It’s a damn shame you’ve abandoned this fic because it’s really good. Also, the idea of a rinnegan Hinata is really cool.

Unless Naruto is a woman going through her period, the word you're looking for is 'ministrations,' not 'menstruations.'
Other than that small bit of unintentional humor, I've really loved this fic. Keep it up.

Genial f

Ahhhh that chapter made up for the previous one! It's maybe because I'm more of a romantic than a Dom but I really liked this chapter. The smut was great and I can see that you've dropped a couple of VERY interesting hints regarding future plot lines. I'm not sure you'll update again or even see this review but if you do then please update!

I liked the previous chapters but this one disgusted me. The hypnosis thing that was disgusting and then you had Naruto punish Hinata and it was too much. I love Hinata too much to appreciate a punishment fic. How can Naruto claim that he loves her?

I understand Naruto's feelings when he hypnotises her. He has someone he likes (probably loves) and he's scare of losing her and being tossed aside once she gets bored. No matter how much he's "grown" and how famous he is in the S&M world he's just a little child, scared of being ignored again and left on the side for other people.

You said this story was just smut but the plot, no matter how small, is still pretty good!

Love this story. I've reread it multiple times

Update soon please! this is a very very nice twist to the normal NaruHina storys i have read :D

While there is a point that Hinata would never do something like this, one should not that ITS A FRIGGIN' SMUT FIC. Of course the characters would be a bit (or more than a bit) OOC. I dunno what they're complaining about. I really like this. I've read a few smutfics before to have my dose of steamy NaruHina goodness, like Pile of Lemons and Lemon Chronicles, and I can truly say that you have more ambition and creativity than those fics. For one thing, your story actually has a plausible, in a wierd sense, plot. To compare, yours is like a porno film and theirs (my two examples) are like a porn vid. However, I'm getting off topic.

I just wanted to say that I really like your story and I really can't find anything wrong with your style. It's written well, characters have believable emotions and react as expected of them, and most importantly, it's easy and fun to read.

I really hope you can update this. Don't get discouraged by some people. I don't think there's ever gonna be something that will be perfectly loved. Even Mass Effect, which was pretty much perfection, was bashed for its ending (I did as well but Extended Cut blew me away).

I know it has been a while since you updated but I'd like to say I really like this fanfiction. I hope you consider continuing it.

the good thing is that there is a LOT of naruhina.

the bad thing is that you don't really talk about the other characters. i'm just saying that the characters that will play a major role in this should have like a little time for themselves which also contributes to the plot

Awww that's really makes me sad to hear that you got bad reviews on this story. As for myself, I rather enjoy this story a lot. It is really unique! Hehe X3 even though i don't particularly enjoy how Naruto is somewhat of a player in the beginning, i love love Love the relationship that is developing between him and Hinata! It is absolutely adorable! Hope you update soon! Can't wait for the next chapter 3

please continue this story

Well i normally don't review but what the heck why not.

Good Point: The writing style is quite good with few spelling or grammar mistakes.

Bad Point: It felt like it got a bit too fluffy at the end there with them falling out of there roles Dom/sub. Hinata actually hit Naruto even if it was playfully it doesn't fit. What i think happened was after Hinata found out that Ace was Naruto you started writing her as she would treat Naruto. This doesn't seem right to me since she fell in love with Ace the feelings just transfered to Naruto and she had gone into her role as sub so quickly that it seems it would have stayed. Now she didn't drop all of it still referring to him as master some and the sex part was still there. For Naruto it's the same problem he seemed to just completely drop his role as Dom. Now it makes more sense for him somewhat as he may not know if Hinata wants to continue that kind of relationship but still.

Anyway just some things I thought I should point out its a good story I hope you update soon

I think ur story is perfectly fine the way it is... really! Ur doin a great job and plz write more

Well, on the one hand I think the whole plot would be farfetched...

But you've done a great job with it. Please do not let the disapproval of others get you down. Keep writing this amazingly good fic.