...are you actually 10 years old or something? Fucking christ that was hard to subject myself to.

Tsunade when the hell did she even get back to the village? You missed that whole thing!And why would the raikage before take on a village with 2 sannin, the yellow flash, the red death, 2 jinchuriki and a guy that has near DIVINITY status? Isn't that complete STUPIDITY?(you can't become a LEADER if your THAT DUMB!) And wouldn't the raikage be a pretty much constant PAIN IN THE ASS to him? I fail to see how this future is even REMOTELY possible, You didn't have him DO enough, he basically stuck around konoha HIS ENTIRE LIFE (one trip to an amazon village that ended up him saving them from people they didn't even know about)...Nope, doesn't work.

Orochi becomes a PISS-ANT problem because he shows up too much, Okay, small reworking of canon, after the invasion he grabs sasuke in the chaos and disappears with him, you never see EITHER of them FOR YEARS AND YEARS, they get tsunade back (no orochi)... mission to snow, waterfall, land of birds, land of seas, land of flowers, NO OROCHI... he trains, (no orchi) even the akutski fight for garaa no hint about orochi, he has VANISHED! With sasuke. Then much later you find out they killed each other MANY years ago! (see they never mattered and you can DITCH them) I suppose if you wanted a BIG-BAD you could have orochi back IN SASUKE'S BODY! Wouldn't that piss off itachi? "Too late, sasuke's soul (what little there was of it) has been EATEN, I'm all that's left!" Orochi says to itachi! I wonder who would get the opportunity to kill him/them.. naruto or itachi?

As I said MANY chapters ago, your "epic fight" was an utter FLOP!

What always gets me, is if the sharringan is SOO revered? Why hasn't anyone tried to kidnap sasuke, IN HIS ENTIRE LIFE? He doesn't have a clan, so NO PROTECTION like the hyuuga.. So why has NOBODY even TRIED? It can't be all that great if NOBODY ELSE WANTS IT!Even orochi's thinking is FLAWED, yeah he gets the eyes and can copy jutsu, he still won't get family techniques or bloodline ones, and besides after 3 years his eyes would be toast anyway and there would be no more uchihas, even if he sired a kid, he'd have to wait 10-13 YEARS to take him over! So, what orochi thinks he can learn EVERYTHING in three years? I'm not sure that's even enough TRAVEL TIME! Seems to me, orochi, sasuke, and pein/tobi's thoughts are ALL a little SHORT on LONG-TERM stability. They seem like something a child would come up with in a tantrum! A TODDLER! EX. Sasuke wants to kill his brother.. AND THEN WHAT?.. He's not strong enough to replace the rep of the uchiha and it's too damaged to fix anyway, plus he's homosexual... So he doesn't care about girls! See?.. There is that whole "okay, NOW WHAT".. because all of them are 16-19 so.. basically just STARTING life. They need much more LONG STANDING GOALS.

My challenge is make a "hero" naruto story, where he's still HIMSELF and makes allies, but he DOES murder sasuke VERY early.. like before graduation... He isn't punished, isn't found out, BUT he took a life and one of his classmates! Not all dark naruto stories have to end with him wanting to kill everyone or obliterate the world (real people don't think that way)... BABY steps, he kills sasuke because he sees how much the people LOVE him, so TAKE IT AWAY! He isn't punished because the third sees him with his ball (he can see everything, saying he didn't see something is ridicules with shadow clones)... He sees EVERYTHING, but naruto shows SKILL and POWER, beating and KILLING the "rookie of the year" and then covering his tracks... A TRUE NINJA! Then START the series, as normal except sasuke is DEAD at the get the third knows naruto is hiding A TON!

How he kills sasuke is dealer's choice... (or author's choice I guess).. The force, becoming a prototype, getting infused by the gods, getting imbued with lightning, getting psionic powers, mastering the kyuubi, becoming a werewolf, becoming a vampire, getting the soul reaver, becoming a half-ghost, learning he's a half-god, or learning he's a half-demon, (this one is done A LOT and it's PROBABLY true..) making a deal with the devil, making a deal with the shinigami, making a deal with kami... I'VE SEEN THEM ALL! What's really funny, is their all KINDA possible with him... He really has the most "unlockables" of ANY manga flowing through his veins. After all, "dead clan that RAN AN ENTIRE CITY".. why? Nobody knows, but three villages FEARED them that much! Descendant from both the senju and uzumaki clans (which both came from the sage, so that's a little disgusting if you think about it) with the power of the ULTIMATE demon lord sealed in him... Yeah, this is just a reicipe for problems.

Personally, as naruto, I'd have killed sasuke back in the academy! "golden boy" dies at the hands of the person you hate but can't touch (kumo and iwa would SWARM konoha the second their jinchuriki fell).. It would CUT THE HEART out of the civilians, and show the people in power that YES "great" things are coming.

And pray tell where was sasuke going to GO? There are NO MORE PEOPLE stronger then naruto LEFT alive! Once you took orochimaru out of the equation, sasuke LITERALLY has NO WHERE to go! He becomes essentially POINTLESS, besides as weak as he is, let him roam, coyotes will eat him or something! Without orochimaru training THE HELL outta him, and CRAP TONS of "plot armor" sasuke is about the biggest CREAM PUFF in the series!(including the girls and throw away characters) A "gentle breeze" could end his existence! He could get into a fight with hanabi and get his ass handed too him! Or a fight with akumaru's puppy little sister and STILL get BEAT DOWN! He's a total WASTE OF OXYGEN!

