Holy CRAP I can't believe what I'm reading! It's so AWESOME! I'm rlly worried about Kirito tho

Why are most of your words typed as if they are stuttering

CRazy yandere asuna better not beat me at yanderness because im the yandere queen

bOy amke asuna beat the crap out of sugu. Mega burn yandere style

Very disappointing that no new chapters

fantastic!~!~

Finally, do you have any idea how hard it is to find one of these stories that is longer than 3 chapters?

I like where this chapter went. Unlike Kirito, the solo-player, the vice-commander would naturally gather a team around her before starting off.

Yes, that self-admitted obsessive love sounds like a yandere but since she isn't homicidally jealous of other girls, it's harmless. The many paragraphs about how much she loves sounds like belaboring the point.

The basic premise is simple enough but I like the way you phrased it. Asuna saving Kirito from Kayaba's attack and then Kirito saving Asuna from Sugo's trap.

Lots of raw and vivid emotion here. It is excellently written. The scene with Asuna bursting into Kazuto's hospital room is especially so; I could picture it my mind without effort.

The hair tangle scene was also skillful. First tension between Asuan and Sugua, tenderness from Asuna to her comatose husband, and then seguing into a funny bonding moment with Asuna and Sugua. It is well done.

Coincindental eavesdropping is a little weaker. Why taunt him when he can't hear it and someone could overhear? Then again, a slimball like Sugo would no doubt do something like this. Pragmatism isn't his strong suit.

I love this so much! I love how the plot is and the the characters are staying in character. Please continue!

PLEASE WRITE MORE! It's so GOOD!

I think you give too much details.

When's the next chapter you have been gone for a long time. I love this story!

PLEASEEEEES PLEASEEEEES PLEASE UPDATE I love love love this story please I've you make more chapters pleeeeease email me at this is an amazing story

...you better not leave this dis-done...finished...or I will hunt you down and eat your soul.