Disclaimer: I do not own these people…oh darn…
Well…yay! I love it when you guys review! But eh! Only like three of you answered me! Oh well. Oi, bear with me. I had one person who was hot on my back…ok wait… not that way! O.O; umm so, there's a long review to this person so, skip. Oh and to this person, please read it. A have a few things I must say. I'm not mad, promise! Anyway, on with it!
CherryBombChaos26: Thank you for answering my question! Yay! Oh, did you change your name? I like it! And…yay I'm cool! Whoo! Thanksies! You rock! I like you! Who! You get a star! And a neko face! - Oh, and some cookies! You get cookies! Whoo:hands over tray of cookies with a Kumagaro holding a rose:
Annuket: Aww, I love you! Your review made me so happy. Tee-hee! You rock too! I love you all! I'm glade you loved the chapters. I was beginning to think I did something really wrong! Eh…I'm proud of them, but I realize I got kinda…dark…eh, oh well it seems I did well, soo thank you:gives chocolate chip cookie: Yay! Ooh! And… :gives a Kuma with baby breath:
Clarity2199: (PLEASE READ!)You ended up being my thirtieth reviewer too…hmm. So first off. You get a cup cake! With a nice little cherry too! Anyway…so, let's chat. I enjoy the fact I caught your interest with the hospital scene. Cool, I'm happy I made some part of you amused. Ehh…anyway.
Sorry that question was never mentioned. However, I did have Seto, and I quote say, "Oh for god sake Yugi, don't act like a woman." Women do that. No, I mean it, I've watched my mom doing it hundreds of times. And here it is, maybe I didn't get the feeling quite down but it wasn't anger, it was frustration and being upset mostly with the fact they had to do it behind his back like a bunch of juveniles. It was more Yugi being like… "Oh, so that's why Seto gave me his lap top and was gone for like half an hour." Eww…I said like too much…anyway.
To the next thing. By the way doll, it's really hard for certain people to tell someone they love them. I mean it, I've done it before. Anyway, and it was flirting, you know kinda…'take the hint.'
The 'glass breaking thing,' tell me what you didn't understand. But I'll tell you this now, it was supposed to be confusing. Remember, first person POV. Ah…sorry, that wasn't supposed to come out sarcastic. Geh…sorry.
Umm, ok, here's the thing that I will get a little mad at you for, not anger but. This I will defend myself on. It WAS NOT self pity, I DID explain that one. He WAS NOT committing suicide! He was picking up the glass, I swear. He was just being dumb and careless about. Even characters like Seto have dumb moments. I might like to point out he's had his share of "Captain Obvious" dialogue, where I was going, not shit Seto. Anyway, give me credit for studying his personality at least a little bit. What I was doing in these two chapters was exploring the part of Seto you only see a few times in the anime. Where he'd question himself and where he'd actually act like "oh I care about something that has nothing to do with myself." But, I like getting in depth with character's personalities. I'd probably be a great psychoanalyst (enter me into the scene of Yuki's psychiatrist visits.) Though, to agree with you, I was completely depressed when I wrote these chapters. I will admit, too much of what I was feeling was being projected into Seto at the moment. :watch as Seto throws a metal card at my head and says "Yeah you bitch.": One more thing on that. The chapters were named what they were for a reason. (Could you tell I was listening to "For Good" like a broken record?)
Comedy, yeah, it's my stronger point but tragedy has to happen as well I'm afraid. That's who I am. I like to put in real life. Now…you're probably asking, "What the hell kinda shit happens like that in real life?" I'd like to say, that shit never happens, but I've been in something like that. The thing with writing is…you tend to put own personal thoughts, feelings and experiences into it. So…that's what happened. I am sorry, I wasn't in a happy comical mood that day.
Uh…sorry you didn't like what happened. The thing was, I liked them, but it was more I saw myself improving in the writing department. I was like whoa…vague detail, it's cool! Depressing, yay! That's me though. I am sorry once more, umm, trust me, there will be no more sad chapters. …though…well…I hate to say, the love has just started. Umm…there's an original reason I started this fic so…don't know if you'll like the ending, but hey, I do appreciate you come with an open mind. Glade you think I have potential…I was honestly starting to think…oh dear god…my first flame…my first… "Your writing sucks!" But, I see you were helping not hurting.