Whatever happened to the sound four? Or haku? You had them just kinda VANISH... (again wasting all this time on constant fights, you should be BUILDING CHARACTERS) Nobody gives a flying fig if random jack-ass number 5 gets his ass turned to ash by naruto, we get it... He's a bad-ass, get in his way and your mulch... Move on!

Why would sound even still EXIST? Orochi ran the place by fear, him, his general, his lieutenants and EVERYBODY that was strong enough are ALL DEAD! (or part of leaf) And wouldn't leaf have crushed ANYTHING left?... That makes NO SENSE that it still exists.. Or that some NO NOTHING idiot like sasuke would know how to find it. Face it, naruto and sasuke have SWAPPED places, they ALWAYS do, naruto went from NOTHING, a weakling, a moron.. to TOTAL BAD ASS, scion of a lost clan, son of the fourth.. sasuke goes from the opposite side, having everything he BECOMES the NOTHING, the weakling, the moron! "for one to rise, the other must fall".

It's one of the reasons writing a naruto fic is so HARD, you have to balance the two characters, otherwise it ends up like this mess (naruto can throw sasuke around like a dog's CHEW TOY)... But naruto (in the beginning) is SO MUCH EASIER to give pump ups too.. sasuke, would be scrutinized and looked at under a MICROSCOPE... Naruto? "hey it's the fox" and while that might engender fear, it doesn't create disbelief. Or wondering "where, how".. everyone IS expecting great things from naruto, he just seems to take a VERY long time in canon to DO them! They are waiting on SOMETHING, (that's kinda apparent)... Even the ones that expect naruto to FLIP OUT, often say "if he went on a killing spree, I wouldn't blame him"... OFTEN heard in stories. They're all expecting great things, maybe terrible, maybe horrific, BUT great! sasuke? They are expecting... "whine, bitch, run a grocery store, stay out of history's way". So while it might SEEM that sasuke is the golden boy and naruto is hated, that's only to KIDS at school, after that's over, is a whole other barrel of fish!

I'd STOP hurting the kumo nins, I'd start BUTCHERING THEM! Everyone DEAD, what kind of message do you think THAT sends?! Kinda the "I'm done playing with you, it's now a SUICIDE MISSION"! Message I'd say!

Minato wouldn't use cheap tricks?.. Um you mean like the hirishin and rasengan? Lets face it, minato, madara, pein ALL the akutski In fact just about EVERY s-rank and above are ONLY that strong BECAUSE of jutsu, punching and kicking just aren't going to get you far enough! EVERYBODY can punch and/or kick, you need MORE to become FEARED! Being a BRAWLER wont CUT IT in the naruto world! Most probably because even civilians are taught basic martial arts! Lets face it, they ALL go to the ninja academy as toddlers!

I'd say the akutski IS HOSED! In fact they should just quit, my main problem with them in canon is they WAITED TOO LONG, what kinda IDIOTS let the kid GROW UP? That's just MORONIC if the father was so strong then the kid is gonna be tougher, and have the kyuubi also, it's imbecilic to let him grow! So FAILED PLANNING, by a bunch of mental MIDGETS and poor GOALS (really find something less ethereal then "peace") and poor execution by a bunch of people more suited to LANDSCAPING grunt work then subtle political maneuvering! Seriously, with that gang of idiots, it was like attempting to do neural surgery with a CHAINSAW! NOBODY has the first CLUE how to do what they want! They gather the tailed beasts? And then what? WATCH as the people of the world united AGAIN AND AGAIN to rise against them? Turning it all into one big NEVER ENDING war!? GROW A BRAIN! Their "plan" is delusions thought up by an IMMATURE mind! A CHILD could have come up with it!

You want peace for the elemental nations? Fine, there is really only one way, all chakra HAS GOT TO GO! ALL OF IT, no more training in it, no more ninja, no more bloodlines, or tailed beasts, or summons, or sages. THEN you have a CHANCE at getting "peace" BUT considering that's world death, it wouldn't matter, because the world would be gone! If pein is SO world-weary and tired of the fighting.. Why doesn't he just kill himself and do the world a favor already?

Actually if ANYONE of the series fits the term "runt" it's sasuke! Supposedly from a great clan, this idiot can't fight his way out of a paper bag without TONS of plot armor!He needs SPOON FED everything he learns, And needs his rear end saved as much as the GIRLS of the series! If his father was still alive he probably would have killed the runt himself for being SO PATHETIC!

One chapter, that's all konoha really needs, a single chapter and he CAN deal with everyone! It's simple, MURDER THEM ALL! then everyone's DEAD!

NOBODY flipping cares about konoha! Make one chapter where he totally DOMINATES konaha (kills sasuke, destroys the civilian council, kills danzo, rips kiba apart, murders all of the hyuuga elders TOTALLY DOMINATES IT).. then FORGET IT... MOVE ON, do other important stuff, stuff the readers will give a darn about.

So basically the exact same thing as the chunin exams.. THIS IS SO BORING! Dude this is NOT how naruto is, you GOTTA do missions.. this is like zanex!

You all know kumo is going to be here with us".. Which doesn't make much sense.. considering kumo and iwa are are enemy they wouldn't be invited, kinda like the chunin exams (notice they weren't present in canon). Because they weren't INVITED, only ALLIED people are there DUMBASS, Kumo and iwa ARENT ALLIES!

I'm beginning to understand how all the people didn't notice naruto's extreme look-a-like to the the third, if authors can be this STUPID!

Why would he mix elroyns chakra with anyone? WHAT POSSIBLE OUTCOME could he want from that? That seems totally STUPID to me. Wasn't HE picked as in THE ONLY one, so doesn't that fly in the face of all 19 chapters before?... CHRIST, stop smoking CRACK before your write these things!