I can't say I'm really too much a fan of JazxHuey but saying that sweet little girl exploits her friends like this and becomes a total bitch? Kinda out of the blue just to hype up your OC ship tbh. Despite your carefully crafted flaws, I cannot help but want to roll my eyes at the blatant mary-sue qualities of every male getting a goddamn boner at the sight of your OC. The fic can be very hard to read with the droning on descriptions of her that are just too over the top and obnoxiously perfect with lust or jealousy from almost every single character who encounters her; the flow is difficult to keep up with.

It's a struggle to see your OC match the exact criteria Huey would look for and yet also maintain this perfection that is a total turnoff for the fanfic that it is very much painful to read through. Don't get me wrong, your writing is detailed and pretty good but the plot defiantly leaves something to be desired and the sexual undertones are just confusing and unnecessary as if they're only a tool to prove her to be more desirable since she's literally the only one people get lusty over.

This probably comes off as rather cruel but since I'm a primarily OC based fanfic writer myself: if I do get this far into someone else's OC story I might as well speak out on what could use improvement. Don't get me wrong: I'm not against OC authors using attractiveness as a plot but it's easy to go TOO FAR which is exactly what happens when boners pop like popcorn in a microwave okay? Settle it down, slow down the extreme speed of the chemistry between Huey and your OC because the petty misunderstanding drama as of late just won't cut it... and maybe at the end of this you can walk away with a half decent fic.

Cheers, and don't bother messaging me about this b/c I will probably ignore anyone whining about 'bein a hater'

Ahhh! Lovely story! It's getting to be so intense and wow! Keep it up ;3

Gurl I feel you there on the glasses bit. Once I got mine I was like "so that's what your face looks like" to a few of my friends. Everything was so blurry! (º_º) but anywhooo! Love the update! Laney is freaking adorable n Huey is an asshole. Keep up the good work!

Doing good. U getting better and better at being descriptive. I understand why u ain't update in a while, same for me. The difference tho is that I just got lazy and haven't updated in about three weeks too. And yo ANs just funny to me cause I see my self doing some off the same things, especially with the eyesight problem. My eyes then been itching ever since I startes reading Fanfiction throughout the night. keep up the good work.

Love Riley and Cindy

H-hey My Dear NaeNae2905 :) And I Am Happy And Warm And Glad And Deligthted To Talk With You And See You (A-and Thanks For Making Chapter 6 For Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story (I Am Angry At Those Bullies That Pick On Your P-P-P-P-P-poor Laney And Bully Her(Your P-P-P-P-P-poor Laney)But Those Bullies Will Pay Dearly)And I Am Happy And Warm And Glad And Delighted That Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Laney Got Another Friend And Yeah Anime Are Cool)My Dear NaeNae205 :)

I Do Have A Suggestions And One Of Those Are That Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Laney Have A Great Time With True Friends And Play Games And Lots Of Fun My Dear ;)

I love this story it is really well written and has a basic plot going to it unlike other stories that I have read before. I am black too and have to agree with you it took my sister two full days with hardly any sleep to get her braids out anyway I just want you to keep uploading chapters and to not forget about this story . Or I would just literally probably die.

I loooove this story! Keep it up ;3

Ayo, love the chapter. Even got to learn a little about volleyball, feel me. I understand why u haven't updated in a while so it's OK. Black people just got to many responsibilities, naw what I'm saying. For me, long chapters are better, and I'm sure everyone will agree to that. Even then readers don't like waiting so long for a story to update. Yeah readers are selfish like that
Keep it cool girl and hit me up anytime

To continue my thoughtime because while typing on my phone, I push enter by accident. Lol

Anyways, updates that take weeks or months after a chapter goes gets posted, by then I forget what the story was even about so I don't even bother to read until the story is completed. There are a lot of boondocks stories I've loved reading, but some haven't even been updated in a couple years.

Love it!

I like long chapters. At the same time though, I hate waiting for updates that take weeks or months from the previous update and by then I forgot

H-hey My Dear NaeNae2905 :) And T-thank You Thank You Soo Much For Making Another Chapter For Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story And I Am Happy And Warm And Glad And Delighted That You Made Another Chapter For Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story (A-and You Can Make A Few Chapters In Saturday And Sunday And Then Post Those Chapters In Monday Tuesday Wednesday Thursday Friday...O-or Second Option That You Told Us)And I Like And Love And Adore That Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Laney-Elaine Is Tough And Kind And Funny Like You Are My Dear NaeNae205 :)

A-and Yep We Can Talk Anytime And Have Fun And Party As Always My Dear ;)

H-hey My Dear NaeNae205 :) And M-mm...Y-you Made Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story Really Really And Truly Always And Anytime And Forever And Eternally And Beyond Time Itself And Beyond Eternity Really Really And Truly Awesome And Amazing And Sweet And Wonderful And Nice And Perfect And Cool And Divine Great Special Unique Lovely Funny Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story And Thanks For Making Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story (I-ive Heard About Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story From Our Friend Called NarutoPlug And He(Our Friend NarutoPlug)Is Right About Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story Being Funny And Cool And Your Perfect And Sweet And Lovely Something Different Boondocks Story Is Worth Reading And Watching )My Dear NaeNae205 :)

A-and Have Fun And Party My Dear ;)

I'm crying so hard because all I want is another chapter~ haha anyways please update this as soon as possible please~

Yo like the chapter. I m working on my story now and it got that shout out on it for u. Should be out around Saturday. Keep posting, u got something here girl. Keep it real.