Sorry, I just have to get this Monty Python moment out. “Nobody expects Mara Jade Skywalker!” ‘Spose you could also do “the imperial inquisition”. Thanks, I laughed for a half hour after reading that

It was wonderful. Like and Jade were lovely. :3

I doubt you will ever do a follow up story, still it would have been interesting to see the Luke, Mara Jade dynamic unfold.

I realize that this story has been put to bed, but one of the easiest ways to show emotion is gone of voice and facial expressions...

A truly beautiful story. While the meat of it was shorter than I usually enjoy in a story, it's completely fine considering just when Luke and Mara Jade arrived in the past. I'm completely fine with the number of Jedis who were killed by Order 66 (again, the timeframe has this make perfect sense) and I agree with you that the Vong would still be a hard-fought war.

The sad truth of the Legends galaxy is that they never truly came together properly after Sidious' death. Luke's Order was the light showing them the way bit there wasn't enough time between galactic events/conflicts (caused by fallen Jedi or not) for things to heal enough to be ready for the Vong.

I will also say this; the first part of this story was incredibly emotional and well written and I teared up throughout until the Falcon got to Coruscant. Leia's death, Mara's mental breakdown, the Force's despair at what happened, it was all perfectly built up without overdoing it. Well done.

A fun take on time travel. The pacing was good for the most part, and I enjoyed seeing the consequences of Luke and Mara's presence in the ROTS timeframe. The changes felt unforced and natural, and I'm always a fan of Luke getting to spend tome with Anakin.

On the whole, your writing is pretty clear, with the exception of the comma splices, which sometimes obscured your meaning. I know this is an old story, and I hesitate to comment on mechanics after so much time has passed. I only offer the thought in case it would be helpful in stories you are writing now.

Otherwise, this was a pleasant read and I wish you well as you continue writing.

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Ha! Hilarious to find this on ao3 today. And yet here she blows.

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A fantastic story! Easily one of the best Luke and Mara fics I have read, as well as Star Wars time travel! Only issue I have is that it would have helped to have more emphasis on how the Force allowed the Jedi to be sure Luke and Mara were being honest.

That aside, you really created an original and insightful story, with a fun cast of characters. Using the Vong as a warning of a greater threat than Palpatine was a nice touch, Mara's interactions with everybody were a treat :-D You also touched upon a lot of important plot points I would not have thought of, and solutions as well, while keeping a nice level of suspense and surprises.

Well done, this was very inspiring, and hope to see more of your work!

Great story. Just re-read it again.

Incredible story! Hope that you make a sequel at some point!

love it! great premise, even greater execution.