Reviews for The ANBU captain, Naruto
Hyourinmaru Kills chapter 1 . 12/12/2017
yas
chanchan chapter 3 . 7/25/2017
why foxvamp so crinnnnge
nekolovesyou chapter 7 . 7/11/2017
plz update
Guest chapter 1 . 1/5/2017
GG
Guest chapter 7 . 10/22/2016
3 chapters of authors notes rlly

UPDATE ALREADY!
got addicted to reading chapter 7 . 3/30/2016
more please
Guest chapter 3 . 2/15/2016
This story is awesome and funny I like it and hinata and naruto
Sandeep chapter 3 . 2/15/2016
NaruHina
Gabrielus Prime chapter 6 . 2/15/2016
Let us know when it's up...
NarHina chapter 5 . 2/14/2016
If you are going to have him transformed maybe have Hinata be the only one to know at first finding out by accident maybe have her develop a crush on him before she finds out and getting depressed that he is not there age but is relived after finding out his true age. I think building it slowly with a teacher student relationship with Hinata crushing on him then expanded as time pass so Naruto falls for her without knowing it. Make them get closer but make different then a normal student and teacher relationship.

The only problem for that is updating how long is it going to be and do you have a plan I would suggest making a outline of what is going to happen before continue so it will be easier to do and you can stop and continue latter if you need to if you can't write that often.

Naruto and Hinata Forever:)
Trithankar chapter 5 . 2/14/2016
How about... Team 8 learns naruto's identity during team introduction and as for a test, they'll have to retrieve an item from naruto in the forest of death before noon. And since hinata is shy and timid naruto decided to teach her alone and hence the affection. Use the rabbit test. In that test hinata takes a rabbit home and cares for 2 days but had to kill that same rabbit on 3 rd day. For details read sealed legacy.
Mon Esprit Libre chapter 1 . 2/9/2016
i can't tell if you're joking or not...
NarHina chapter 3 . 1/23/2016
You should defiantly have Naruto and Hinata paring since that is the only reason I am reading the story since I am a big fan and is what I am expecting and anyone else who read would be to.

Other paring
Neji and Tenten
Shikamaru and Temari
Konohamaru and Hanabi
Shino and Hina OC in team 7

Sasuke and Sakura bashing since I think that Naruto is the only reason they stopped acting like an ass and bitch.

Keep personal comments out in less they are necessary or to a minimal. go back and remove them

Split it in to sections and have sentences/paragraphs one space apart

Look up the ages and Names for everyone on Naruto wiki or something.

longer chapters with multiple character perspective. Go back and do this please

It needs to flow more easily.

A better code name for Naruto like crimson fox and maybe a nick name he has in the bingo book

Describe the masks for anbu like Naruto's being a white fox mask with slit eyes you know like kakashi has with red line patterns over it.

Add Japanese honorifics because it will help set character like Naruto calling kakashi-niisan but have the Kun and Chan title reserved for romantic interest like Naruto and Hinata or children like Hanabi.

If you are explaining a character do a paragraph about them like who they are what they can do personalities in bold when they introduced.

e.g
Hizuka Hyuga uncle to Neji on his mother side ,branch member of the Hyuga age 25 genius in the gentle fist helped Neij learn main house techniques. Despises the Cage bird seal due to it being used on his sister resulted in her dying during child birth. One of the only Hyuga that accept the gentle fist is't perfect and perfected a personal style using modified nun chucks designed with longer length, incorporating the byakugan allowing him to us them to defend and attack at any angle. Only match by Might Guy his friend who trained to use nun chuck together, requested him to supervise Neji's training personal with a not so subtle threat to keep the green suit away from Neji(Guy was left clueless and tried anyway to his dismay).Cold to anyone at first and shows the typical Hyuga personality but opens up to Neji , Guy and Naruto. First resented Naruto for being made captain and the nine tails however later came to respect and relate to him after getting to know him. Wares a a tiger mask with blue stripes on it. Has an irrational fear of the Guys green suit.

Something kind of like that but better.

Explain Naruto and kakashi with a chapter between 1-2 how it came to be like when they first meet and how they came to see each other as siblings and why Naruto is captain with kakashi thoughts about him leaving anbu.

Chapter 1 improvements

Have Danzo try and get him to turn him in to a weapon but have the civilian council try and kill him until he convinces them then have shikaku shikamaru dad mention joining the third anbu which the agrees since it will keep him under his care and away from the parasites.

Instead of comment saying Naruto and Kakashi see each other as siblings show them How they see their from their point of view and why. Like Kakashi because of Minato and Naruto because he helped train him and look after him when he was younger maybe have them live together.

Show what the anbu team think of Naruto leaving

Chapter 2 improvements

For the paragraph were you mention Konohamaru ha hanging from the thirds stone face make it Iruka point of view with him remembering a time he actually did it maybe and him become sibling figure like Kakashi and the reason why he knows Naruto is in anbu.

Describe all of the notable members of the class teams 7, 8, 10 and there thoughts.

Story later on make Hinata more shy since Naruto was not there to encourage her but give them some past like they meet in the academy before he became a genin maybe the scene in the last with Naruto saving her from bullies but wining and giving her his scarf with her missing him and having a crush on him wishing to see him again.

Kiba should have a alpha mentality and challenge Naruto and get beating a lot, one side crush on Hinata for some drama and Hate's Naruto because he there captain but also because he is jealous.

Note anbu can be any rank and is more of special rank given to those the Hokage think is qualified so Naruto could of been an anbu when he was genin but still need to take the exams or get a filed promotion to advance to jonin and chunin

Like the story has potential hope you will continue if you need any ideas or want to discuss any think PM I am not much of writer but I will help were I can and will give Ideas.

Naruto and Hinata Forever:)
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marquis.shax chapter 1 . 1/8/2016
hmm ok the Aburame clan heads name is Shibi. Uhm one more thing how the fuck is Naruto in charge of Kakashi when he was an ANBU Captain BEFORE Naruto was ever even born?
no one important chapter 3 . 1/3/2016
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