Reviews for Beyond the Veil Book 3: Deception
N. A. Wennerholm chapter 17 . 6/23/2019
This is where I think Pamela is made Gaea Mother Earths Champion and Enforcer. And as a result, the Whole Earth learns that fact that she is given the Authority to Punish all humans who ruin the Earth. And at the same time let the Governments of the World know what the law will be and that they are to be obeyed or else. After all, there is a prophecy in the Bible in the Bible book of Revelation Chapter 11 which states all who ruin/harm the Earth will be destroyed. So The Luthor and Osborn Family will be amongst those destroyed.
exiledseaprince chapter 31 . 3/2/2019
think you can make a story about this but with harry being am male and having a male collective
Guest chapter 60 . 9/16/2017
great story
thereadingabsol chapter 12 . 2/13/2017
gee, i wonder who kiber is *cough* bieber.
Stone Elbow chapter 34 . 1/1/2017
"Ah, a hostage, so willingly presenting herself," Phineas commented as the Adaptoid grabbed Lois in it's fist. The Tinkerer prepared to reprimand its creation. "Don't squeeze too hard, we want her alive as bait for our trap!"

In desperation, Lois pulled out her concealed handgun, stuck it in the Adaptoid's mouth, and fired five rounds. The robot sparked and smoked, then suddenly powered down. Lois pried herself out of its grasp and barely managed to jump away before it crashed down on her.

"Lois 1, Avengers 0," smirked Lois. The Avengers just stood there and gaped. Except for the Hulk - he grinned, pumped his fist in the air and said, "LOIS SMASH!"

The Merc with a Mouth appeared and tilted his head, stroking his chin with forefinger and thumb. "Fanfiction of fanfiction, I like it!" he said, looking at the fourth wall. "It's, like, something I would do! We must be kindred spirits! Why don't we make like bunnies and... UNGHHH!"

Out of nowhere, a meteorite hit Deadpool's back, smacking him down. "No fair!" he protested, "You can't use author's privileges like that!"
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 11 . 9/8/2016
Every Dursley from Vernon and downwards need to be put down.

I wonder who the sorceress is.

Nice to see Pamela (as a full human) under the employment of RAO Corp. I don't know whether or not you intend for her to become a metahuman, but it could be very erotic if Ivy and Harry were to have sex. And speaking of Pamela, since she is friends with Harley, is she going to be featured in this story as well?

It is indeed pretty awesome that Harry has achieved fame and recognition of his own accord in this universe rather than being famous because his mother's murder allowed useless little Harry to live.
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 10 . 9/7/2016
Hmm, is Ares in league with someone else? It wouldn't be surprising, since warfare and conflict gives Ares strength, and anyone who can help him incite more violence is a good thing.

Since it is confirmed that Hippolyta definitely had sex with Harry in her past, my theory still is that Diana and Donna are their daughters. Yum.
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 9 . 9/5/2016
"She scarcely believed that was the case though the more she thought about it, there would have to be some kind of divine intervention to bring the plane down." Well, divine doesn't have to be a positive word. And with this arc occurring on Themyscira, I think Ares (who always has beef with the Amazons for one reason or another) is the likely culprit.

"She watched him with a smile across her face as she observed him with hunger dancing through her eyes." Giving that she had met Harry's future self, it's safe to say that she knows him quite intimately, which brings forth the delicious possibility of Diana and Donna being their daughters.

"...for you are adored by many, even the goddesses." Nice. Harry had already laid with the Norse goddess Lady Sif, so it's not farfetched at all to think he will be getting a booty call from the Olympian goddesses some time in the future.

"...and she knew that those who got up bright and early would have the most success." Preach sister.

Huh, so Raven got scorn'd by Harry? He doesn't seem like the type of person to let such a beautiful and cunning woman go.

"It would have to be no less than a god responsible for taken it down." Ha, Ares.
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 8 . 9/1/2016
"...and Harry was pretty much the definition of a thoroughbred stallion." Indeed.

Harry is working Dinah up until she will just tear his clothes off the next time they are alone together.

I don't think the story has featured Raven since the end of Bk II. when she got turned into stone for playing her part in releasing Apocalypse. I hope she doesn't senselessly make things difficult for herself instead of just joining Harry's group by getting him to seal the deal in the only way he knows how with a beautiful woman.

A clever way of introducing the Amazon women into the story. Who has the audacity and power to attack Harry's highly advanced and cloaked jet though? Giving the established fact that Harry had traveled into the past and will likely do so in the future, it is probably yet another foe that he had encountered in the past.
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 7 . 8/26/2016
"Some people might be, but they were the types that would white knight any cause and still defend the murderer's right to live even after their family had been tied up and murdered before their very eyes." Hmm, now which two old male authority figures fit that profile? I see a bumblebee hovering around a wheelchair.

Smart of Harry and co. to let the two whackjob symbiotes take on each other, but what the fuck Harry, why did you kill Kasady? You're going to give an insane rapist and murderer another chance to escape Ravencroft?

I see that you finally got that 'Kasady' is spelled with one, not two 's's.

Lilandra finally got her chance to worship her god properly.
Alex2909 chapter 60 . 8/22/2016
this story is as awesome as the last two, great series
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 5 . 8/8/2016
"Scott's really been stepping it up as team leader as of late. I'm guessing the Apocalypse and Zod situation put a shock into him, and he's been trying to think outside the box." Hmm, in the battle against Zod, even though Summers got knocked around yet again, he performed more competently than all previous battles.

"...but because it was in New Jersey and far too close to those douchebags on the Shore for his liking." I wouldn't piss on Jersey Shore-like people if they were on fire.

Why the fuck doesn't Harry perform a spell that destroys the DNA of himself and his allies after every battle if he is properly paranoid? This lack of precaution coming from Harry is astounding to me.
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 4 . 8/8/2016
I'd be lying if I feel any empathy for The Brotherhood tossers.

I'm happy to see Jessica Drew and Laurel making their debut in this series.
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 3 . 8/8/2016
"The three Black sisters if anything were worse, especially the middle one who came up with some rather creative and disturbing punishments." Bella's existence in this universe was confirmed near the end of book II, and I cannot wait for Harry to encounter the Black sisters here.

Blonde sevensomes are what wet dreams are made of.

It seems Umbitch's affinity for toads goes deeper than appearance-wise.
Hadrian von Eveschatten chapter 2 . 8/6/2016
"And it was Santa Claus alright, who packed a laser gun along with laser blasts from his eyes, along with a group of elves who had large candy canes that shot lasers." Are you sure Wade Wilson wasn't involved with the security of the decoy Fortress?

"He could not babysit every person in the world, some times things were going to happen that were out of his control despite his best efforts." Imbeciles are not worth saving.

Another fine piece of Kryptonian pussy for Harry's collection.

Why the fuck is Osborn locked up in Ravencroft rather than a SHIELD cell or a RAO cell? One would think that Harry and Fury wouldn't want Osborn to escape any time in the next century.

"...he did not know what he would do if he became bald. He was not too fond of bald people at all, in fact he considered them freaks, but that was just him." It would be prudent of him to kill himself as he would become the kind of freak that he despises.

Intriguing ending.
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