Great job on the story I liked it alot.

Whoa.. that's intense...

“Who—or what am I?” Yusei began to say as he store into his reflection. The man that store back was pale, almost malnourished, and plagued with scars that formed an “X” on his right cheek.

This sentence has a small grammical error... You put store instead of stared. Here's a better sentence.

"Who-or what am I?" Yusei began to say as he stared at his reflection. It didn't look like him at all. The man in the mirror staring at him was pal, almost malnourished, and plagued with scars that formed an "X" on his right cheek. This wasn't him, no, it couldn't be him.

See? It sounds a bit better. Other than that it's awesome!

I was wondering if u would take a look at my story. Heart of a Duelist. I've only just started watching Yu-gi-oh and need more help. anyway, great story!

A bit rushed. I also notice you did this...

"I'll become a signer again...I know it"

It's suppose to have a period at the end. But I'm sure you'll change it. Plus, it's pmly a two-time thing, so no problem.

But what really bugs me is that you forgot to put in periods at the end of the sentence. Again, it doesn't *always* lose the period, just maybe a few times. Try to read over you story again to make the changes.

Here's another small mistake you had in there, "I just want to by Aki Izayoi, not the Black Rose Witch!"

I know you meant "I just want to be Aki Izayoi, not the black Rose Witch!"

You should probably make the change anyway.

Oh and the past tense of stare is stared, not store. You did store in the story.

The ending was good,just correct those mistakes and then your story is okay. Keep it up!

Plot was common, deliverance was so-so.

The articles you used were correct, but lack of comas and proper emphasizing throws it off. The triple periods honestly get annoying, and bolding the text is just meh. It was rushed and slow at the same time, and honestly confused me a bit.

It isn't bad, just not one of your best, though we all have our ups and downs now and then.