Reviews for Naruto Dragon Champion
Cyril Kain chapter 15 . 7/16
Summoning Gamabunta was incredibly dull. Naruto could have summoned Kael and had a speed and maneuverability advantage, as well letting Kael shower Shukaku in flames, thus melting the sand into glass. He could have summoned a larger dragon, or done anything other than going the canon route, like usual. Even summoning Faldren in his lore form would be good enough, since even as a librarian, I doubt Shukaku could truly harm the dragon lord.

Why is it that, when Naruto has access to greater powers, people still insist on this fight going the same way every time? It is really sad and shows a lack of creative ability. For instance, I gave FemNaruto chakra chains, and guess what she uses to fight Shukaku? Tip: it wasn't a giant toad. (further tip: I made her phobic of toads just to avoid all the toad related crap)
Logic Core chapter 15 . 7/15
Not Orochimaru's Edo Tensei. Even the earliest scans had the Nidaime Hokage note that it was HIS original jutsu that had been used to revive him. You forgetting or not knowing that is just sad.
Logic Core chapter 12 . 7/14
Scroll of Forbidden Jutsu, NOT A 'BOOK' OR SEALS!

At least make a piss poor attempt to be on point, and not just lift everything from the earliest of early scanlations, aka the worst of the lot.
Logic Cire chapter 12 . 7/14
The 'spiritual training' bit is bullshite. Nobody in the Narutoverse did any serious spiritual training, that belief is purely fanon bullshite. Chakra is derived from two sources, ONLY: physical energy/stamina and mental energy. Spirit does exactly dick in the Narutoverse.
Logic Core chapter 12 . 7/14
Naruto's apartment consisted of three rooms: main room/bedroom/kitchen, training room and, presumably, a loo. Only the first two have ever been seen.
Cyril Kain chapter 11 . 7/13
Kakashi choosing to train Sasuke alone is total bullshit. Both Sasuke and Naruto needed speed training, Kakashi more or less washed his hands of Naruto. And saying anything about Jiraiya is a joke, because Kakashi only learned about Jiraiya taking over the training after the fact.

It is just another example of the idiot author of the series going back on his own character designs, where Sasuke was meant to be a foil to Naruto and not in the spotlight too often, rather than the fucking main character he became. Any worse and the idiot should have just renamed the series 'Sasuke' and killed Naruto off. In the end, Sasuke's position of being a weak foil was handed over to Naruto, the title character. Naruto became a two trick pony while Sasuke got jutsu after jutsu, power up after power up, to the point where he was far stronger than Naruto AND Kurama at the same time! I mean, he had a good chunk of the chakra taken from ALL the Kage and he was still exhausted!

What a bad fucking joke.
Logic Core chapter 10 . 7/13
Going to assume your first language isn't English, but here's a tip: when something is heavy, do not keep comparing it to really heavy objects every time someone tries to pick it up. Just say something like 'incredibly heavy' or 'impossibly to carry.' Seeing 'heavy as a boulder' two or three times in the same chapter makes reading this dull.

While on that subject, stop using doubles to describe things. I am tempted to add this, and possibly you, as an entry in TV Tropes' 'Depart of Redundancy Department' with how often you'll say something along the lines of, "the obsidian sword was black like a moonless sky." And yes, you do that sometimes.
Logic Core chapter 3 . 7/4
Dragons are known in the Narutoverse, since they have at least a dozen jutsu named after them. You could have just had them point out that dragons do not look like that, since the Narutoverse uses Eastern dragons as opposed to Western dragons.

Kai doesn't dispel anything other than genjutsu. You have to force a person to abandon henge. There is no instance where a second party forcibly ended a henge in canon in any way aside from knock out, every other time it was released was because the user saw no purpose in using it anymore.

The 'release jutsu' isn't even a jutsu, it is just the user forcing their chakra to either stop, then rapidly circulate or just forcing it to cycle through their bodies in order to disrupt an opponent's control over it, aka genjutsu. Since it is a purely internal jutsu, like the Eight Gates, it literally cannot be used on anyone aside from the user.
Guest chapter 1 . 6/8
Guys Freedom Guard has passed away, stop criticizing and asking for updates.
soccermm231 chapter 1 . 3/6
um guys this man dies over 4 years ago
respect the dead
keller.blair1 chapter 12 . 2/2
You could have chosen some traditional Chinese armor stop trying to put European influence into it
Ryu wolf chapter 54 . 12/28/2019
Great job with this chapter nicely done
Guest chapter 8 . 9/30/2019
Don’t mess up your and you’re.
Ninja chapter 1 . 8/28/2019
I'm just saying this because it seems like people don't know. Freedom guard has passed away, and has been gone for some time. So for anyone asking for updates, it isn't going to happen. Also to anyone who would criticize his work, maybe just keep it to yourselves, respect the dead, freedom guard deserves at least that.
Reader chapter 25 . 8/26/2019
Haku was never formally trained by Kiri and never had a forehead protector. And if letting Kin in, who was part of the successful plot to murder the Hokage, the attempted assassination of Team 7's genin and the attempted destruction of Konoha, then why is it so bad to let Zabuza in, who only attempted to kill his bastard of a Kage and then fled his village? That's like letting Hitler into Konoha with little grumbling despite him being a genocidal madman, but getting all uppity about letting George Washington in because he owned slaves.
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