ouch my heart

And to think, her actual fate was even worse than this...

Absolutely awesome!

I love this story... I love Rin, especially, and in my opinion you have pictured her very well. I still hope shes not dead-.-

The way you describe her feelings without holding back anything is beautiful. I love the parts in which she remembers her sensei who loved them as the children they werent allowed to be and Obito who loved her as deeply as she loves Kakashi...

And the fact that she followed him to ANBU to remain his only link to what was and what might be. Without her, he might be able to go on, but i can imagine it being torture...

Really, really awesome.

I got here through shameless self pimping by Darksideofstrom at LJ and I am damn glad I did. :)

I like sad stories, when they are written intelligently like this even more so. Love the tapestry woven by the mix of back flashes, thoughts on the present and a future fate wished by their sensei. Very well written. Short and to the point and yet telling the stories about three life times. Well done.

I really liked how you spin images with your words ("a world turned crimson with loss" was my favorite) and direct a rhythm with your syntax. It makes the fic interesting to read and the moment it captures that much more visceral.

It's also a nice insight into Rin as her thoughts drift to the lost members of her team. I liked this conflicting portrayal of Minato, and the residual resentment over his death that left them lost. While he clearly had a positive impact on his team, he was also directly tied to the current circumstances.

The idea that Obito's eye would 'outlive' them all was kind of morbid, but interesting and not something I've read before. I also liked the comparison between her selfish love and Obito's selfless one, and how that ties in with what she's about to do: essentially condemn Kakashi to continue being strong and 'bearing the weight' of all these sacrifices.

Thank you for sharing this.

~Michelle

Very nice. Made me want to cry. :'(

oh that was beautiful! The writing and the imagery was gorgeous and I loved the line 'Sensei wanted them to be children, and he taught them to kill, and then he died and took with him all the answers to the questions Rin never had time to ask' so much. You rock.

A nice take on Kakashi Gaiden and interesting new view on how Rin may have died. Bittersweet, and I like how she compares her love to Obito's and then concludes that the heart's desires cannot be controlled. I liked how Yondaime was described as well.

*sniffle* that was beautifully written.

aahh..that was beautiful. There's a lot of great kakashirin fics out there and you made one of the best. good job

This was beautiful and painful. I loved this, and the explanation of Rin's absence. I also particularly enjoyed the subtle nuisances you threw in about the sensei ruffling her hair, like a foreshadowing of what Kakashi would be like. I love the character of Rin, and in my opinion, there's not enough about her. I thought this was amazing, and your style made it so easy to read. It was great, good job!

-Ash

breaking my heart, too.

Gosh...that was probably one of the best Kakashi/Rin fanfics I've ever read. :*) Absolutely beautiful descriptions.

Great account of Rin's finanl moments (i suppose it's the final moments) and her thoughts about everything. Very impressed the emotions flwoing through and the character developement.

...gah. Fuck.

O_o

I always wondered what happened to Rin. So far, this sounds the most appropriate thing I can imagine. Wonderfully written, and heartbreaking.