I like the way the story is going, but the romance parts could do some work, it feels a little bit forced.

Btw, a thing that you could do as an omake or in the story is Jaune challenging Yang to lift one of his weights.

It Would take arniescupon armies of grimm to take down white beard in this fanfic..

Oh shots fired

Ok good chapter also all the info also you made Ruby Qrow's interesting

*me after reading the last pair of quoted sentences*
"I see what you did there.", I said with a smirk on my face.

How about giving Jaune the same semblence. Aura amplification.. keep in mind it was stated that semblance evolves as A person spiritually mature...

We also have to factor that person's body seems to br naturally be compatible with that semblence.. For Example Phyraa Mention Jaune Have Huge Reserves of Aura after unlocking it.

Nora Discovered her Semblence upon getting Struck By Lightning.. Ren Discovers his Semblence during tragic childhood.

Semblence represents a person Soul.. .. if a person adapt.. Then surely Semblence can Adapt.

Methods of getting stronger

Semblences Mastery: through Mastery Even Semblence seen as useless Can be benificial.. Qrow can potentially direct his Bad Luck to a targeted Location

Aura Reserves and Control: was mentioned that by the Writers of Rwby that having huge reaerves of Aura Does not matter.. which might be somewhat true if was not for the fact that these writers are terrible... so let's change things up t. he More Aura You have he more control is Required.

For Example: a person with a huge reserves and have the necessary Control of their Aura would be capable in traveling in harsh environments like walking through a Hotvdesert or walking through a blizzard.

Full Aura Protection: normally Aura only protect from external injuries. But those With both Control and Reserves can also Use Aura To protect themselves from internal Injuries as Well..

Many rely so much on semblance and dust that they Forget The True Potential of mastering the Basics Of a compatible fighting style and Mastering Aura.

Basically Have The Story Simply Have Jaune Master The Basics Of Aura and Utilize techniques That Was Long Sense Forgotten Due To Humanity Laziness.

You can even borrow this element from Hunter x Hunter where proficient Aura Users Can Age more Slowly..

Begone , THOT! And it’s official, Nora is the best girl for Ruby. Great job.

got to say, damn jaune turned into one tall guy, love the story so far.

please continue this story I like the plot u did there

If he isnt a saiyan,perhaps he has ki?

hah good chapter and ending was funny also Jaune is a very reflective person isn't he

Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one!

Well the end was a bit dark also phrrya does not no want no means

good fic so far don't know why made ren a girl (to troll the shippers?)

I have a requested crossover story that I want you ( basically I find the idea to be a very unique concept / but I'm unsure what you'll think of it / if you will like it or not / so yeah ) :

Crossover between Devil May Cry ( Classic Version / Not the DmC Reboot ) and Dragon Ball Z ( Xenoverse 2 Universe )

Main Pairing : Dante ( DMC4 Version / In Character / just like in the actual game itself ) x Towa ( basically in the final battle cutscene Towa somehow survives final form Mira's explosion / but she is tossed into another world / and as a dramatic result / the demoness is left with a severe case of amnesia / not remembering anything except of her birthright name and powers / basically this out of character ness puts her in a line between neutral evil and chaotic good / meaning she can remain the same as what she originally was in her own world / or / she can follow the path of good to true redemption itself / in which she obviously will in this unique story concept / plus her staff is gone / making dimensional traveling absolutely useless / meaning she is most likely stuck in this new world until she can retrieve it )

This story will most likely start off at a teen rating but later on it will bump up to M ( Possibly due to mature themes )

Genre : Romance / Action / Fantasy )

Title : The Demons Girl

Summary : When Dante somehow finds an oddly attractive unconscious woman with long white hair and pale blue skin wearing a tight red jumpsuit laid face down on his living room floor after returning home to his shop with a freshly baked pizza . the devil hunter soon realizes that she has been struck with a severe case of amnesia and can't remember anything . except that her own birthright name is Towa and knowledge of her own powers .

To the author please do my requested crossover story that's all I am kindly asking ..

Thank You ..