I'm sad to say that your original story had more flavor, more feel, more passion, I know that this story is a revamp but, sad to say, it's been poorly made. I read all 18 chapter's of Stolen Hero and I fell automatically in love with that story. How you portrayed Naruto, how Hinata acts like an actual heiress, how Hiashi treats Hinata like she should have, Hinata having an aura of calmness but can become the shy and studdery girl we all love when Naruto does something stupid, how Naruto's overall stupidity stayed the same, yet his character changed drastically but not to the point where it changed his overall dream... And finally, how Yondaime's presence did not turn Konoha into an unstable shit village that we all know (not counting Danzo).

I for one loved how you portrayed, used and interpreted Hinata. I think you hit her actual personality if she weren't as shy as a shyguy and firmly held unto her kind heiress personality, though shy, she is a whole lot more confident, to me this is a plus for an AR (Alternate Reality).

Stolen Hero... I simply loved it! And I wished you would have continued it.

However, Theft of a Hero was sadly, a bad revamped version of the amazing original fanfic you created.

Now don't get me wrong, it a still good, but comparing them, Stolen Hero was simply better and in my opinion, Stolen Hero had the potential to reach 2k, even 3k reviews if you continued. Sure in many parts you rushed it but it was overall an amazing read. Stolen Hero's Hinata and Naruto characters were simply outstanding and on spot for an AR (Alternate Reality). I also like how you added the real life character development between Sasuke and Kiba, the feelings they have for Hinata.

Now don't get me wrong, I like the idea because it creates drama and character development, character interaction and amusing dialogue. But KibaHina and SasuHina, in my opinion, are by far the worst pairing there is. I'm glad you're a NaruHina fan and this is what made me want to read this story.

And also the mystery that revolves around Konoha, we all know the basic gist of the story, Sarutobi sacrificed himself, Minato and Kushina had their kid kidnapped. Minato tried and succeeded in keeping peace in his village, the Uchiha Massacre never happened so the Uchiha isn't the main focus of the story. (thank god.) The rivalry that Kiba and Sasuke share for Hinata, only for the indigo colored short-haired, lovable hyuga heiress to have her eyes set solely on our lovable stolen blonde hero.

I'm glad I actually got to read a fine piece of art. I think that Stolen Hero could have surpassed many famous Naruto stories if given a more time.

I wish myself, that I could make the challenge, but seeing your work and comparing it to the one I had in my mind, your original story topples over mine.

I loved your interpretation of "Stolen Hero", at least the original, Theft of a Hero, sadly, just didn't ignite any spark.

Loved the story so far though sad that you quit on stolen hero but I understand that it is not easy to write though I enjoy Naruto and Romance that happened early in the stolen Hero. Though may because of how far you got in the story.

In both this and your original attempt you seemed to give Hinata and Sasuke some history together I hate the very Idea of them together but sometimes sacrifices need to be made for the greater good. I hope you will explain more in greater detail what happened.
And please much more Naruto and Hinata moments they are just great and are the number one paring.

Two Hinata’s I wonder how that happen can’t wait for it to be explained and find out why Hinata needs to hide her identify as a ninja and why her farther won’t let her be one and took away her title as heiress.

I wonder if the Hinata Naruto saw at the chunin exam speech when he first came to the leaf was a fake since you said that she recognises him but there was another Hinata as Hiku there.
My guess is that you are going to use Hinata as replacement for one of the plot holes near the end of canon. From the dream Hiashi had about Hinata. Sorry if it’s confusing but don’t want any spoilers for people who don’t read the manga PM if you want me to explain but spoiler warring if you do.

Good thing about Hinata being in a disguise is she does not have to hide her relationship with Naruto though I hope you will make her take it off when with Naruto because she can be comfortable with him and does not need to hide from him like the rest and will also help them build their relationship.

Hope the Uchiha get killed again especial Sasuke for how he thinks Hinata should of not denied him. Seriously I don’t why people like him so much I mean I don’t hate and found his development good and fighting style but it’s that dame arrogances that ruins him for me. In part one he was ok he didn’t admit except during the chunin exams in canon but he saw Naruto as a rival and although he was still arrogant it was more pride back then and I was a fan. But I realised that was mostly because of Naruto’s influence and he is an asshole without him I mean come on blame every think on other people and then kill everyone when you don’t get your way. This story shows how Sasuke would have become without Naruto although I wonder what Itachi was doing but I can see them drifting apart when Itachi and their father fight.

