This doesn’t seem complete. There has to be more because the synopsis didn’t make sense if it ends here.
Jasper is a bastard, obviously.
Bella has no class, I don’t like her at all. She’s a bigot. She seems extreme even for someone who’s prejudice. If she felt that strongly she should have never came.

Bella was quite harsh and is definitely prejudice even if she thinks she’s not. I think there are good people and bad people of all races and a person who wasn’t prejudice wouldn’t have spouted everything she just did.

Sounds intriguing.
Her brothers ...unfaithfulness? That didn’t sound right to me, made him sound like her lover. Maybe...betrayal?

It's amazing I am glad that I checked out your blog and read the complete story. Its the best I have read so far and I have been reading fan fiction everyday from three three years and that says something.

I remember this story from a few years ago. I hope you will continue this story.

I bought this book back in 2015 and the sequel 2016, because those 5 chapters made me curious. (quite interested why u dont sell the first one anymore) - Back then I was excited and pleased, I mean, Ive known that it was an Twilight Fanfic previously and didnt expect much.

Yes, the idea is good, thats why I bought it - but your way of writing is just boring and disappointing to be honest. I expected (at least when the sequel was published) to see some improvement. But this wasnt the case. Your choice of words and storyline in the sequel made me cringe so bad that I couldnt finish the book.

Im not buying the next for sure it isnt worth the money,
Elizaet

when will you publish the next chapter... I'm eager to read it

I just read your story in your blog. First thx so much for sharing it. Second it would be great to read perhaps a sequel. And last the story was beautifully written and it had explained the differences of religions and the problems it may cause for people in those religions with each other. I loved the conclusion you reached at the end. We are all humen after you described Islam very beautifully and truthfully.

You are right...It is known even now some countries kill the girl that has lost her virginity by stonning her to death. I think its savage and sick.

please please please come back...i'm in love with this story...please

omg i have just read this story on your blog. and i am stunned at how amazing it is i think i can honestly say it's one of the best stories i have ever read. i was gripped the whole time. trying not to read it at work so i could not be interrupted but it was like an addiction to me it consumed me but in a very good way i think. mazen is so frickin hot n sexy and wow just everything. i would love to be his princess! i'm sorry if you've already got a msg or review or whatever from me i had to come and review here just to let you know what a gem of an author you are and because i want your new book so quickly i may buy it on kindle until i can get a hardcopy. thankyou so much again! LOVE YOUR WORK!

Aww... i really wanted to tead this. Its intriguing.

Pls update

Thanks for sharing your story. It was good,but with a strange ending. Is there more to come?

hey rose so I was wondering when and where are you going to post black Keys 2 because I checked your blog and there was no update so how can I be updated it u post anything