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AUTHOR'S NOTES:
I am considering rewriting some or all of this fanfiction. As described in a review, I've made some errors in my plot that need reworking. Of course, my pride takes a beating (I'm just fiercely stubborn!) but I appreciated the comments. I realised I have a confused, and more 'overall' view of the Matrix, rather than an intricate understanding.
So, could you please read these chapters and tell me what you think? I have a full story in mind, of many chapters, but I see the reviewer's point, in that some of it needs to be revised. I will begin the rewrites ASAP.
P.S I won't be updating between 21st December and about the 30th - I am going away for Christmas. But please keep reviewing. I need the encouragement, criticism and support.
Thanks.
Have a merry christmas.
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CHAPTER ONE
Neo could hardly eat or sleep for the following few weeks. It had been such a shock. He could not stop thinking about it. He had wanted it, of course; wanted to share it with her with every fibre of his being. But he had not bargained for the emotions.
Of course, he'd been truly and deeply in love beforehand. That was unmistakeable. He'd never felt this way about anybody before - this was just not of this world, and completely mind-blowing and phenomenal. It felt so right, so deep, and so true. They were meant to be together; they fit together as beautifully as the ivory and ebony keys of a piano forte. Totally different and unique, yet inseparable and destined to be as one.
As he worked tirelessly, fitting the electricity, manning the wires, he thought back to that night, half smiling to himself in a rather boyish, lovestruck manner. He remembered seeing her as she strode out from behind the rocks in Zion. The earth-coloured clothes she wore loosely revealed the curves of her flawless figure. He remembered thinking that, at that moment, she'd never looked so beautiful. She'd been on his mind for hours, for days, and the only thing he wanted to do, the only thing he could do at that moment, was to kiss her. It was an ache.
Trinity felt it, too. Every single moment she looked at him, and saw the depth of the love reflecting in his eyes, she knew they were meant to be. Not usually romantic or sentimental, she realised that Neo had irrevocably altered her. She was still the same, tough, unbreakable Trinity, but Neo's love for her and her feelings for him meant that a softer, deeper side to her personality had been revealed. Surges of love coursed through her every time she thought about him, everytime she looked at him, every time she heard the sound of his voice, every time they touched.
The pulsing of the tribal music of Zion was only the accessory to the moment. It coincided with the memory, added to the emotions coursing through them as they kissed, as they embraced, as they touched, as they formed the unbreakable bond that was to secure their love forever.
Now Neo couldn't concentrate. Cursing aloud, he realised he'd cut the wrong wire in the circuitboard and zapped himself painfully, sending a nerve running up his arm. Damnit, he wanted Trinity to be there. Trinity....just the word sent tingles of love through his mind, his stomach...his heart.
'Neo, are you finished in there?' Morpheus called out, and Neo was shaken out of his reverie.
'Almost,' he replied, 'but I cut the wrong wire. How long have we got?'
'Not long,' Morpheus said. 'A month, maybe two. We have to prepare the ship for the sentinels by then. I know we can make it, Neo. I believe in the prophecy. I believe in the Oracle. And I believe in you.'
Neo nodded. He was tired.
'And,' Morpheus added, 'I know Trinity believes in you, too.'
Neo smiled.
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AUTHOR'S NOTES:
This note is in response to the review received by Elli Q. Thanks for your criticisms, they were useful for me. I still get baffled by some of the finer details of the Matrix myself. However, could you please send me your email address, so I can offer a more personal response? Thanks. :D
And to everybody who wishes to offer criticisms or advice; that's fine. But PLEASE leave an email address so I can respond. I like to feel I have had an interaction with somebody. Thanks.
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AUTHOR'S NOTES:
I am considering rewriting some or all of this fanfiction. As described in a review, I've made some errors in my plot that need reworking. Of course, my pride takes a beating (I'm just fiercely stubborn!) but I appreciated the comments. I realised I have a confused, and more 'overall' view of the Matrix, rather than an intricate understanding.
So, could you please read these chapters and tell me what you think? I have a full story in mind, of many chapters, but I see the reviewer's point, in that some of it needs to be revised. I will begin the rewrites ASAP.
P.S I won't be updating between 21st December and about the 30th - I am going away for Christmas. But please keep reviewing. I need the encouragement, criticism and support.
Thanks.
Have a merry christmas.
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CHAPTER ONE
Neo could hardly eat or sleep for the following few weeks. It had been such a shock. He could not stop thinking about it. He had wanted it, of course; wanted to share it with her with every fibre of his being. But he had not bargained for the emotions.
Of course, he'd been truly and deeply in love beforehand. That was unmistakeable. He'd never felt this way about anybody before - this was just not of this world, and completely mind-blowing and phenomenal. It felt so right, so deep, and so true. They were meant to be together; they fit together as beautifully as the ivory and ebony keys of a piano forte. Totally different and unique, yet inseparable and destined to be as one.
As he worked tirelessly, fitting the electricity, manning the wires, he thought back to that night, half smiling to himself in a rather boyish, lovestruck manner. He remembered seeing her as she strode out from behind the rocks in Zion. The earth-coloured clothes she wore loosely revealed the curves of her flawless figure. He remembered thinking that, at that moment, she'd never looked so beautiful. She'd been on his mind for hours, for days, and the only thing he wanted to do, the only thing he could do at that moment, was to kiss her. It was an ache.
Trinity felt it, too. Every single moment she looked at him, and saw the depth of the love reflecting in his eyes, she knew they were meant to be. Not usually romantic or sentimental, she realised that Neo had irrevocably altered her. She was still the same, tough, unbreakable Trinity, but Neo's love for her and her feelings for him meant that a softer, deeper side to her personality had been revealed. Surges of love coursed through her every time she thought about him, everytime she looked at him, every time she heard the sound of his voice, every time they touched.
The pulsing of the tribal music of Zion was only the accessory to the moment. It coincided with the memory, added to the emotions coursing through them as they kissed, as they embraced, as they touched, as they formed the unbreakable bond that was to secure their love forever.
Now Neo couldn't concentrate. Cursing aloud, he realised he'd cut the wrong wire in the circuitboard and zapped himself painfully, sending a nerve running up his arm. Damnit, he wanted Trinity to be there. Trinity....just the word sent tingles of love through his mind, his stomach...his heart.
'Neo, are you finished in there?' Morpheus called out, and Neo was shaken out of his reverie.
'Almost,' he replied, 'but I cut the wrong wire. How long have we got?'
'Not long,' Morpheus said. 'A month, maybe two. We have to prepare the ship for the sentinels by then. I know we can make it, Neo. I believe in the prophecy. I believe in the Oracle. And I believe in you.'
Neo nodded. He was tired.
'And,' Morpheus added, 'I know Trinity believes in you, too.'
Neo smiled.
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AUTHOR'S NOTES:
This note is in response to the review received by Elli Q. Thanks for your criticisms, they were useful for me. I still get baffled by some of the finer details of the Matrix myself. However, could you please send me your email address, so I can offer a more personal response? Thanks. :D
And to everybody who wishes to offer criticisms or advice; that's fine. But PLEASE leave an email address so I can respond. I like to feel I have had an interaction with somebody. Thanks.
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