I loved what you have so far, I hope you come back to finsih it someday, but I understand some people have been demoralized by the decline of RWBY's writing. My only hope is that good writers like you continue to breed passion for it, and do the characters justice.

Well, I for one appreciate the openness if this. Do you plan on still writing other stories, or are you stepping down altogether?

Good luck in your future endeavours

nice story can't wait to see weiss reaction to finding out who blakes parents are.

A well-done chapter. Really like how you handled Ruby's grief. Now I'm looking forward to some cuddles for Weiss and Blake.

I'll start with what I have to mention. I loved the joke about putting Weiss under the unstable looking bed. It made me laugh. Like, laugh out loud.

Now hopefuly this won't be as long, unless this time I decide to go into details. But I want for my reviews to have some impact or at least offer a tiny bit of criticism.

I think you packed this chapter with too much content. What do I mean by that? Well... Its personal preference perhaps. But I think you could have handled the Ruby situation in a much slower way. Pace it so that it would be lengthy enough to cover the entire chapter. So it would evolve slower, have a bit more impact emotionally.

It felt a bit rushed. And while this is a monochrome story, I wouldn't mind getting more invested into Ruby and her issue. Because it still would involve the main pair of this story, Weiss and Blake.

After that you jump over to the rest of the Team, Coco visits them, suddenly Tai is there. It turns into this tiny mess of stuff happening. And instead of me being worried about Ruby, what she's going through, how it will impact her, how it will impact her team, how will it impact Weiss and Blake's relationship...I'm reading jokes and actually good jokes that made me laugh.

I think, and once more, this is personal preferences. That you should make a separate chapter about Ruby. And then, another chapter, put in all this Coco Tai stuff. But well, its too late now of course. Yet, perhaps for future, try to not put your emotional bits together with...this. Its distracting.

And in case you think that you would feel like you're dragging or stretching the Ruby scene, you don't have to focus just on her turmoil.

You can make her slowly open up, reveal more and more. Make team CFVY be friendly, try to cheer her up. Things like that. Things that would make me care for Ruby, things that would build up on her relationship with her older friends (even more old then her teammates) and all that. Maybe even show how much they could act like older siblings to her since she's like what? 3 years younger. And she has issue, and Ruby is your paragon of innocence, so seeing her like that, even if you don't meet her everyday, would be heart breaking.

But I get too much into details. I apologize.

Overall? I don't think this chapter was bad. No, I enjoyed it. It was a good chapter. I simply...regret? Or am disappointed a tiny bit that you didn't focus a bit more on each individual part, instead trying to mix this all together which was distracting.

So again, I enjoyed this chapter, and I simply wanted to offer some...criticism. And I say this because I always feel like a vaillain whenever I Write big reviews where I point out stuff I disliked.

Also I wanted to plug my own monochrome story (Because since I last read your story I started writing my own fics because reasons) But I won't because it would be shameless...but I think I already did anyway by writing this and i wish my backspace worked. I guess I wouldn't mind seeing what you think about my story. And call me a hypocrite for doing stuff I say are "Eh" in other stories.

BANG
White in the Rose.

So cute! I really love this story!

So I finished catching up with the story. So read all 21 chapters. And I like to write big blocks of text, and since I'm self aware I'll put a little tl;dr at the bottom. Also a warning that I am not native to english language, as such you'll find alot of typos in here.

I'll start with the fact that I enjoyed the story. It was really well done. Although earlier chapters had things that the later ones lacked, which I found a bit disappointing.

I enjoyed the first chapters cause they weren't all about those two. It was about everyday life problems. A "slice of life" as its sometimes called. And it was written in a good way, interesting way. It still corresponded to the main ...dish. The romance. I like the ... "slow" buildup. It was quick enough to not make things drag for this type of story, but long enough for it to not just be disappointing one scene confession. It was very well done.

I enjoyed your take on the characters and their personalities, of course I wouldn't agree on all things BUT...this is the magic of making a fan made fiction.

Two things I didn't like are the "Sorry game" and the latest reveal of Ruby.

The sorry game is basicly the constant barrage of apologies. Nothing could be spoke or done by anyone without it being followed by apology. It could use some improvement in that regard. I just don't think its how people act. I know there are some people who do that sort of thing. Apologize alot, are anxious and worried. I also understand that certain situation would make one apologize for their action, thinking it should be done. But it was just too much.

And the Ruby thing...well. I read it all on a span on two days. Read most of it yesterday (as of writing this review) and the few last chapters today (As of writing this review). It just...came out of nowhere. And I mean, it would be a good idea if there were little hints here and there. Especially since you didn't decide to stick to just one PoV. The funny thing is I read the chapters name, and i was wondering what kind of heartbreak. And then the Ruby part started talking about a mixed day and I went like "oooh...wait what". I hate "In your face" stuff, but at least a little bit of hints here or there.

tl;dr section:
I liked the story very much. It had a very nice start with a very well done "Slice of life" elements that developed into the main focus of what the story is about. The romance. I disliked the constant apology barrage, but its something I got used to. Still the story would be a bit less awkward without all that. The Ruby thing caught me by surprise and its a shame there weren't hints of it here or there. Small ones, but still. Unless I missed them.
Anyway! Keep up the great work! Can't wait to read more from you!

Fantastic chapter. You did an amazing job of brikng there emotions to life.

Good chapter! I appreciate that they had a talk about going to fast. Definitely like the way Weiss' eagerness was explained. It gives her personality an interesting flair.

I so did not see Ruby's infatuation coming. What an excellent twist!

Solid chapter. Some excellent conversations here.

Weiss wanting to sleep with Blake is so cute.

A very enjoyable chapter! Think the bonus scene was well-written

Nice chapter.

Hmmm... I don't think their desire to take risque photos makes a lot of sense. In just not seeing why they're both so on-board with it, when they've never discussed why.

I also don't like how you can't really seem to decide if they should be embarrassed or not. It's very inconsistent and seems to be whatever fits what you want to write, instead of what their personalities are like.

And with how shy Weiss has been at times...I don't think the excuse of Pyrrha being hurt is enough to make a case for a 1 day old couple, both virgins and not accustomed to physical intimacy, taking these kinds of pictures.

You should try to avoid using sudden interruptions to move the plot forward (or stall it, depending on the scene?. I think you're using that as a bit of a crutch.