Personal Hell

Ch 1 In the end

Ok, it's me. I know this isn't the kind of update you were expecting but when i went back and re-read my first chapter, i realized how bad it was so i re-wrote it and this chapter is the result. BUT, and yes there is always a but, it's very possible this story may change direction a bit. It'll still be a DarkNaru and a NaruXfemKyuu, but there ARE changes, and you'll see some of them in this chapter alone. Oh, also, PLEASE read my AN at the end, it adresses a different topic that i don't want to cover until you're done.

Summary: After Failing to retrieve sasuke Naruto realizes that his mask can only hinder him, so he lets it fall and shatter. Welcome to Naruto's personal hell. Naru x FemKyuu. Dark Naru.

"Blah"- normal speech

'Bah' normal thinking

"Jutsu"

"Kyuubi talking/ demonic Naruto"

'Kyuubithinking'

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Sasuke and Naruto stood across from each other, Sasuke in Curse Seal stage 2 and Naruto shrouded in Kyuubi's yoki, a sign that he was using at least one tail of its power. Instantly they both started gathering chakra, Sasuke's taking the form of an orb shrouded in lighting (1) while Naruto's took the form of a vermilion colored orb, spinning in his hand. Instantaneously they both leapt up, heading towards each other.

"Chidori!"

"Rasengan!"

Both combatants were obscured from view as their attacks collided.

Naruto groaned as he sat up.

'Where am I?' he thought, He looked around 'sterile air, white washed wall, the smell of sickness. I'm in the hospital.'

"So I failed to bring him back," He mumbled to his self "Why?"

"Because you are foolish enough to hide you true strength behind that mask of yours." Kyuubi said in his mind.

'It has to stay there or I'll…" Naruto started.

"Or what, you'll become strong? You'll be able to beat that fag you call a friend?" Kyuubi debated.

"I DON'T CARE ABOUT THAT!!!!"

"Than what? Why keep it? What sane reason do you have for keeping it than?"

"I… I don't know" Naruto said. Everything Kyuubi said made sense, why did he keep the mask. Was it because he was scared of what he truly was? How powerful he was?

"Fine, I'll…" Naruto started but Sakura rushed in.

"WHERE IS HE? WHERE IS MY SASUKE!" she screeched, her nails on chalk board like voice giving him a headache.

"He left." Naruto mumbled.

"I know he left you idiot. Where is he now?! Why didn't you bring him back?!"

Naruto hung his head, "I tried, I truly did. I gave it my all." he mumbled.

"Bull shit you did kit. That attempt was mediocre at best. You should have been able to take him out quickly and efficiently." Kyuubi interjected and a crack formed in Naruto's mask.

Sakura looked outraged, "You filthy liar. I bet you just let him walk away. You were always jealous of him."

Another crack formed this one large enough for some of his true personality to seep through.

"Sakura," Naruto started, his voice becoming cold, "I may be a lot of things but I am NOT a liar!"

Sakura sneered, "Yes you are. My mother and father were right about you, you're a evil, filthy, bottom of the barrel piece of scum Na— no. Demon. That's what you are, a demon that's not worthy to wear this headband." She walked over to the bedside table and grabbed his headband, "I'll be keeping this demon, and you probably stole it from someone any how, seeing as you failed the final exam."

Naruto had enough and his mask broke at the same time Kyuubi decided to flood his system with its yoki.

"You bitch. I risk my life, the lives of our comrades, people I trust with my life, for that bastard." Naruto shook with rage as Sakura froze; all of Naruto's killing intent was focused on her.

He slowly got out of bed, the yoki speeding up his already impressive healing abilities, and opened the robe, showing the chidori scar over his lungs, "He tried to KILL me for POWER! He betrayed the village for POWER!" he shook his head; his vermilion (1) colored eyes flashing dangerously, "Next time I see him, I'LL KILL HIM! Not for this village, no, this village isn't worth it. I'll kill the bastard for revenge."

"NO!" Sakura screamed, drawing a kunai and charging him, dropping his headband on the floor, "I won't let you hurt him!"

Naruto ducked under the sloppy attack and punched her in the stomach, sending her soaring into the wall, causing it to form spider-web cracks from the impact as her body fell limply to the floor, her overly large forehead cracking on the.

"This…" Naruto stared at his hand, flexing his claws, "…power, it feels good."

"It's always here kit, for you to damn the ones who damned you and help the ones who showed you kindness. Should you need it of course." Kyuubi stated as it withdrew its power, well, what it could as at least 2/3 were absorbed into Naruto's own reserves.

Naruto nodded and grabbed his headband and staring at the leaf that symbolized his personal hell, "Uzumaki Naruto," he tied the headband around his neck, "is back and stronger than ever."

Right then Tsunade burst into the room, destroying his door, "Naruto what the hell is going on!?"

AN: Alright, what do you think? I really want to know because i'll be holding a poll, on my profile, to see if i should continue rewriting or write the new chapter and post the old chapter one back up. Also, I want y'all to pick from these characters: Sakura, Hinata, Neji, Shikamaru, Lee, Iruka, Tsunade and Jiraiya. Whichever characters are chosen, I'll provide a sneak peek into their future, unless reviews tell me otherwise. Alright, thanks for reading and don't forget to review. Ja!