Reviews for Overwritten
osterreicher97 chapter 8 . 3/19/2019
Yeah, I kind of knew it, and I'm going to assume since Sakura is that foolish and going that far. She probably has other motives for joining with Shirou than following his dumb beliefs. She's got the mind of a magus no matter how much she might deny it, so she might in the end be tempted with the potential controlling everything with a wish from the Grail. After-all, she sounds like she's planning to use Aki as well as be willing to smother Rin's own chances. She and Shirou are hypocrites considering they sound like they care for Rin but at the same time care about Saber's desires. If they intend to ally at some point they're idiots. If they actually knew who Saber was and how far she and Kiritsugu went to win in the Fourth, they would know that she would do anything.

Also, I wonder if Illya's true status and past connection to both Kiritsugu and Saber will come about. Saber cared for Illya in Fate Zero, so it will make things complicated like canon was. I do wonder though, what Zouken's viewpoint is on things so far and if he has discovered Aki yet.
osterreicher97 chapter 3 . 3/19/2019
Hmmmm... Sakura's playing a dangerous game, and she's clearly an idiot who either is deliberately or "accidentally" going to end up in the Grail War with her "wishes". I guess I can see why Rin doesn't want Sakura being with Shirou. Shirou's idiocy is infectious, and while I understand that she wants to have her own "choice", she's clearly trying to avoid the fact that Magi never know actual peace (especially those like Shirou). Even if she ran off, people know that the Tohsaka have two magecraft users, so she's taking the risk that she'll stand a chance in the wide world without the benefit of protection as a member of Clan Tohsaka.

Also, I'm sure that if she knows about the darkness surrounding Zouken Matou, she'd be wary with declaring herself not of the Tohsaka seeing as Zouken publicly doesn't have an heir capable of magecraft. He might take of advantage of her stupidity (not to mention those in the know (in the Clock Tower and abroad) regarding families associated with Zelretch). It's one of the original reasons that Tokiomi gave her over to Zouken (he was a "trusted" ally and "known" quantity who needed an heir).
osterreicher97 chapter 2 . 3/19/2019
Sakura's toeing the line pretty dangerously, and I'm somewhat surprised that Rin and Aoi seem unaware of Shirou's magecraft and potential even if he was never truly an Emiya clan member by blood. They can't possibly be unless Aoi is unaware as well. I'm guessing that since Zouken's power and reach through his familiars is seemingly limited to Fuyuki, he didn't search all of Japan or extensively use any resources to find Kariya's daughter if he apparently somehow knows despite Kariya's countermeasure.
ShugoYuuki123 chapter 8 . 7/27/2017
Nice story, will there be an update soon?
FFReader123 chapter 8 . 6/29/2017
You should update this soon, this story is looking good and I'd hate to see it end on a cliffhanger
Jaenera Targaryen chapter 8 . 4/3/2017
Understandable...

...moving on, just friends, huh? Somehow, I'm not buying it. Now then, how will Shirou and Sakura get out of this situation, I wonder.
ZJ chapter 7 . 3/29/2017
Okay I would like to point out a mistake in an otherwise great chapter. You had EMIYA say that he was qualified for all classes except for berserker and assassin. That is an incorrect assumption. His page on the type-moon wiki shows that he is most qualified for Archer, Caster, Assassin, and Berserker. That and due to the nature of his reality marble, while not explicitly stated, he is also qualified for saber and lancer. The only class that he is unqualified for is Rider.
Guest chapter 7 . 3/29/2017
Great chapter
Jaenera Targaryen chapter 7 . 3/29/2017
Eh...filler chapter from the feel of things, Archer telling what we - the audience - already know. Necessary but not particularly exciting, though it seems Rin's probing might change that in the next chapter. Real nice cliffhanger there, lol.

So Team Saber is up against Illya and Berserker as usual, eh? Well Saber isn't injured here, so who knows how this battle might turn out this time around. I hope we get to see at least a bit of what Sakura is capable of too.
High Priest of Ereshkigal chapter 7 . 3/29/2017
Saber at full power vs Berserker, this is going to be a great battle? Did Shirou gave her Avalon back because if he did then she's most likely going to win.
MechaDragon99 chapter 7 . 3/29/2017
So... an alternate version of Heaven's Feel route. Though I wonder if Shirou still have his dream of becoming the Hero of Justice?
Jaenera Targaryen chapter 6 . 3/20/2017
Poor Archer, he always gets nerfed early on, doesn't he? Except in UBW of course. And here he can't even recover, at least until someone defeats Lancer.

I wonder what Sakura and Shirou are planning, and what drinking each other's essence will do. Though I'm willing to bet it's something that allows Sakura to share prana with Shirou, only they used a more roundabout way instead of the usual FSN method (sex). I'm also willing to bet they're going to summon a Servant (Saber no doubt), and like Kayneth and Sola, jointly power her. A properly-supported Saber is going to be a beast.

If Saber does get summoned, I hope to see a fair rematch with Lancer. Poor Lancer, I hope he gets better luck this time around, though from the look of things Aki is just the master he's been waiting for.

Update soon!
AladdinlSane chapter 6 . 3/19/2017
Great chapter. Didn't exept them to trink each others blood. Though they might use it in acritual or something. They haven't turned into Dead Apostel have they? :D
Ghul chapter 5 . 3/13/2017
I oh love spot huh he a bad one for archer to fight sense he uses projections they are easily canceled out by his spear not that archer cant win but he we need go long range
Gashadokuro Amanojaku chapter 5 . 3/13/2017
Well, I am not quite as satisfied with this chapter as I was with the other ones.
I don’t think Aki counts as a first-generation magus. After all, even if she has no Magic Crest, she still has the blood of a magus parent inside of her. This does give her an advantage over someone who literally mutated some Magic Circuits. Also, the quality of her Magic Circuits is not influenced by whether or not her cousins have Magic Circuits or not. It only depends on her ancestors and natural mutation. So, her saying she’s better than normal first-generation magi because she’s from a branch family doesn’t make any sense because if she were a first-generation magus, no ancestor to the branch would be able to use thaumaturgy which wouldn’t be different from normal people.
What I also don’t like is Archer’s dismissal of Lancer’s spear. Not only does Archer have the Eye of the Mind skill, which allows him to keep the battle situation in his mind at any time, he also is the type of person to use any advantage he can get, even the surroundings. And so I can’t imagine him to forget that one of Lancer’s spears would still be laying around. In fact, since his favorite weapons are ones that he can “control remotely”, there is no reason for him not to expect the thrown spear to fly back to its owner or at him at any point in the battle.
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