Wowww, wowww , and wowww,no words just wowww !

Shocking.. Wow.. Literally wow..So he lied to Tris ! About the timeline of things? Cause in Skipping Stones he tells Tris she died when they were younger.. So Zoe was alive and his wife already when he started falling for Tris..OMG .. Did not expect this at all.. Also is Zoe finally dead? What about the letter he was talking about in Chapter 1

What a story! So glad you told it! Can not believe he was married when he met Tris! Although I am wondering if Zoe died in an actual accident or did someone set up the "accident"... Nonetheless this was awesome!

It's my favorite when you write in Tobias's POV. These snapshots enrich his character so I love reading them for that purpose but most importantly, they give us the full and true story! So often before he and Tris kissed, I couldn't decide what his feelings and intentions were...and after that I had many moments where I was like "WTF are you doing Tobias!? WHY?" In this snapshot, I noticed that says he was actually trying to get her to leave him by withholding affection and attention but in the main story he tells her he was just giving her space so she could make the best decision for herself about college... Which are significantly different.

I love the humor in his POV, even if it's just thoughts. I love all the Tobias feels, even if unsaid. But Dear Jesus yes I confess that the sex is wayyy hotter from his POV.

This review is a long time after the posting date, but I wish I had found this year's ago so I could request more scenes for you to do! Again, fantastic job. Thank you for sharing!

Evey good girl wants a bad boy that will be good just for her. Every bad boy wants a good girl that will be bad just for him. I think this quote goes perfectly with this story.

This shud actually continue... but as i look at the date, i figure it wont happen... soooo, hopefully one day

This story is Natural. Direct. Fun. Non-Compromising. Even though it has parts of the original one in it this style of writing seems much more comfortable. I like it! A Tobias POV would be nice.

for now a request for the prom from his point of view? Really like your stories. Hope you feel better soon cause they are good.

Please write chapter 10 In Toby's point of view.

Do chapter 8. PLEASE FOR ME!

Amazing original story, love it!

I would love to see what Tobias was doing over the two years that we missed his actions, what he was thinking. As well if you feel like you could do it without repeating yourself chapter 21. Loving both stories!

Even better than my sneak peeks. You are an amazingly talented writer. You captured the emotions perfectly (especially the jealousy) and your descriptions are spot on.

Also, keeping you on track is one of the best parts of my day.

I love your story! you should write a book!

Amazing! I love your writing!