Reviews for Sage of the Seventh Path
shadewolfedrt chapter 7 . 7/16
I always thought what Choji had on his head was Ino's underwear.
HurZysn chapter 50 . 7/12
now this is a very interesting story I look for from our updates and I do hope you finish be very disappointing if it didn't.. this is definitely different from some of the others I've read already.
Mattroxursoul chapter 48 . 6/26
Good work on chapter. A lot of people when doing a redesign of Kuramas cage do it right away so the payoff sucks. With this you let it build and built some trust up so well done there.
Mattroxursoul chapter 42 . 6/26
Had some work going for a while. Honestly though Neji should have been disqualified. He may have gotten away with the late attack once but two times is just asking for a problem. Naruto would be within his rights to fight him because post match attempted murder should get him arrested. Your story work has improved but its little things like this that you should work on. By trying to make the antagonists so dumb it actually weakens their overall strength. Instead ofna second attack it would have worked better if he just mocked them. Would honestly like to see you do another story some time where the antagonists are not written so poorly.
Mattroxursoul chapter 19 . 6/25
If they needed evidence from zabuza they could have mind walked him as well. Still unsure if you are going for more of a comedy story or not.
Mattroxursoul chapter 14 . 6/25
Fun chapter though not sure how Hinata ran out of chakra. Sure she uses it for eyes and releases a bit on each strike. Should take a long time for her to run out, not like she was doing the rotation thing.
Mattroxursoul chapter 12 . 6/25
Feels like writing is getting better as you go. Yet still a lot of consistency problems throughout the story. Naruto is already super powerful with no training or real work in canon. With years of training he should already be close to jounin level of strength outside of experience. So much for team builds having the best and worst together.
Mattroxursoul chapter 9 . 6/25
Hmm. I cant see those 3 trying to get Sasuke into root. That would not only anger Sarutobi whom would find out. This is not a nameless orphan who can br kidnapped but the last of a clan. Heads would roll if they tried to disappear him. Maybe worst it would call down the wrath of itachi. Like the one thing he wants is his brother to be well taken care of. How would he rebuild a clan from this? I know it's au but unless itachi is honestly antagonistic to his village and brother for real this is bad.

Also poison at school. In the vicinity of hokage? Is your Sarutobi that useless and dumb to ? It would make sense if normal people wanted Naruto dead and gone. Yet the elders know How sealing biju work. If Naruto dies the Kyuubi reforms at a later date in area where its host died. Why wouls they do that? They would need to seal it again. So talking like 20 years to not only redrawn and seal into an infant. Then wait till container is old enough to fight for them. Doubt Danzo can actually control it long term with his eyes.

Honestly you hurt your own story by making antagonists like this. Who cares if eventually Naruto overcomes them? They are to stupid to be real enemies of value.
Mattroxursoul chapter 8 . 6/25
Wait Naruto us better than the teachers yet Sasuke is better than that. Think you may be having issues with power scaling. If they are so strong to start. You leave no room for growth outside of dbz power ups. It would work better as a comedy in a lot of ways. A secret group hates Naruto yet he is so powerful at 8 it does not matter. There is no tension. I do like your writing though. Just would be better with good structure and real stakes. If you are not going for comedic effect and the story is supposed to be serious you are just doing Naru-stu type story. In a serious story you want your character to have failures and flaws from which to grow.
Mattroxursoul chapter 7 . 6/25
While fun I would say so many clones are overkill. You are talking about 400 clones. If they work for 6 hours that would be almost 4 months of experience. In order to avoid him becoming super over powered better off avoiding that. Cause if he graduates at 12 and is already the strongest ninja in town really limits stuff he can do.
Mattroxursoul chapter 2 . 6/23
interesting was worried this would be one of those. So far it is. But can be made okay by Homage laying down the law and killing everyone involved. If that was the first time he was attacked and the last. Amazing what some public hangings could do.
Mattroxursoul chapter 1 . 6/23
Liked the start mostly. Not a fan of the upfront love angle though. Make more sense if was worked towards in story. Tsunade should not act upset at Jiraya she is one of the strongest ninja in the world and likely unafraid of having feeliings hurt by him.

Now for the bad. Trying to kill Naruto is a dumb idea by everyone involved. Doctors or nurses would be found out and executed for messing with the villages trump card. Who is almost the right age to start serving as a deterrent. Who else would they seal it into? I mean may be possible from vessel to vessel but the idea of freeing Kyuubi is madness. Sure danzo just wants to kidnap him and not execute him but fake the death.

Have a bad feeling you are going to go the route where anyone in village feel a free to assault child Naruto and Hiruzen does not stop it like he most certainly would. He can't make people like him, but anbu would certainly Protect him. Now if ninja are involved they would be killed as an example of what happens. In these stories its beat to avoid him being beaten by people freely. If one person or a small group acted out fine but they would be captured. No need to build sympathy in this way. Only way around it is if Hiruzen is complying with the abuse. Now if a small secret group managed to hurt him once and do some sealing work it is possible. But odds get less likely if people are always trying to hurt him. Only good way to resolve these stories is have Naruto flee the village. But even then its just not needed mostly.

Its almost like how some writers on here use rape for every bad guy to make sure we know just how bad they are. It is best to avoid that unless that assault is fundamental to the characters involved. And not a mustache evil twirl.
Eventual Shaman chapter 42 . 6/16
I always hated that in Canon, Neji attacked afterthe Proctor said to stop, he should have been immediately disqualified.
Roxie.88 chapter 49 . 5/21
AMAZING chapter.a little short but most definitely worth the wait
Bjermen chapter 24 . 5/13
Kisame would destroy Jiraya without any problem whatsoever. Kisame was able to quite easily beat Killer Bee who scales to kcm 1 Naruto who is stronger than sage mode Naruto who is more powerful than Jiraya, in fact, considering Itachi doesn't know of Jiraya having sage mode you're insinuating that base Jiraya beats Kisame. What would of happened here is that Kisame alone would have crushed the summons and Jiraya
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