Reviews for Her Lotus-Eyed Hero
Lia Angelique chapter 8 . 7/18/2019
It is such a shame, I really like this story that I just found.
DarkManta chapter 8 . 7/18/2019
Pleaseee continue
Esmereilda chapter 6 . 12/27/2018
a geass nice idea
jackelgull chapter 7 . 9/30/2018
I love this story so far, but I don't think Kariya giving Sakura back to her family would be the ideal solution. Tokiomi has already proved he is a magus rather than a father - Unlimited Bladeworks is clear on that point. If you abandon your child to enslavement and rape, you shouldn't get a second chance. Short of a visible realignment in Tokiomi's priorities, some kind of sign he wouldn't make the same choice all over again, I think it'd be a mistake for him to get Sakura back. I hope what this story builds to is Kariya letting go of his hate and instead making an objective assessment and realizing Sakura shouldn't go back to her family - Aoi seemed to accept her child's disappearance easily enough. I hope this story ends with him trying to be her father.
DarkManta chapter 1 . 9/3/2018
this is so good for my cold heart. pleaseeeee update again.
bleedingangel95 chapter 7 . 8/8/2018
This is very interesting! Couldn't stop reading!
Pedro52 chapter 3 . 7/20/2018
awesome
GhostXavier chapter 7 . 7/12/2018
"And Kariya, his master couldn't stop shouting in excitement!" Easily my favorite line. That scene was a nice touch.

I like the introspection and comparisons Saber goes through, but the last two scenes are the most touching. Rama bringing Sakura to the playground so she can find out how to be herself again is nicely paralleled with the same issue for the unknowing Kariya. Guess this will be a double self-realization story, and you certainly give an interesting setup for a unique, possible ending.

You definitely have my interest for where this will go next. There's a few typos here and there, but I know English isn't your first language so I wouldn't worry about them. Yours are rather easy to miss anyhow unless the reader tends to crawl slowly through sentences like I do. Keep it up, friend!
ArcherShirou chapter 7 . 7/10/2018
Kariya is being forced to see that his choices for war could result.

Rama has no problem putting salt in the wounds if it helps heal Kariya in the future, but those words must have hurt Kariya.

unfortunately he does not have many choices, since his life span is short, is the only way he can continue to live really is the grail, that even winning will fuck him somehow, or Iirisviel who may perhaps know enough about healing to help him.
Colinpop5 chapter 7 . 7/7/2018
Ay like it.
JediMasterDraco chapter 7 . 7/7/2018
Well looks like we've got a story where I'm pulling for Gilgamesh to corrupt Kirei. That way, Tokiomi gets sent to the hell he deserves and the girls should have a happy childhood. X-factor is Aoi, but hopefully she'll be ill inclined the bastard after she learns about what happened to Sakura.
superpierce chapter 7 . 7/7/2018
glad to read another chapter of this story always a pleasure.
Epyon Legium chapter 7 . 7/7/2018
I must say, this is quite an interesting read. The use of Rama is unique and appreciated, though I didn't notice him listed as a character. He's portrayed pretty well all things considered. His interactions with Sakura and Kariya are heartwarming to read as canon is far more saddening. His interactions with Saber are also well written. Though, if I recall, Nasu states that his Curse of Separation was an actual curse from the wife of a monkey. Also, you should note Excalibur is not as slow as you state. In fact, it's listed by Nasu to be able to be utilized in less than a second, slightly faster than the charge of Iskandar's Via Expugnatio. I do like the use of Alter's sword length increase, but canonically it wouldn't be possible. This is because Excalibur Morgan is conceptually different from Excalibur. Instead of making a sword of light emitted from the tip, the sword is cloaked in what could be said to be a "blaze" of energy. Regular Artoria is unable to do this, because her Excalibur is conceptually different from Excalibur Morgan. However, in the world of FanFiction, rules are bent to the Writer as they are granted creative liberties. This review may sound harsh, but it's honest critique from a fellow Fate fan. In terms of enjoyablity your story is quite nice, so I do urge you to produce more work. Until further notice-
Ciao~
A fan chapter 7 . 7/7/2018
Glad to see this story has returned. Another great chapter.
One issue: If Tokiomi is still alive at the end of the war, he will likely just end up giving up Sakura to another family so s he can "reach her full potential as a magus," and possibly to establish an alliance with another family.
Looking forward to more.
klim770 chapter 7 . 7/6/2018
Nice move with Excalibur, reminds me of how Richard used in f/strange fake
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