Reviews for The Sins' Return
Guest chapter 1 . 7/22
I clicked this story because it seemed interesting but I left disappointed. You really need to double check what you write (or at least get a beta reader). I wanted to give it a chance because I liked your summary and I can bear with the mediocre grammar but a multi-crossover? I wish I knew that before clicking it. It’s your fan fiction and I’m glad that you’re writing something you’re passionate about but your readers will get mixed up by all of the characters that you’re using.
NobodyOwens5 chapter 3 . 7/20
... hold up, did Raynare just use the Full counter? either that or I'm really confused. I hope it's just me being confused because not just anyone can learn the full counter, and ya can't just give away my main man's signature move to someone else like that!

otherwise a pretty awesome fic so far, looking forward to the rest.
Skywolf99 chapter 1 . 7/1
first chapter is promising but you need to fix the several typos so you don't break immerdion
Guest chapter 7 . 6/29
TRASH! TRASH! TRASH! TRASH! FUCKING BASTARD! FUCKING USELESS! FUCK YOU! FUCK YOU SON OF A BITCH!
thermalsnipern7 chapter 24 . 6/15
Aw yeah! It's heating up now!
Uday Sra chapter 24 . 6/14
Awesome
GrimmjowTaichou chapter 24 . 6/13
I thought you were bringing Doom Demons
Alias001 chapter 24 . 6/13
Great chapter. Looking forward to seeing whatever you post later. I for one hope that it’s the first chapter of Reaper Devil Queen. If it’s not, then whatever.
Guest chapter 24 . 6/13
Can you please update rose dragon emperor
mastercheif1229 chapter 24 . 6/13
Incredible chapter! I can't wait for the next one!
Ferocious Nightfury chapter 1 . 6/12
Actually issei needed 8 pawns so if you took it as that he would have had 8 wings. And wouldn't immovable defence been better as a rook rather than a knight? Besides you missed a rook anyway.
RARE2000 chapter 2 . 6/11
Seems like a mix of cannon and abridged meliodas. Everything is going a bit too fast though, suspension of disbelief is getting stretched a little thin, from meliodas having just the thing to solve their problems. One explanation that I can think of is that he's been around a while(lets go with at least 4000 years if we include pre-war sins cannon) and just has a hoard of useful sh!t in his hammer-space but the readers won't really understand that sort of thing as the pacing is *really* fast.

Ah, super crossover. That is sort of Ech. Blech. Bleh. Unabridged Sword art is a pariah for anyone above the age of 16 so Kirito and asuna in the first chapter had me drop the story immediately my first time trying to read this. RWBY is less of a crime but the base setting does *not* work well with full-merges. If its just characters you are taking then... Why? Why. DxD and 7 Sins both have a *deluge* of underused or one-off minor characters that only ever appear once. You don't need to do a super crossover just to get filler characters and too many characters make scenes unreadable as you have this weird 3/2nd person pov going on.
RARE2000 chapter 1 . 6/11
Everyone feels sort of in character if I imagine the story as an anime rather than fanfiction, but it still rubs me wrong that Raynare is immediately forgiven for evil. Maybe it would make more sense if she was reluctant about it, or 'just following orders,' or something. Willful, intentional malice is a lot harder to forgive, even for friends.
mastercheif1229 chapter 23 . 6/11
Absolutely incredible story so far! I can't wait for the next chapter!
Guest chapter 23 . 5/29
So Sephiroth is going to appear because Sephiroth?
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