Im waiting for THAT one lizardmen scene to seeing all of their reactions would be pretty funny

I suggest looking for editors/proofreaders/beta readers

ah yes monopoly, how about uno 'the friendship breaker' for upcoming chapter?

uhhh when is the next chapter gonna be released

Why can I easily see momonga breaking Monopoly without really trying

good work

ah I see you are a man of culture as wall

I feel this has a much lighter tone than the original with more jokes and such it's nice to see someone do something different from the original but maintain the storyline as well so thank you

It good

WHERES THE UPDATE PLEASE

I hope you continued the story please I love your fanfiction the most

Take some time off the computer. Your grammar isn’t the best, wait till your older. Or take some classes.

Where's the next chapter?

This is my constructive feedback.
I see a lot of mistakes, just general grammar. Most of the ones I see straight out the gate are about tense, for example 'Momonga has log on', which should be 'Logged on' or 'Logged in'. A lot of the are as simple as adding a 'ed' at the end, but there are others such at 'Momonga sit down in his respective chair', which should be 'Sat down'.

Occasionally you miss a few space marks after a full stop, or forget to capitalise the next letter after it, but that's stuff that happens to everyone. Momonga's message is also rather strange, as you've seemed to cut it into paragraphs, despite it being the same part of the sentence.

You also miss some comas to break up longer sentences, and overall you don't seem to use many of them... Though I may be biased with that, as I tend to use them rather frequently.

Hey can u update this fanfic it been like 8 months please update this it an amazing fanfic