Reviews for Lies in the Past, Danger in the Future
dudepotatos chapter 3 . 8/3
Oh God oh fuck. The Hyuugas are going to do the Uchiha coup d'etat gamer move.
Ame chapter 18 . 1/5
Your fic rlly interesting yo! Everyone's grey here, even the 'yang' Naruto and Hinata. Keep going!
Guest chapter 6 . 1/1
Your writing is not very clear; I don’t understand most of the plots and ideas you try to convey to the audience. Maybe you should change some of the pronouns. Other, than that, good job.
Ricky chapter 15 . 7/2/2019
You drag the plot for to long, you refer that they’ll end up being one person yet you haven’t done that yet. Doesn’t feel any progress is being made rather have seen hinata in a younger body and Narutos ghost merge with his younger self with his memories would have made the plot better instead of dragging it on.
LB Cat chapter 20 . 2/27/2019
Love the story, any chance of an update? Thanks
LB Cat chapter 18 . 2/22/2019
Thanks. This story truly has many twist and turn.
Nanashi WindCaller chapter 20 . 8/13/2018
i for one really love yout take on this story ive read all 20 chapters and do like many things

hiashi deffently is my fav part with him working to push naruto and hinata togeather and calling the heads of the village (tsunade kakashi ect) on how they failed naruto

i wonder how you will take orochimaru with all these events thats happened and with past sasuke as well

then i soo wanna see how obito and black zetsu might fair aginst dark naruto heck bet even madara would be interesting to see aginst dark naruto
Guest chapter 20 . 6/25/2018
Story was going good but when you start using dark naruto as a monster and destroy village that fucked up and even after everything that was told to young naruto he doesnt change his ways always forgiving and when he attacked sakura your making hinata disappointed in him and naruto immediately believes it was his mistake why the fuck doesnt sakura admits that it was bound to happen and if u would have changed young naruto views of his foolish ideals of saving everyone it would have been the best story i have read. Despite that great work
brutusjr chapter 7 . 6/4/2018
Absolutely hating the Dark Naruto angle...
brutusjr chapter 3 . 7/26/2017
Boy... this story went downhill pretty fast.

Didn't like it at all, but good luck going forward.
AnonnymA chapter 2 . 4/16/2017
Ok. So I don't normally do reviews until I'm up to date on chapters when reading a new fic..

I don't like tradjedy. It makes me depressed. I hate it really..

I couldn't stop reading this. Only the 2nd chapter, and I'm in blissful pain over the story, and I just can't stop reading.
If you have the concept, and your editor made it come to life, then you both need awards! Fantastic job!
naruhinakiralacus chapter 20 . 3/18/2017
I'm reading the story for the first time. I really liked the beginning...until Dark Naruto took over. I hope the REAL older Naruto still exists and can separate from Dark Naruto...it's just painful to hear the changes he's making...especially affecting the present Naruto...Looking forward to the next chapter!
Helyanweh chapter 4 . 3/3/2017
I kinda skimmed the previous three chapters to get to the good part, but I just lost interest when Hinata started to shout her jutsus. It's just so incredibly moronic, that it breaks realism. What ninja shouts out the name of their jutsu? Doing so has no effect whatsoever and will only get you killed. Hinata could just as well have shouted "Horse shit barrier!" and if she molded her chakra correctly she'd still have projected the same barrier. It's the reason why I just skim over loads of fight scenes in Naruto fanfictions, as all the jutsu name shouting is just so stupid. Ugh.
Guest chapter 20 . 2/15/2017
I have to agree with the others...

I really enjoyed the story and its concept but the problem with it is that the plot is all over the place. I'm a type of writer (I write this as a guest because I don't want to reveal my username) who believes that while you should be attached to the story you should be detached enough to prevent any bias, wish fulfillment, etc. to retain control of the fiction and its pace. The tradegy might be going a bit too far with the chapters from the plot you're going. It's making it look like you're just prolonging the story.

Dark Naruto is good and all but I will have to say that I disagree with how placed him to the table. You presented him almost like your main antagonist.

The summary was that - Hinata travelled back in time to stop Naruto's death and be with her love. Now its almost as if you're drifting away from it for the sake of originality, turning into - Hinata travelled back in time only for the worst to happen. There is no true pay off in her effort - maybe that's tragedy in itself but you prolonged the story with Dark Naruto's path to 'revolution'. That's the problem.

Maybe Hinata and Naruto of this past are the actual main characters and not Yami Naruto and Yuzuki as they are just the cause of the effect... but both pairs are but if the first was true, you should have made things clear.

I'll give you an advise that I learned after watching a series; an author is considered better if he/she can exploit unoriginal plot traits with best execution. It's very fitting in the Naruto fanfiction because most concept are unoriginal... but I read who a few which I considered the best because they turned those traits to their advantage. They were original with how they utilized them. You don't have to make a story different to make them good.
Nallid chapter 2 . 12/30/2016
You really have a way to twist emotions so they flare up without somone knowing in any way untill they pop out.
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