Hi, this is my rewrite of Dark Angel, with a few changes to the original plot.

Chapter 1: Saviors and Secrets

I looked up from my copy of Secrets by Lilly Singh as the bell rang, signifying the entry of a new customer inside Sonic Boom. I look up at the clock, counting the minutes before I could get out of my shift. I put down my book, and observe as a young teenage boy comes by the counter.

"Hi, um, do you guys have a new stock of electric guitars?" he asks.

"Um, I don't think so. Hold on," I say, and type at the computer in front of me. I skim through our stock on guitars, looking for the key word. I didn't find it, so I looked back up the boy.

"No, sorry. You're going to have to wait till Monday," I say. He nods, and thanks me before he leaves.

"Hey, Ally! Guess who got a job at Boo Boos and Baby Things!" Trish says, showing off her new uniform, which was a large safety pin hat and a pink caregiver's uniform. I look her over from top to bottom. I was about to speak when another customer comes in, and I look up to see my friend, Austin Moon, who was at present, being filmed by Dez, whose head was buried under the camera.

"Alright, everyone and this is Sonic Boom," Austin says, and Dez immediately puts the camera to my face. I grab Trish's hat and hide behind it. Dez puts down the camera.

"Hey, guys! Wait; is that Trish's new job hat?" Austin says, staring at the large hat. I nodded.

"The 200th one," I say, and Austin smiles.

"Hey, maybe we should celebrate," he says, and Dez agrees.

"So, you guys are going to give me a treat because this is my 200th job hat?" Trish asks, crossing her arms. We all nodded and agreed at the same time. She raises an eyebrow, before she shrugs.

"Whatever, as long as it's free, I don't care," she says.

"Sweet! I know a place! Piñata's Pizzeria!" Dez says, and we all leave, with me shouting at my dad that I was going out.

"Mmph," Austin says, stuffing another slice of Double Meat Lovers Pizza in his mouth. I tried not to put on a face.

"What?" he asks, bits of pizza spraying out of his mouth. I shuddered. I was squeamish about these things, no matter how little they seemed to other people. I glanced at my watch, more of habit than anything else.

"I gotta go," I say, staring down at my watch. How can time have passed so quickly? I get up, and so does Austin.

"I'll walk you," he says. I nod, and Trish and Dez made cat calling noises in the back. I roll my eyes.

I laughed at Austin's joke, as we were about to go to my house, which was of a good walking distance from town. Although, the trip was long, we didn't mind it much though. As a matter of fact, we enjoyed it. I walked along the gated community that we lived in, but tonight, there was a big meeting where everyone in the community decides what to do with the new burglar that's been terrorizing Miami. I spotted my house, and Austin and I walked across the beautiful stone pathway that was built right over my dad's garden. I was about to take out my key, when I spot that the door was open. Austin and I stare at it suspiciously, and when we went inside, the lights were closed. Maybe dad had forgotten to lock the door, I thought. I went inside the house, and Austin follows me inside. The rain falls and lightning flashes.

"I better stay here for the night," Austin declares, and I allow him to.

I sit at the couch, and then I hear the sound of something breaking. I get up and feel for my glasses. Not finding them, I let out a curse before moving to the direction of the stairs.

"Austin?" I call, but I received no answer.

"Austin?" I call out again, slowly coming up the stairs. I go upstairs to the room I asked Austin to use to take a shower. He'd always kept a spare bag of clothes here, so it wasn't much of a problem if he had to stay the night. I slowly opened the door, and saw a blonde figure standing just by the nightstand. I narrow my eyes. I couldn't see very well without my glasses, but I saw a blonde haired figure standing by the nightstand.

"Austin! Thank God you're…" I trail off, as the boy turns around. I scream. It wasn't Austin. It was a man.

I try to run, but the man has me pinned before I know it. He pushes me back against the wall so hard that I could hear my bones snapping. He grabs my throat and begins to choke me. My lungs screamed for air. I give him a kick in the groin, and his hand momentarily lets go of mine. It's enough for me to wiggle through and run downstairs. I run as fast as I possibly could, but the man holds me by my arm. How he got here so fast was a mystery. I try to yank my arm, but he was strong and then, someone hits the man. The guy doesn't go down, but he was distracted enough for me to take my arm away, which had a red ring around it. I was sure it was broken. I look at my savior. It's Austin. Austin comes by my side, and we both run. The man gets up, and points a gun. I hear it click, as it was positioned. We both run, but we don't make it put the door when the man shoots.

"Ally!" Austin shouts, and pushes me aside, just as the gun fires. I landed on the floor, and I almost screamed at the pain of the impact. Austin lands beside me, and I get up, and see red. The man aims for me, but the gun clicks. There were no more bullets. The man curses, and it's a horrible sound, like two gears gritting each other. He points the gun at me accusingly, before he runs out faster than I could stop him, but not before hitting me square on my forehead. I don't care. I run to Austin, whose precious red blood was slowly slipping away. I try to reach the phone, and call, but the lines were cut. I shout, and put my hand on Austin, applying as much pressure as possible. My hand comes out red, as I try to keep his blood from spilling away. But, my wound on the head weakens me, and I give in, dropping to the floor, letting the cloak of darkness take me. My hand slips from Austin's stomach, letting the blood flow out, taking my best friend's life with it.

So, any comments? Should I continue?