By the way, your stuff was well thought out. The only thing you said that made me pretty much go "Nuh-uh!" Like a little child, was the part I pointed out. …he was NOT trying to commit suicide…he'd throw a dull heavy object at me. And it would hurt…bad. :sigh: That was fun. Oh one more thing…ok not one but, here it goes. I went into your profile, mind you this was when I was being, "you hate me! I'm a horrible writer!" And saw the "hate angst," and "love Seto." Then I was going… "Oh. That's why." So I re-read the review and felt better. Because then I realized, "you're not bashing the writing, you're not even really bashing. You just got frustrated with certain parts that are understandable."
Oi… :breathing harshly: That was long and tidies. Once again, no not mad, I just thought you were saying I'm a horrible writer and should crawl back in the hole I came out of. But no, and thank you, I will look at things and I will see what you're trying to say.
Oh, I read in your profile that you like Gravitation. …now…I'm not saying you have to, but, me and my wonderful Tohma wrote a Gravi story, it's a first person POV between Tohma and Ryuichi (bet you couldn't guess that by my name or anything…). Maybe you'd like to read it. Oh by the way…also…if you couldn't tell by my personality, I do the Ryuichi POV. Go figure. Which…might be another reason I could possibly butcher Seto sometimes…I'm happy go lucky…not…I'm gloomy and I hate people. However, being who I am, I think I made a decent shot in the dark with Seto's feelings and such.
Ok, I'm done (I need to stop giving you false hope…sorry! Only a few paragraphs more!), but if you could, maybe you could check out Tohma's and mine Gravi fic. Just go into our profile and its called False Hope with New Beginnings. And…I'll look at yours too, kay? I must be honest however. I saw lots of one shots…I haven't had good experiences with one shots… :shudders at memories: A few have been good. But…oi, anyway, I'll look at your stories. I'm curious, what can I say? Alright, I'll let you get back to your life…I apologize sincerely for this…uh…SORRY! Ok, once again, you get a cupcake, no five! Ha! Thanks again!
frogger666: You were the first to update after I updated! I love you! You're cool! You get…a German chocolate cake! Oh, and a silk kimono! Whoo:hands over a silver platter with cake and Kumagaro holding a daisy.: I'm blushing! You think I'm awesomely awesome? Ee! Thank you! Thank you for the compliment! Oh, and Joey…I have to admit…he's real dumb sometimes. It makes me laugh…oh, and Teá. I admit it, I used to hate her guts…then I put her with Mai…then I loved her. Whoo! Lesbians! Anyway, thank you for loving my story! I'm really enjoying reading your guy's reviews! You all just don't go, "You're cool! UPDATE!" You say what you liked the best, didn't like and then scream update, but that's ok. I like that! . Thank you!
The cheese girl I am: Yay! You like fluff too! I shall put in more fluff…and try some pretty lemon…try. How would the general public react to this? …I snort. Probably 'Grab your torch and pitch forks!' And 'A witch! Burn it!' …what else floats? 'Apples! Brains! Churches! Very small rocks.' …random moment…please forgive…but the general public would burn me. So…I think I shall join you in sleep. :curls up on the floor: THANK YOU:gives out muffins:
Love to be Anon: Don't worry! You get more…I will try my best at whatever it is I feel like doing. And thank you for still loving me, even if I did finish…but others…would shot me… :trembles, as a gun is put to head: Eh…don't hate…Anyway. …Arigato! You rock! I shall give you more:throws rainbow cookies into the air: You get a flower too!
Chapter 8: Once Upon a Time
"You know, you'd really believe after everything, you wouldn't be so childish. I hate surprises, and I all honesty Yugi…being blind folded isn't fun either. It's freaking cliché, how many couples end up doing this to each other?"
"Oh hush Seto."
"This better be damn good." …Patients. …You wouldn't have purposed to the boy if you thought this wasn't going anywhere.
"You'll like it you big grump."
"Just give it to me already…"
"Heh, ok, since you're demanding it so properly and all. Hold out your hand."
If I wanted to play these childhood games, I'd have my damn company find how to make a time machine and go back to the fucking orphanage.
Just obey. Might as well try and humor the love of my life. "There."
"Thank you. Now…here."
"Paper…you're giving me paper? That's messed up, even for you Yugi. What the hell-?"
"Oi, wait till I take off the blindfold Seto. Dear me, always jumping to conclusions."
