This was a really intriguing story! Thank you for writing a summary of what you were planning for the story. It gave a great sense of closure. :D

I dont undertsand why hinata is so close to sasuke and sakura?.. The last time i checked naruto(kira) wasnt even close to them anymore, he left team 7 and treated them coldly, and besides were are kiba and shino at? That just doesnt make any sense. I mean you would think she wouldnt be so close to the rest of team 7 because of how naruto acted towards them.

It's not a mask. There isn't really anything wrong with cannon Naruto. And - your Naruto is way more annoying. Plus the way you write is like the literary equivalent of shoving a pencil into my ear.

I’m glad you stopped writing this story because it went bad after you made the unnecessary choice of having naruto leave the village even pretending to be Kira when he could of just spoken up and gotten to know hinata as himself, exile was pointless your backstory doesn’t do much to cover it well enough like I said it was unnecessary.

I don't understand how can Naruto knows about the Sound and Sand invasion. Just because Orochimaru is interesting in Sasuke and later on a team from Oto attacked them, Naruto managed to deduce than Sound and Sand are going to invade Konoha ? I would really like to know about the logical thought process that made him come to this particular conclusion, because without having read the script beforehand or being a seer, I don't see how you can manage it.

You seriously need to stop referring to people solely by their age and gender before 'revealing' who they are. It's not a secret who the person is; all it does is make it exceedingly tedious to read

PRETTY GOOD

But wind is superior to Lightning chakra. All Naruto needs is to train a secondary water affinity to easily defeat Sasuke.

Look he exile himself but the author wrote naruto can come back if naruto is with the prevent

It was a good story up until Naruto leaves the village after that it was just a waste of time

Omg doodeee this is I am not even kidding but this is the first time I am having freaking goosebumps reading smt(I have read quite a lot and others did not make me feel this way) and just wow( this is like way over when u completed this story by still doode this is very very very niceeee) :)

the verbal spats they have remind me of Drake and Josh.

Too many flashbacks.

You know the story was was good until you made him leave it just went to crap after that I mean leaving for 10 years and all this crap you have him doing now I just can't read the story no more unless you go back and change everything and don't make him leave at least not the way you did and not that damn long otherwise this story is dead to me

The way you keep saying "partner", you're a homo, arent you ?
And constant fucking references...damn your fics are annoying to read.