Reviews for Eyes In The Dark
Daastan Go chapter 3 . 3/19/2018
How many times will Sasuke say 'Hn' like a fucking idiot in your stories? I don't understand. What kind of stupid fad is this amongst Naruto fandom to twist facts and create funny caricatures out of complex characters like Sasuke?

This was so hyperbolic and silly. You believe Naruto isn't aware of Sharingan-Genjutsu's effects? He experienced them firsthand, for fuck's sake; but some absurd mumbo-jumbo (you concocted) that makes no sense even with the use of 'hypothesis' paves the way for that non-canonical beating?

Which Naruto have you written about anyway? You think Naruto wasn't self-aware when Sasuke said to his face that Sakura should be left behind (in the barrier) to get vapourized by Jubi-Jin Obito's Bijuu-Damas? You believe he was out of it when Sasuke dragged him away and left Sakura and Kakashi to burn to death in the lava-pit? You reckon that Naruto was delirious when he had 'just' saved Sakura from a moral attack from the poisoned kunai in Sasuke's grasp? You assume that Naruto was a cold-turkey when Sasuke launched a direct assault on Sakura at their reunion, and then proceeded on to nearly finish the job with Kirin? But a mere Genjutsu is what pushes him over the edge?

You do realize that Naruto never gave a shit about Sakura to this degree, right? All of these (canonical) incidents take place before this canon divergence you've gone with. You've practically butchered Naruto's character (I won't say anything about Sasuke as he requires skill and craft to pen-the kind Naruto-fandom scarcely possesses), and I don't even like the guy.

Naruto's character is about 'transcendental brotherhood' where two brothers were reborn (consistently) through eons as their 'bond' was so strong-to break the cycle and find reconciliation (find peace). I believe the whole idea of Naruto's character (and his intense and pure love for his spiritual brother, Sasuke) just whooshed over your head.

Naruto's character revolves around the ethos of 'spiritual' continuity, which is why there is little to no physicality to his character; it's spiritual in nature, which is why it's 'idealistic' in nature. Now you understand where his 'idealism' stems from? It's to bring a state of balance to his brother's spiritual state that's in a constant state of unrest, which is why Sasuke was born in an era of strife between his marginalized clan and the political government: it's a cyclic rebirth and test for their spirits.

Good God, you've literally pissed on what little worth Naruto's character had in the manga whose mechanics echo a lot of Buddhist ideals of 'purity' and 'refinement' of the soul. And didn't Naruto explicitly state in the manga that he wasn't bringing Sasuke back for Sakura? Guess you missed that, too. And did Sasuke just bad-mouth his dead clan? The fuck?

I mean, what should I say here? This is so damned juvenile, a fixing galore to appease some Sakura-fan in you who thinks that poor Sakura got the shit-smeared end of the stick. For what reasons? Only Lord knows as they don't exist in the confines of canon-manga.

Your prose and ideas are all over the place. It's a chaotic mess in here. You're so eager to proceed on to the 'Sasuke-bashing' scenes with such glee-without any regard for basic structuring, grammar, or tone. I just ... wow! This was so bad that I don't think I'll ever touch another Naruto and Sakura Romance fiction again, because if they're anything like this 'masterpiece,' then I should find better use of my time-all thanks to yours truly!

Good Lord!
Dismal00 chapter 3 . 2/17/2018
What's weirder is that Inoichi is supposed to be dead. Not sure how I screwed that one up!
daimahou chapter 2 . 1/3/2018
It's a bit weird how Sasuke goes on about the abilities of the Sharingan when he did the Genjutsu with the Rinnegan (Rinne Sharingan?)...
MindForgedMan chapter 1 . 11/26/2017
A short but nice fic.
hennessyswagg83 chapter 3 . 11/21/2017
You still have her calling him Sasuke-kun is just ridiculous at this point since you over exaggerated the Genjutsu effect hehit her with at the end of the war
samuraipanda85 chapter 2 . 11/16/2017
Sweet Sage. Do you write doctorate papers for a living? That was way too professional.
YeagerMeister31 chapter 4 . 11/13/2017
interesting thoughts
YeagerMeister31 chapter 3 . 11/13/2017
well that was interesting but Sakura should never have forgiven Sasgay
YeagerMeister31 chapter 2 . 11/13/2017
well that was cool and dark man it felt good reading Sasuke getting beat up
YeagerMeister31 chapter 1 . 11/13/2017
well that was angsty but cool
slccpy chapter 3 . 11/12/2017
This story is great. I like the deep turmoil this story takes on. As much as I hate it, I love it. Great read
hennessyswagg83 chapter 3 . 11/11/2017
good story but it all goes back to honestly to Sakura being a weak dumbass to be in love with someone that's never loved or show any sign of recognition to them and only a weak minded idiot would go through what Sakura did in fact I would to see you have Ino make that rational depiction to Sakura about the whole genjutsu and how that if she wasn't irrevocable in love with a person that neither cared nor ever showed and sign of love than she wouldn't have been so affected but here's the hilarious bout Sakura's love and be faulted on Naruto for pretending to be Sasuke and giving her that compliment and almost kissing her on the bench after the team selection and Ino revealing that it was Naruto actual Naruto who cause her heart and emotions to become solely devoted to a false image of Sasuke that never existed lmao hahaha I swear it such a funny twist of events that occurred that blame can be switched on everyone in their love triangle but tracing it back to the origin source of being Naruto's fault is just too funny not to do especially after he decimated Sasuke like he did it would crush this story's Naruto and I can't say I would be fascinated to see you paint it with your words and style
Guest chapter 3 . 11/11/2017
Noo!
Guest chapter 2 . 11/11/2017
¿por que? ...¿Por que el sasusaku?
¿En la pareja principal? odio esa pareja.
Arriba NaruSaku!
Guest chapter 1 . 11/11/2017
Ahhhhh
Azul ...mi color favorito
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