Hey there,
I just wanted to let you know, I love where you're going with this story so far. Keep up the good work, and I will be eagerly awaiting your next update.

Es una idea muy interesante, espero que puedas actualizar pronto

so to begin with I am going to go through the chapters and say what could be done better and what was done amazingly in this one review so that you're not bombed by 12 different reviews, it always bugged me when that while I was attempting to write fan-fiction.

ch 1
you have the characterization of somebody coming in to clean up the mess of another person down to perfection. you also manage to merge the officer who NEEDS to deal with shit, and the concerned father fairly well, never mind that you broke from the ages old trope of "I must rush off to protect my son/daughter/wife/husband/mom/dad/ect from harm" it adds more realism.

ch2
well done on the flash back, a quick brief summary, to many try to cram the characters entire backstory into one flash back, or use them far to (too?) often. your descriptions also bring the character to life in a way most on fanfiction writers don't( or at least not the ones that I read) its a small touch but it goes miles

ch3
a good foreshadow of a failed arkios ship, weiss also had great mental dialogue

announcement
... speaking form experience there is nothing more saddening for me than opening up my inbox, seeing an update opening an update and finding out that it's just a simple announcement. worse most the announcements i read are " hey i know you guys like this story but i can't Finish because X" unless its is important leave it in the normal authors note, or publish it with another chapters ( which you may have done but I do not have archived chapter published dates )

ch4
good perspective choice, i always love learning more about a character, as well as new characters. however i will criticize the use of parentheses in fictional writing as they , in my opinion, break the flow; or stepping out of character in D&D if you prefer. i would use something like ' his tried and true sword and shield combo, a workable two handed, and a rather abysmal duel wielding style.

ch5
great chapter nuff said

ch6
great hospital mania, same issue with parentheses as above, the note and stuffed animal were also a great touch and manner to further develop the relationship between jaune and phyrra.

ch7
Haldor is a bit of a cookie cutter character at this point, thats more due to lack of exposure at this point so that may change. if he reappears flesh him out more, if he doesn't ... well he is a cookie cutter at this point.

ch 8
if Haldor is a veteran then I am a little skeptical about him not knowing about faunns night vision, although I do understand that you do not want an omnipotent character. 20 KIA 30 WIA sounds like a ton of casualties for what i think is a company strength unit, I would expect moral to be lower given that they suffered... 30% casualties for a company with 150 troops in it. good cliff hanger at the end of the chapter.

ch9
its better to let the reader piece together you characters personality rather than state what it is, however that is one of many differences between many professional fiction writers who are paid and actual have time to put in such effert, and casual writers who cram in writting in during their free time

ch10
good chapter nuff said

ch11
the cynic inside me years to point you that most women would take jaune saying that he is a prince as a bad pickup line of something like that. great chapter, also over all a nice kick in the ass to everybody from jaune.

ch12
good chapter nuff said

over all

I love it when people go in an create explanations for x and y in a series when x and y are bairly explained, badly explained, or the explanation makes no sense. i also like it when the empty space between scenes is filled. a great idea I will love to see the follow through.

shipping
dont care as long as there are no love triangles.

now then, to bed so i dont set a new personal record of time with out sleep

Very nice and cute chapter, glad to see Pyhrra is still kicking ass again. Le't say no to all the fic where she's just the Barbie of the situation! Best of luck with everything, keep up the good work and see you soon.

How about dipping into fgo joan of arc noble phantasm and make it a relic that empowers jaunes scemblance to be an aoe since it's pretty much a downgraded form of it

Lovely chapter about my waifu(Ruby), i can't wait to see next chapters, but i'm sure Jaune wouldn't just let others do the dirty job. Keep up the good work and see you soon, i can't wait to see the higher tiers in the frontline.

Both good chapters, but i hope to see some more action now. Good work.

My congratulations for the speed

Woot white knight!

Good work

Pretty cool, i can't wait to see next chapters

Good bitch is not a good teacher.

Iron wood waz not at fault for the breach.

I'm going to cry. Often some words are missed, when i review.

Lovely, now i'm going to you soon.

Read the whole story thus far in one go. It's an interesting idea, though you could benefit from some proofreading to correct grammar mistakes. Also, I'd recommend breaking up the blocks of text to make it easier to read. Generally, whenever a new person is speaking/thinking or POV changes, make a new paragraph. I'd also recommend toning down on the OC's, unless they're going to be in a chapter or two as an aide to one of the other characters and then forgotten. RWBY readers often bristle at too many OC's. Finally, in response to you're AN, yes it's believable. One criticism of Pyrrha is that she's a very flat character, in that much of her actions revolve around Jaune, so her fixation on him here fits perfectly well in it.