Actually, I use Wikipedia, if only to look for meaningful names for my writing...

Alright Shirou is here! Love Archer of Red; that was a good choice. Also, I like the subtle changes to this world's grail war, like Shinji being different, and having Gil and Caren. This is shaping up to be something exciting!

Oh man so she summoned Mordred? That's awesome. Just want to say how much I love your writing, and your stories. I love your knowledge of type moon lore and how much you incorporate history into your stories. I majored in history as an undergrad, so I really enjoy that aspect of your writing. As always, great work!

There are just so many small things about this story that bug me that I just can't enjoy it. For one, Tokomi gave Sakura to Zouken because she, in theory, would learn the Matou magic and be the heir to that family. So why would he give her to the Edelfelts if she isn't going to inherit their magic. Why bother changing her name when she isn't an heir to the main family considering her name wasn't changed when she was adopted by Zoken. Why would she be okay with losing a piece of her idenity? Why would she be angry at her mother when they did it to help her grow as a mage. She would know why they gave her to another family. That she likes here so why act as if they got rid of her as in Fate where her life sucked. Just a bunch characterization issues that bug me.

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I don't know if it is intended but...good job on making Altram badass.

The concept of Shirou being tied to Luvia instead of Rin/Sakura directly has interested me for a while, so I am quite happy with the direction your story is taking. It would seem Shirou will get along vey well with Atalanta and Lily, he in essence embodies ideals they both represent as they are.

Hopefully Luvia and Marika won't be shy in teaching Shirou magecraft.

Any likely Karna will be summoned?

Demiservant?

I wasn't expecting that to happen to a building in this chapter. Another good one.

That was an interesting character development chapter.

Another good chapter.

Change Servant lancer to Karna or Achilles, it would be very interesting.

You know, when I joked about adding in Astolfo as Rider, I was not expecting to be taken seriously. But it seems that you’re running with the Apocrypha Servants for this story. Which could be interesting, after all it was written that the Master who would work the best with Spartacus is Shirou himself. I mean at this point it’s a possibility. Atalanta’s very different from EMIYA as well. In case you haven’t read the Manga and don’t know Atalanta’s powers, she has A rank agility, B rank magic, rest is E or D. So the classic fragile speedster, and nowhere near as much variety in her combat as EMIYA has. So you should keep that in mind going forwards.

On other matters, while I wasn’t expecting Shirou to be a viewpoint character, there’s not much to say there other than he’s much as you always write him. Try not to let him fade into the background, and also try not to let him dominate things. He needs to have just the right amount of presence. And I hope given that everything is quite friendly between the Tohsakas and the Edelfets at this point, that you remember to really ratchet up the tension when the war proper begins.

Another good chapter. You preserved the humor of Rin's original mistake too partially though 1 part of it and a following related one are missing.