Kill Babies.

This is a phrase any author should adhere by. I don't mean actually "Kill Babies" but kill your babies. Kill your stories. Kill them even if you love them.

So if it wasn't clear: I am abandoning this story.

I realized my writing was mediocre at best but more importantly I wasn't going anywhere with it. I have several neat ideas but none with conclusions. I watch a Youtube channel called 'RedLetterMedia' it's a great source for movie critics and I enjoy them immensely. I was recently rewatching their review on season 2 of Star Trek: Discovery and realized some of there things applied to my own writing. In it, their biggest critique was how the show introduced ideas with no idea on how to resolve them. A "wouldn't be cool if this happened" attitude. I realized I was doing the same thing with this story.

I did enjoy the idea of this story. Exploring several Yandere stories in one narrative. But, what I really wanted to write was the situations / set pieces of a crazy story. I enjoy Yandere stories but they are a bit predictable especially when expressly told. While I was able to avoid some of the usual tropes in my story 'Little Intruder', but that story had a direction and arc.

Dangerous Sisters, not so much.

As I've alluded to, this story had no conclusion yet. I was wobbling between several paths where to take it. And I'd like to explain my thought process to give some resolution for those who were looking forward to it or fellow authors looking to learn. I have helped several authors with ideas and it's up to me to take my own advice from time to time. This story was the weakest of all my current stories and I'd rather work on others.

As an apology, I will be publishing a chapter of my most requested story: In Cest We Trust.

Firstly, let's look at all the characters of the story, more specifically, the Yandere Sisters.

Lori: Lori was meant to be the deviant. Her pursuit was solely sexual and to be a slow burn predator. Things like enticing Lincoln for sexual favors with candy and tricking him into enjoying molestation. I based her off a report of, at the time, a 21 year old woman molesting her 9 year old step brother. What I came to conclude was how difficult it would be to represent the mental trauma of that same situation in such a short time period. Her arc would be tricking the boy into desiring her until he willingly ask for some sort of service. When Lincoln does not, she was going to become aggressive and pin down the boy creating the main tension of the story. Protecting his innocence.

Leni: Leni was meant to be the denier. Her role was to constantly have her imagined Lincoln destroyed to the point she couldn't accept the current one. I alluded to this by saying how she believes Lincoln came back for her, favorite ice cream is cookie dough (when it was mint), and when he wants to see her. As Lincoln pushes against her ideals of him, she'd come to think that he was an imposter eventually torturing him to be the way she wanted him to be.

Luna: Luna was meant to be the isolator. From the start I try to give her a protective feel with a pinch of overbearing. Her over protectiveness would slowly increase to her hurting other people, as she'd never blame Lincoln. Her first aim would have been to get rid of Ronnie Anne who she would have seen insulting Lincoln in the park after Lori broke things off with Bobby. Next, after finding the sisters hurting him, she'd hide him away in her room for prolonged periods. A false protector's misguided intentions imprisoning the boy.

Luan: Luan's role was going to be the stalker. As Lincoln was too bright, she was going to find another way to watch him. After being forced to take pictures of a topless Lincoln by Lori, she'd notice that he didn't seem as bright through a camera lens. This would fuel a fascination that pushed her to set up cameras and follow him around. She was going to be a big 'help' to all the other Yanderes as they tried to get to Lincoln. She was the "safest" of the girls.

Lynn: Kind of obvious, Lynn was the abuser. I had no real role for her beyond she would derive pleasure from seeing Lincoln being hurt. A sadist in the making who seriously injured him for sexual pleasure. The issue was she would be in direct confrontation with Luna forcing the older to protect Lincoln. In the end, after Luna stepped in, her role would drop from minor to non existent.

Overall, the story had no direction. The final path was going to be: Lincoln slowly discovers how crazy his sisters are after finding Pop-pop's will. Due to him keeping quiet about the incidents the parents would go for a week long trip to sell the inherited trailer. This would leave Lori to finally pounce and cause a cascade of craziness. Lincoln would endure several horrible situations as he resolved to beg his parents to send him to the same boarding school Pop-pop did. With Lori being the main villain and Luna being his 'hero' it would slowly devolve to the point Luna would no longer let him leave her bedroom. He would be stuck in her room for several days locked in a large trunk for his 'safety'. In the end, Lincoln would be a shell of himself and sent to boarding school where he'd find that Luan had managed to install a camera in his backpack.

The issues were how to portray this and the fact there was no winning situation. Lincoln always loses and the Yandere's are static. No one really grew and the story never really 'progressed'. I also debated with the idea he would give up and become Leni's doll as she was strong enough to protect him and manageable as long as he obeyed.

But if you can tell, I had all these scenes and no way to really get to them. Everyone would be against each other. The situations would seem isolated, everyone would have an inciting incident then be on their own. Just a boring story.

That's why I will be ending this story. I'd rather work on several other stories with more potential. A clear path, not just cool ideas. Some of these would have been better as sole stories like "Little Intruder". Luna and Luan come to mind. I'd also say Lori's but I feel like it would be too smutty to get the true message across, molestation is bad and damaging.

If you are an author, it's okay to admit when you've done something wrong. Just grow from them. Due to this process I've been planning more thoroughly. Really checking if a story is worth writing. I try to recognize when stories are really just one shots, aka 'The Son' & 'It Just Kinda Happened'. The life of this story was short yet I was planning up to 20 chapters. That was foolish.

Weather it's descriptions, trimming non-essential characters, or just poor ideas, there is always places to improve.

This is my first story I have utterly abandoned. I hope I don't have to do this often but I know when to quit. I'm sorry for those who were enjoying my schlock. I just have other stories that I believe are stronger.

See you in my other stories.

-Whimfu1