Reviews for Change in the Seal |
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kristinalprime23 chapter 31 . 8/21/2019 Kay three things for you, one: the word is Akatsuki, second: the term is FUUTON: RASENSHURIKEN, and three: great job. |
NyxPrimordialGoddess chapter 1 . 1/29/2019 No hate, this is a great story. But how is Naruto going to claim that he loves Hinata when he literally just realised that she even liked him and he never acknowledged her existence before. |
dragonfox123 chapter 2 . 8/26/2018 Yeah it seems to fast |
dragonfox123 chapter 1 . 8/26/2018 Interesting chapter and plot and idea |
Bob chapter 1 . 8/23/2018 Not too bad of a plot however, the spelling and grammar was deplorable so that’s the reason I stopped reading. It got to the point where I was confused what was happening so please next time go through and edit the grammar and spelling errors. Of course I understand you’re human and everyone makes mistakes but the sheer quantity of grammatical errors and spelling errors Just overweighed my drive to finish the story. I believe that the story idea has potential but it’s moving WAY too fast. For instance, the relationship between hinata and naruto was very rushed in the first few chapters. Like after chasing and basically loving Sakura for years he decides that he doesn’t only like hinata but he also LOVES her? It seems too fake and unrealistic. I feel like hinata should’ve questioned him more about that! But I guess she hasn’t developed as a character at that point eh? Also the part where he reveals his secret was WAY and emphasis on WAY too rushed. First of all, the whole idea of him revealing he’s a jinchuriki this early on is very unreasonable especially in front of team 7 AND team 8. From what i have deducted, team seven and team 8 have not developed a relationship early on and it is a lot more plausible that someone as hotheaded as Kiba May reject him because he BARELY knows naruto on a personal level and also doesnt particularly like him. I expected him doing something like maybe going off to the side with hinata or something not something as drastic as what he did. Also him taking them to see the Kyuubi was probably the reason I stopped . Completely unreasonable to assume they’d be comfortable seeing the Kyuubi IN PERSON this early on. A lot of character development has been skipped and I think that’s one of the main reasons why this story is so confusing. Well! I feel like I explained in a moderate amount of detail of what you need to improve on for this story to be its best so in a nutshell; grammar, spelling, character development, and making different scenes (as previously stated) more realistic are the main factors to make this story the best it can be! I honestly typed all that because I can see this story has SO MUCH potential to be a great one that I can recommend to others so please try and work on it Kay? -ilyz |
thegrison chapter 59 . 5/10/2018 Needs work. A lot of work. You pace is way too fast, no flow in the story and there are holes in the story. Big plot holes that need to be fixed. |
firefox08181998 chapter 6 . 6/16/2017 if you say naruto was so fast he couldnt be seen how did he not get past garra's sand straight in the beginning of the fight? You seriously have to work on your grammar and spelling. Overall a good idea but needs improvements. |
Stormdragon6783 chapter 1 . 5/21/2017 First chapter. And this is looking pretty good, can't wait to continue |
ivanganev1992 chapter 59 . 10/2/2016 ch59 whatever evil will come it will be crushed Either pierced and burned broiled alive from chackra hyuuga death spear , or by Kuubi,TJ , or Kuuni or Hinata . |
ivanganev1992 chapter 20 . 10/2/2016 ch 20 Addictions in the wave , Love is in the air betwen Hinata and Naruto , chormons feelings and thoughts . |
ivanganev1992 chapter 12 . 10/1/2016 ch 12 So Naruto Uzumaki Namikaze Hyuuga . |
ivanganev1992 chapter 10 . 10/1/2016 ch 10 Getting Rid of the five element seal ? |
my 2 guys chapter 3 . 6/15/2016 that was good keep the chapters coming |
my 2 guys chapter 2 . 6/15/2016 that was good keep the chapters coming |
my 2 guys chapter 1 . 6/14/2016 that was good keep the chapters coming |