Might I point out I have dealt with you and your friends all my adolescent life. I've learned to make things out as they seem to be.
"Ok, now look at the paper."
"A gift? I thought we gave them to each other after the wedding."
"It's just early. Besides, it's the perfect time for me to give you this gift. …Considering…"
What are you up to Yugi Motto? "I know you're honest, but I must question your motives."
"You still haven't opened the envelope Seto…"
"Alright, I'll open it." Start thinking of how to get him back…depending of course.
"…Like it?"
"Yugi…"
"See? I know how to make you happy. I know you're a business man no matter what."
"…It would seem that you do understand me Yugi Motto. However, I gave up trying to take over your shop a long time ago."
"Well, you took over my heart instead. That gives reason for me to give you the thing that started this whole game."
I really do love him. "I'd tell you that's one corny ass line, but you tied it in well with something else. So, I'll forgive it."
"Always business…"
"You wouldn't be marrying me if I wasn't. You'd be marrying Wheeler, god forbid."
"Don't even joke about that Seto."
"I apologize." Kissing that pout of his away will never grow old.
"You're such a tease…"
"You are blushing."
"Oh neh."
"Don't give me such a childish gesture Yugi Motto. I am not going to be betrothed to my brother's mental clone."
"Fine…"
"However," one more kiss to get back the responsible Yugi. "I appreciate you're business offer. What would be your terms to see this deal through?"
"Terms, Seto?"
"What must I give you for your generosity."
"Heh…you know Seto…usually people don't expect anything in return for this kind of thing."
"I insist."
"Well then…just promise me…one thing, ne?"
"What would that be?"
"…That…our story…our life together, will be everything our childhood hopes were of love."
"I dislike fairytales Yugi."
"Then don't think of this as one-"
"But I must now, this practically began with that goddamn line they always do. I'm not a high idealist, fantasy should be left in books, and my optimism is far from solid."
"Well then…"
"Though, even once believing that this didn't turn out like a story book ending would be idiotic on my part. So…Yugi…you have yourself a deal. Just this once, Seto Kaiba will accept the fact that my life has turned out very idealistic."
"Heh…you can't even say it's turned into a fairytale."
"I refuse to say that."
"Ok, so then…our 'idealistic' life begins here, right? Would you be ok if I said 'once upon a time?'"
"Yugi Motto…out of all the times I thought you were crazy…now it's glaringly obvious. 'once upon a time?' That's just ridiculous."
"It sums up the fact that our life begins anew now."
"I would fancy a different way."
"Alright, ok."
"Why don't we just say that, my selfish, bastard ways are over, and now you must find a way to break me free of my disgusting habits."
"It may be blunt, but…maybe its better that way, ne?"
"Yes, my exact thoughts." No one ever said you couldn't make those damn children stories less than subtle.
"Enough of that, since you dislike the subject."
"On to a proper reward then. Something to your delight."
"You're horrible, Seto…"
"I was suggesting dinner. Would you agree?"
"Hmm…of course." Ah, that smile.
"Shall we go?"
"You go, I'll follow."
"Ironic, you wouldn't have said that to me five years or so ago."
"We weren't engaged."
"Touché." To adjust my life style for another other than family…change can be profitable, though for once I'm not seeking profit. For once…I believe I'll jut seek out the day, and see where my first and last love leads me too. It would seem I've become a stricken fool. …Perhaps I like this better. We'll see.
Chapter 8:
Once Upon a Time- Fin
…This…is…done…? OMG! I FINISHED A FIC:tears of happiness: Oh…it feels good…ah. Anyhow. Time to apologize for my immense lateness! Agh! I rolled over and played dead for god knows how long…literally. Then I go to the happy cuteness of Disneyland for a week or so…and now…I am back. With an apology and the final chapter. Thank you all so much for sticking with me and my mood swing chappies. Love you all much and hey…if you do love me back…please read me other stuff. …please? ";-;" Woof? Meow? …ok, I understand if me other stuff isn't up your ally, so then…give me a challenge! Challenge me! Roar! And I'll do it. Might stay in this category, but I'd need an idea. So…yeah…challenge…challenge…done. Ok, love you all lots. However, the slacker in moi needs to end, so I'm off to try and finish me other fics, ok? Later! Love ya!
Ryuichi
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