This story was a wonderful read!

Poor Anakin! So tragic. :-(

I am so glad Anakin did not join Palpatine!

I never would have known English isn’t your first language by the way you write. There are some grammar mistakes, but every writer has those. Your writing is really good.

I was expecting Anakin to convince Ahsoka to stay, but the ending with Anakin killing Barriss surprised me!

The episodes "The Jedi Who Knew Too Much" and "To Catch a Jedi" were always heartbreakers for me. It’s nice to go through the episodes in your story knowing that there will be a different (hopefully happier) ending to these episodes.

Pretty good so far :-)

This is the best Star Wars fanfiction I've ever read with the pairings of Anakin and Ahsoka. I always try to search for more but this is probably the only best one I found. Would you be honored if I decide to turn it into a comic someday? I love showing possible what-if stories and this one definitely has a good and happy ending. Ever since I watched the entire series, I start to see a good connection between the two. I mean yeah, I like Padme and happy for her and Anakin as a couple but now I have become quite a fan of this new pairing. And I'd like to see what it'd look like in paper someday.

what a chapter good job

That’s was a good read

I think you might want to revise it a bit more or get a beta reader of sorts. Your grammar is still a bit off sometimes...or Ahsoka just sounds a bit too formal to be Ahsoka. Though the latter is understandable since it's sometimes hard to pull off a character's personality.

Tython is the right place for them. They will be free to play without restriction.

Its just a Rancor, kids. They give Dathormir younglings a ride on their backs.

Love

i love it so much please be sequel showing palpatine return. if i remember correctly he did survive when vader kill him in the movies he transfer his spirit or soul into a clone(younger body) of him but anyway great story.

aye aye aye keep it up