I bet the crow was from the Uchiha spying on them. I hope that Sasuke gets turned down by Hinata/Hiku and humiliated some more severs him right for trying to steal Naruto gal.
I’m sad that you don’t finish most of your story and hope you finish this one since it is great.
Hopefully next chapter we find out what Naruto was told since he knows who his parents are and they start to make up.

Naruto has the curse mark to make him hate the leaf more and keep him under the tsuchikag’s thumb.

Good luck can’t wait for more Naruto and Hinata Forever :)

Please look at my profile for recommendations and adoptions/ challengers something I set up to help the authors and will add this story to my recommendations.

I love this story. Cannot wait for more.

Good chapter, keep up the good work...

dracohalo117

You don't have to excuse yourself, if you couldn't update the story, you couldn't. Fanfiction writers are not paid to write.

Personally I think that it would have been better if Kushina came with her own original test instead of copying Ibiki's.

Naruto should use Henge to wander through Konoha and make his own inquiries about Minato and Kushina, it will be great to see his reaction to find out that they are not the monsters Onoki told him about.

That is the mark of a great writer. Fix it before anyone notices you messed up and then tell them that was the way it was supposed to be all along! Heehee...

.. I really like it... but... Hinata is Hiku? or not?... or... How Hiku Knows Naruto... Greetings! n_n

Nooo! Why you torture us with naruhinasasu love triangles? WHY? Sigh, anyway, few of the character interactions last chapter confused me a whole lot. If I am correct in my assumption, based on last chapter, Hinata is hinata and hiku at the same time?! What kind of voodoo magic is this? :P I read the story from the beggining(again) and I find myself asking, "who is the main character, naruto or hinata?". I know, stupid question but i got a bit confused by Chiyema's prophecy about Hinata being some sort of "key to the salvation" of the world with the knowledge she now unknowingly possesses. I really hope that Naruto kicks Sasuke's ass and that you update this great story quicky. Take care and please reply if you can. Peace! :)

NaruHina is canon! After so many tears supporting them... My tears of joy is flowing like Angel Falls. victory!
Looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks!

So Kushina knows, huh? Now it'll make things more complicated during the invasion. Wonder if 'Naruto' will try to take Hinata during the confusion or during the 2nd part? Very curious. SO not only does Leaf have Sound, Sand and Orochimaru out to get them, but Stone and the Uchihas have joined in. Boy that is going to leave a bloody mess, no matter how it all turns out.

Ok, did not see Sasuke being on the INvasion's side. And we saw both Hinata and Hiku at the same time, so is it shadow clones or are they two different people?

Good chapter...

dracohalo117

So how are their two hinatas?

So the Uchiha want to let Iwa attack so they can be lords over the dead? Really? Danzo was a moron for going that way in canon and now there they are. Its not like Minato couldn't kill them all in his own damn village with ease or something right? Its not like he could have spent years setting up seals needed to do such a thing "just in case"

Why do I get the feeling that Sasuke is going to find out the hard way that his brother loves his village more then his clan shortly?

As for Sasuke's kid looking oddly like Karin I thought so too, until Sakura was shown. Despite the oddity of seeing Sakura as a house wife and the little Ichiha fan that is mostly covered up while she is up on the ladder. I can see the girl as being from either one, the glasses really seem to scream Karin, but in the panel shot of Sakura you can see the eyes are very close in shape... and well Salad has Sakura's forehead.

I'm really looking forword to The Last now though, with all the kids being about the same age we will see just how Bolt's generation is really made I hope.

The Uchihas alive and conspiring with the enemy was great, I wonder if they will join the attackers, I think that their best strategy would be to wait until Minato was out of picture and then take advantage of their knowledge of the enemy's plan to drive them away and look like heroes

The first meeting between Naruto and his mother was not what I expected but it made sense considering their temper.

So Minato and Kushina know, it will be better for Onoki to write his testament, specially if Naruto ends realizing that his parents always were good persons that loved him and that his surogate grandfather has been lying to him all time.

About the unexplained things of the original, next year there will be short spin off stories, it is very likely that many of the explanations will be there.