...maybe I'm just making an incorrect assumption, but then James/Sirius talk of "making" things in connection with 'murder' am I the only one thinking of horcruxes?

Thankyou for this amazing stuff and introducing me to bottom that stuffs amazing and apparently they are going to film a show like bottom in a retirement home eventually!

So things ended with a whimper instead of a bang

How contrived. It's too convenient they were all in the same room at the same time. You must have started rushing to finish the story because it couldn't have been that difficult to imagine an extra scene or two.

Nice to see you let the payoff for reading this far be such a letdown. This was all you could muster up for the death of Voldemort? A short attack of Malfoy manner that ended with Voldemort... accidentally captured? Really?

I can't muster up much excitement for what's going to happen to Black and Potter. Same for Dumbledore whenever he makes his next attempt. Those plot threads are easily discarded when they already don't make much sense and the bashing of the other is uncalled for based on who's actually responsible. Them two turning dark has always been on rather shaky logic at best and you haven't done anything to make Dumbledore hateable.

This was a lost opportunity to impress the Goblins with wizards they really shouldn't look down on. Shame you didn't do anything with it. But I shouldn't have expected anything else either... Of course you were going to go with the cliche. Why did I think any different?

More filler.

We might finally be getting decent chapters again. Now we just have to hope you don't ruin it by forcing Hermione to be friends with Harry. I don't think it's possible to do anything more boring than that.

"What? The first thing the author did was making Hermione be friends with Harry? Omg, that's sooooo original! Who would have thought?"

See my point?

And how would Dumbledore know they aren't at Voldemorts level? He's only seen them once and that was while they massacred a group of wizards with cattle prods and a chainsaw. Hell, he just walked up to their place of business and compared to smell to Nazi death camps. What the fck is he doing just guessing at something like that?

Well that's a fcken shame. I wanted them to be the dark monsters Hansel and Gretal are, not the generic version of them. What happened to the horror tag?

I'm skimming to the end, fck this. Your story has enough problems already without the kick in the nuts this copout feels like. You've ruined your characters for me.

This was unmistakably filler.

I feel like you're neutering the twins. They haven't done anything cool or bloody and so far all we're hearing is talk about how deadly they are and how grim their work is. We need some action. This is something you should really start showing at some point.

If Harry's parents, one of them at least, was still alive then nothing that happened should fall on Dumbledore's shoulders. Fanfiction writers might be a little used to making Dumbledore responsible for everything and bashing him for it but really, what happened here is down solely down to his father isn't it? He's the one that f'ed things up.

Again...Why are they describing magic to people? I get saying the basics after someone saw magic, but Balalaika going into detail about the ritual that saved Harry's life was for who's benefit? We already know it so you couldn't have added it for the readers, it's not any of Garcia's business because to them she's only work, who cares if she's confused really. And the canon group... Well, if they wanted to tell them the story they would have. Wtf is Balalaika doing running her mouth about a story the twins didn't give her the go-ahead to tell? Even though it was just the basics that's more than any of them "deserved" to know and really they deserved nothing.

It's becoming clear to me that one of your writing shortcomings is presenting the motivations of characters in ways that make sense. For all intents and purposes, stuff just keeps happening and the role the twins are playing in it is negligible. If someone is going to explain backstory that can't happen simply because a nobody asked... You've got to explain that the twins don't mind being talked about(Seriously, you have to. You've established they're very reserved about themselves with Revy being COMPLETELY unaware of their line of work despite her being someone the two discus at length when alone), why Balalaika wanted to answer (She clearly hasn't before so what makes this particular mess any different) and you have to make the person asking matter(They can't be just another face that disappears when the episode is over. When something big is revealed it needs to seem more important than that).

So the twins are working for Balalaika? You should've clarified that and made it official. The entire time I was going "Wtf, why are they doing pro bono protection work when that isn't even their chosen line of work? And since when exactly were they hired because the only reason they were there in the first place was that they wanted a drink... How are they such good friends with the canon group that helping them out of a tight spot is only natural for them?"

I like what happened but that's only if I'm looking at this chapter on a surface level. When I start asking why people are doing the things they're doing none of it is making sense.