i like this ff so far but the part with his "friends" at the orphanage is not really nice 1. because he only knew them for a day or two and 2. there is not even a reason to stay in contact with them.

Hey I’m not reading any more if Harry’s in slithinth BYE!

It's mid 20th century and all of Hogwarts seems to be also studying in that American school. Even other people from the future.

While it's a sign of a great story when you shift between what is happening to different characters, you Beverly need to start with where you left them in the last scene. You just start with a completely new scene, with an unidentified amount of time passed where completely random shit is happening. It utterly throws off a reader and makes one lose interest if they can't follow the plot.

I think a magical python is also a v strong creature and dragons are just as deadly as a poisonous snake, so why did tom get a low grade? Just because he got a snake?

Ah. To get to Julius. Hut the vist of hurting tom? He's a kid, he could've died. And why were they even taking him? He didn't know thay they wanted to take him? They didn't say? So they could've killed him too.

Why was harry waiting when tom had formed a shield? He's not a kid, he ought to stop acting like one!

You mentioned earlier that tom was taller than minerva and now he had a 2 inch growth spurt and matched her height?

Okay, I take some of it back. You took the potion out of the plot. Thanks. I was almost about to give up on this story but I think I would like to read more now.

Yeha so as an adult he didn't think that he'd not have the maturity as an 11 yr old to deal with tom after knowing that he was killer but not having any other memories? He had his current memories erased too! And even if he views then, he won't have the feelings and all that he felt when he bonded with tom. This is ridiculous. This competent ruined a perfectly good plot, like you're trying too hard. I was actually liking it. And for no reason the thing with abraxas is being pushed aside because you had to force this new plot twist. I know it's your story and you can make it okay any way you want but it has to have a flow and make sense.

I'm not sure that Britain had a foster home system in the 1930's.

I mean seriously. Which adult would have their memories altered, willingly, without a threat, in an unknown world, in an unknown time? Especially as they came here on a mission! Knowledge is power, duh!

It's impossible to lose quidditch by a point! You get 10 points for the quaffle and 150 points for the snitch. How can there ever be a 1 point difference? For fouls the other team gets a penalty shot and no point loss.

So remembered his future till 11 years of age, but forgot his year till now? That's kinda useless. No adult would think it okay to forget their VERY important memories (all his knowledge about how Tom could turn out to be and people and all) just because it's pressuring to pretend to be 11. No one even doubted him till now, not even for a second so this potion seems forced in the plot.

If tom was born in December and was 11 before sep, he'd be oldest, then charlus in feb and then harry in july. That way they all turned 11 after the previous school year started and before the current one started.