I don't like how noruto just forgave Hana I would have killed the slut

it goode

With your permission, I'd like to use the element blade and outfit he's wearing in this chapter. I'll be sure to credit you and keep up the work!_

Hey keep up the good work. And get rid of that cliff hanger! “Ya killin me smalls!”

Awesome book man. Keep it up

I disagree with me myself and I. In normal cercumstanses that would be right but in politics this could be used as a form of control or emotional sabotage. It could even be used to gain access to clan secrets. I know danzo and probably most of the civilians would do this

Ok so I should probably correct some things. Dobe not dube. Dono not domo. Dobe has no real translation but is roughly dead last. Dono means lord or something around that area and is often used for a person who is either at the same level or above as a sign of respect. Domo usually means advisor as in a major domo or chief advisor

FYI no way in hell would a male put a nother male in that position of haven’t ten wives because the wives would end up driving him mad befor he can hav an air and led him sympoku or kill him self because they dive him fucking ensane.

I like it despite some grammar and spelling errors.

10 wifes is bit much lol to bad it was abandoned

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Aww man! Your writing was so good and then you had to go and add some bizarre events and pedophiles! I mean, around the time frame of when he gets teamed under Kakashi, he is a PREETEEN! And then suddenly the really smart cool kid has SEX, x4, becomes half demon, and forms a harem!? What the hay?! I mean, everyone is entitled to their own writing, and their own opinion, but you should have warned people! Now I can’t get that out of my brain!

that was good keep the chapters coming

Boring. Awful dialogue. Lacks good pacing. Meandering and all over the place.

He's TWELVE, and you made him have sex?

Da heck