The moment with Minato is so cute. I really like how he is somehow always there when she’s needs someone and even the small interaction between Kana and Minato, you show that they have a budding relationship, even if they are starting from rock bottom. Hopefully, Kana will warm up to Minato more and see his, I think, crush on her, ‘It seems like he can’t decide between her and Kushina sometimes’ because from what I’ve read he a total sweetheart and truly does seem to want to help her out. But at this moment I’m like Poor Minato, Kana isn't very too nice to him but I can understand her reasoning. Okay enough rambling on my side on to the review: wanted to say that this is an amazing story and I love how you write and portray each character, also Kana, In my opinion, is a strong character who needs more motivation and support to be an amazing Shinobi and I just can't wait to see where you will take her in future chapters and her relationships with other character

Have fun writing some more!

This story is amazing, I'm really glad I found it! I think the story line and how Kana's character fits in and works with the story/plot! I love how she isn't the best kunoichi, with mary-sue like personality and she can have normal struggles. I can't wait to see more interaction from Minato and her as well as her teammates. Minato and Kana are adorable, I can't wait to see him showing off his Flying Thunder God Technique! And Orochimaru in my opinion is perfectly written so far! Also her grandfather gives me bad vibes, he seems very manipulative. Poor Kana, I hope her friendship with Yoshino isn't fully over she stills needs her friend. I really can't wait for more of it! Keep writing great work!

I’m glad that I found a Naruto story that the OC isn't a Mary-Sue and everyone is in character as far as I can tell, which is always a plus with a story with an OC! I love how you didn't just jump right into the plot u took ur time to get into the plot just by reading chapter 1. I’m sad that Kana lost her best friend though :( , but I do love every piece of Minato and Kana interactions and hopefully will have more soon! I can’t wait to see Kana and her team bond more and impress Orochimaru! I also can't wait for the next chapter! But I don’t want you too feel rushed, so update when you have the chance! Awesome story!

Whenever kana’s all sad, I just want to comfort her! I can’t wait to see more interactions between Minato and kana! They are totally adorable! Anyway, great chapter! I really love this story and can't wait to read more of your work! Please update when you get the chance!

You should really invest in a beta (getting someone to proofread your chapters before you post them). The concept is good but the grammar, syntax, and verb tenses are not. I’m guessing English isn’t your first language. If it isn’t this is still wildly impressive. As someone who knows only 1 language I can’t imagine how difficult it is to write an entire story in a different one. That being said, practice is key. It’s really rough to read as is because the grammar is so bad. But keep trying! Get a proofreader and keep practicing! Good luck!

It's been awhile

haha they are cute. perhaps Minato feels the same as her, thats why he was always observing her. he is trying to figure her out.
also, i liked the Hiraishin foreshadowing? was it?
haha anyway this is a good story, i hope you continue it!

Nice to see you

I have odd feelings about this fic

All Shinobi cheat, they're not Samurai after all.

Really enjoyed reading the story and hope you can update soon.

Hey mm I think you should look for a beta or a spell check or something since your narration is a tad confusing. For example you said "arrive on across the tea shop" instead of arrive at the tea shop or at the store across the tea shop, and "smile on me" instead of smile at or smile to. " She had decided ago" instead of a while ago or simply ( hour/minutes/seconds/ any time reference) ago . " Upset that it would only me" instead of it would only BE me. There are lots of mistakes like that or like " arrive on tea shop" instead of arrive at THE tea shop. I think the concept of the story is interesting but how is written makes it a lot less desirable to read since is confusing.
I hope that you can fix those things since all I want is to help you improve :)
Thank you very much for posting your story.
Have a nice day!

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Cool new chapter

Oooo an actual minato/oc story that’s good! Hope you update soon!