty Lee dynamic was unexpected but absolutely delightful, I love how they almost instantly clicked and how she finally got him to learn Common after months of Zuko and Iroh trying and failing to teach him. XD Maybe she can help him with his dark side, too, suppress it or expunge it entirely. One can hope! I like that Mai and Ty Lee were included in the escape plans this time around, as well. As for Azula... whew, she was a piece of work in canon, but her attitude towards Alfred here was on another level. Is that what she does to anyone who "catches her fancy"? 0~0 Is it only a matter of time for Ty Lee and Mai to suffer the same fate? I do kinda fail to see where the logic of "I'll spend weeks torturing him so that he'll be loyal only to me!" comes in, tho. Like, how did she THINK that was going to work out? *rolls eyes*

It's really interesting that America got stuck with the Fire Nation side of things, though; I can't help but think he'll be instrumental in steering Zuko and the Fire Nation himself toward a better path after everything is said and done, if he can keep himself from punching the guy's face in long enough to impart some sage wisdom. :P Speaking of sage wisdom, I miss Iroh! ;; I hope he's doing alright for himself back in Ba Sing Se, and that Jet somehow survived and is recovering okay from his brainwashing. I hope to see them again sometime!

Lastly, I would be remiss if I didn't mention how much I enjoyed the NA bros' interactions throughout the fic, even if they've been separated for most of it. They're so protective over each other, and I love their easy camaraderie and banter, even when they're annoying each other to death. XD It's terrible that they've both had to feel the other die now, though. :( Matt's going to latch onto Alfred the second they get back and not let him out of his sight for at least a week, calling it now.

Thanks for the awesome fic! Even if it never ends up being finished, I still really enjoyed what we got. :)
Aozora111 chapter 2 . 6/2
UGH I meant 50 chapters. 62, anyways. That's absolutely amazing. ALSO. Avatar the Last Airbender and Hetalia tbh have always taken up like two SEPARATE places in my brain and again, this is just. Magical. I can't get over how I see Alfred and Zuko interact for like 2-3 sentences and my brain is in ship mode all over again since,,,,,,pfffffft idk? Like, wow not ONCE IN MY LIFE. NOT A THOUGHT BETWEEN THEM. NOT A THING. MY ENTIRE EXISTENCE.
I've been venting to my friend about this and they told me in disappointment that I've been possessed by the fanfiction dot net.
Aozora111 chapter 1 . 6/2
Hey! I literally just made a new account (I haven't used this website in a long time, and it's been years since I used an account on here) JUST to comment and tell you that you don't understand the feral awakening in me when I accidentally came across a hetalia x atla crossover fic that seems genuinely good and is 50 chapters long. I have not felt this way since I was, like, 12? And with how long you've been updating I can tell you put so much heart into this. I'm so proud of you.
LavenderLulaMoon chapter 62 . 4/22
This story is fantastic! The plot is ingenious, the way you fused two characters together feels genuine, and I finished it in a day! Whenever inspiration strikes, please update!
Rhi chapter 62 . 3/10
I've just finished reading this again for the third time. Now, I'm not about to ask for any romance, but I will ask for an update :)
I know you will eventually, just letting you know, I'm looking forward to it.
Chumpatrol2 chapter 62 . 3/3
Please update?
cAnd13ThEheTaLiaN chapter 30 . 1/2
YOU HAVE OFFICIALLY EARNED FAV USER
cAnd13ThEheTaLiaN chapter 16 . 1/2
If it's a chibi America on top then sure, I LOVE DIS!
Elenath chapter 62 . 12/20/2019
Hi! I remember first reading this fic back when you started. I come back to it every once and a while because I absolutely adore it. I love the way you write the characters, especially Matt and Alfred (as I personally find writing them to be a challenge). I know you haven't updated in a long time, and you shouldn't at all feel pressured to complete this if you don't want to, but I thought I'd just leave this for you to say that I thoroughly enjoyed reading this and I hope that one day you'll complete this.
Umi Mizu chapter 62 . 12/17/2019
I still love your story. It's been a year and a day since your last update, so I really hope you'll come back to it sometime soon. Hope you're well :)
CookieAura chapter 62 . 11/9/2019
ya got me hooked! hope to see more! 3
Hinata28h chapter 62 . 11/10/2019
Gahhhhhh; I'm absolutely in love with your writing and I'm getting emotional again just doing a reread of thos story because it's 62 chapters of amazingness and I'm just crying about how precious and endearing America and Canada's relationship is and how much these two mean to each other and just these brothers care about each other so much that it hurts and I just want to hug them because ahhhhhh. And then America's relationship with Zuko is just sooooo meaningful and America's just like this rambunctious older mentor type figure Zuko never asked for and America's just like "deal with it, I give you life advice on chilling and you help me firebend."

And then the way your write the Gaang is just so realistic and I can just picture their expressions and the scenes sooo vividly and I wanna hug everyone because they're trying to do what they think is the right way to hand things but also still protecting their friends and wanting things to go smoothly! I love that they're trying to overcome their prejudices of fire benders because they trust Matthew and he trusts his brother and everyone is just wanting nothing wrong to happen and just gahhhh. I feel so emotional for them.

Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us!
Guest chapter 13 . 9/24/2019
Chapter 13

Nice to know that the middle finger is a universal gesture around dimensions, I wonder if there are anymore?
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