I don't get it. did he suddenly so having a friend just because they are lost? it should be Jaune 1, World 1

Why?! The scene with Yang teaching Jaune and Ruby was the stuff of legend! Laughed myself hoarse at that

Damn! I like your writing. Hope u write some more! It’s cute, funny, and definitely intriguing!

"Even his identity is a mystery", this feels weak no other word for it. Salem has spies and a network set up to watch over the huntsman I feel like she at least would know of Jaune arc since his presence would be spotted or could quickly gain that intelligence to figure out who may fit the bill for a young huntsman who got into Beacon by her network with special aura abilities. You've built up Jaune's reputation enough that Salem or her minions would have picked up on his unique capabilities and skill as a worthy note to remember.

I feel like her forcing Cinder to spy on Arc, learn his weaknesses, and press on that and make him submit when the opportunity strikes is something she press on Cinder, because no matter how powerful he is, or may become he's still a lowly human, while she is the Queen.

I get the scene is used to play up Jaune's potential strength, but you also need to make sure Salem is a threat that still looms over Jaune. Make us understand that wow this utter monster thinks Jaune may be a threat to her since this is her introduction scene. Yes as readers of a rwby fanfic we most likely know of Salem and the threat she is, but this is her first scene in your story.

I'll admit Jaune semi using Ruby's plan was a bit weak. If Jaune semblance let's him act as a pseudo green Lantern I feel like you could of had Ruby and him both come up with a pretty surprising climax. It felt demeaning to Ruby and Jaune because together they could have made something unique.

What I've really like so far is what you have going on between Jaune and Pyrrha. Having bad blood between them is a good change of pace.

I think you should be careful with the use of stuttering a bit, most of my experience with socially awkward is that they'll mumble over their words, be clumsy with the execution of their sentences, and back track a lot with what their saying. I think your doing pretty okay with trying to make Arc awkward but it feels best when it's not relaying on stuttering to be awkward. Stuttering excessively reminds me more of a speech condition more than awkwardness.

For Jaune's semblance, yeah that is OP but it fits with the theme, he's a champion. I hope to see more of the skill of his sword and gun over his blasting things with aura. I really like the shield and pulse abilities. Spamming aura blasts is kinda lackluster I would have prefer him heavily amping his gun with aura ripping things apart. I'm interested to see what are the limits of his semblance and the weakness of it.

Suggestions that I can see with the use of this semblance, if your unfamiliar with it the fate verse anime there is a character name sabers who can essentially charge her blade with magic and at the impact of the blade releases a powerful impact it suit Jaunes style other media have use similar premise but it really suit Jaune.

If you want more inspiration for brutal swordsman ship check out the "shadow of mordor" game series combat. The main character style of swordsmenship exemplifies brutally and viciousness.

If you want some ideas with some cool ways Jaune could use his aura in conjunction with his sword look up "God of War 2018" axe runic attacks, they be a great example of how to blend aura with his sword and possibly spice up things with dust.

I'm enjoying the story.

I would say try and continue this one. The setup so far is okay in my opinion. Hope you can resolve the Pyrrha-Jaune setup. I am curious as to what you have in store for them.

To be honest, Weiss did set herself up with the JAFC sticker and acting like a high ranking member. If she had done her research on the JAFC better she might have realised she DO NOT want to be associated with them.
At least Jaune no longer has to worry about Weiss stealing his boxers or something.

Now if only he and Pyrrha could sit down and talk things over, with the magic word "Sorry" from both of them. Clearly it wasn't just one of them who said/did something that was uncalled for.

Keep up the good work.

Yeah, I am curious about the history between Pyrrha and Jaune. Hopefully they can talk it over.

why not write a new story and switch between the two?

Awww... I just started reading this and then to learn that it’s on hiatus...
If you decide to not continue working on this will you put the three chapters you removed back up? But please don’t give up on this fanfic. It’s so good!

At least this Jaune is great at fighting. Canon Jaune had both airsickness and wasn’t good at fighting. I’m looking forward to this! As of chapter one it seems like Jaune has the same personality but a different situation, I can’t wait for more. Please keep up the great work!

would've preferred those chapters be kept until rewritten so there's more material to read, temporary as it would be. but alright

Bold choice. Best of luck.

What's going on with this fix? Why did chapters get deleted?
On a different note. I love this story. Character interactions are great! Please update, not delete!
Thank you for writing this.

Hope you complete this