Hi, I don't think you'll read this comment seeing you wrote this story a fair number of years ago, but i still think i wish to add my little remarks.
Up until the first half of the 21st chapter, where I've read so far, there are some mistakes in each chapter, which are somewhat understandable and i read that at a certain point you started revising more thoroughly your drafts. There is though at least a couple mistakes of continuity that have not been addressed at all and you haven't even tried to justify/explain why you decided to deviate from canon, in the form of Cedric Diggory being two years older than he's supposed to (he is in the same year of the weasley twins after all, and even in the event it weren't been openly stated in the third book that he was in his fifth year of hogwarts so in goblet of Fire he could have been in his seventh and not his sixth year of school, making hin a prefect in Harry first year would mean that he would be out of hogwarts by the time GoF take place. I'm not saying it is unjustifiable this change but since in the previous chapters you have shown a tendency to explain your choices it would have done right to explain why you needed to make him two years older, after all one does not need to be a prefect in order to comfort s younger student. The second mistake, if only in passing, would be saying that care of magic creatures start in second year while it's only in the third year that students start with elective subjects, and even here it could be changed but since your readers are we familiar with the origin source of Rowling books you could have explained why the change.

The second reason I'm writing this piece is to tell you that - even though it won't make a difference because I'm not one of particular importance so you don't need and surely won't take my opinion in account - I have regrettably decided to drop your story even though it was promising enough. Apart the sorting in hufflepuff that wasn't foreshadowed enough (i don't find a problem with draco being in that house, it's merely that it wasn't sufficiently backed by previous chapters who instead would have justified well enough his sorting into griffyndor, considering his growing tendency to go finding trouble. As i was saying apart the hufflepuff thing i personally find unbearable the treatment you are reserving to Ron Weasley. His character was not explored enough to even suggest his sorting in Slytherin, he had STRONG family prejudices against the house so a couple of lines from a girl he didn't know and who belonged in one of the most snobbish pureblood families, who would have indeed tried to be distant from ron and his "blood traitor" aura, wouldn't have turned him in a person who so thoroughly resented Harry and his associates after ONE verbal exchange that didn't go exactly well. The fact that in the span of two days you make him u-turn so thoroughly from all the years of love from his family and the teachings in rejecting pureblood superiority propaganda and the likes, and that his hate for draco WAS born from his father contempt for malfoy senior and his beliefs, and you managed to make ron endorse lucius malfoy beliefs and twist his dislike for Draco in "he's a savage even if is family blood is good" is simply unbelievable. What i mean is, you have completely, utterly, definitely overturned his character, without any foreseeable reason except maybe a very weak resort in making him the "rival" but still not backed from an introduction of the character that sufficiently explained this turn of events. There is also my personal taste in account, because even if at times Ron has in canon showed to be a prat he doesn't deserve to be transformed in this malicious kid your are turning him to.
In conclusion, i can handle misspellings and some changes not backed by evidence (care of magical creatures, diggory being two years older, malfoy senior NOT being upset by Draco sorting, and other) i can't explain some things (like how it is possible that Dumbledore protections failed to notice Harry wasn't where he was supposed to be at Christmas and HOW it is possible the dursleys let him be for days alone in their home while every time in canon all of them had to leave the house they left him with Arabella Figg AND Vernon has unequivocally said in canon that he wouldn't trust him not to blow their house up even if they let him for a few hours by himself (Dudley's birthday in the FIRST BOOK, for example, or when Tonks and the others came to take Harry in The Order of Phoenix, you know, the instance when the Dursleys left the house for hours believing they won the first prize for the best suburban courtyard in their county))
But most of all i cannot absolutely accept the distortion if Ron, who i suspect you have a strong aversion for. I could somewhat come to understand it IF you had him turn very slowly in a believable way, but as the things are... I cannot
So farewell, i hope you are still writing, fanfictions or original works an who knows maybe even publishing, and i wish you all the best.

Um yeah, Draco going into Hufflepuff means you just lost a reader. I enjoyed the story up until that happened. I can't deal with that. It's not where he belongs at all. Even with the changes to how he grew up it doesn't fit well to sort him there. You definitely must've been on crack when you made that decision. I figure you'll try to justify it a million ways moving forward and never quite make it a believable move so I'm done with the story here. It was nice while it lasted I guess. I was also baffled by the lack of Severus Snape during all of Draco's pre Hogwarts years given he's Draco's godfather.

What a wonderful story idea! I came across this on a list of original fics and man does this not disappoint. Can't wait to devour it :)

I think Theo might enjoy Wilkie CollinsThe Woman in White" if he isn't fond of Dickens. I know I enjoyed it, as well as the story behind the writing of it.

'At a whistle from his, Dragon stood up.'
This might be better as...
'At his whistle, Dragon stood up.

You have an 11-year-old reading Les Mis and UNDERSTANDING it?
I was probably about 11 when I read it, but that isn't taking into account comprehension! So help me!
You just crushed all my dreams. :(

I must say, I do like Theodore.
He's just what Draco needs, though Draco isn't the best influence...

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really enjoyed this, great story!

Muahahaha! I love the ending of this chapter! And Draco managed to prank them allat least, once he comes to and thinks about it.

YES!

Wow. Draco's personality really shifted.

hahahahahaha. I didn't expect that. Quiet a shock. A Malfoy in HUFFLEPUFF! HAHAHAHA. It's got to be everyone's worst nightmare

Great story.
Brilliant stuff – though blast, Ron! I like him in canon, his interpretation here is irritating. Stupid Pansy...

Can I just say that I am absolutely delighted that you chose to place Draco in Hufflepuff? Like, yeah it was unexpected, but it made so much sense and it is such an interesting twist to this AU! I love love love this so much, no just because I love the idea of Hufflepuff. Also, Ron in Slytherin, to me at least, has always kinda been a very real possibility. I mean the kid is cunning and he can be ambitious, he just tends to be overshadowed. Also, I liked how you did not totally twist his character like some are wont to. I like that you added stuff like his loyalty to his friends, which, I guess, is what caused his good nature to be buried in this case. And he was brave, which is that Gryffindor-ness seeping through I guess. Plus, Pansy/Ron is kinda my guilty pleasure ship so I loved that they interacted and seem to be pretty good friends here. There are just so many things I like about this fic that I can't think of any constructive criticism. I cannot wait to move onto the next one. Sorry this got so long, I'll just say good job and leave it here.