Your English is still pretty bad even on your last chapter.

Rewrite your earlier chapters with better English. No one is going to go through this just to read your later chapters, no matter how good they are.

Work on your English. Learn how to use paragraphs.

I like it so far, looking forward to the part.
One thing is a bit strange to me, instead of writing it likegiggeleswhich feels like it's taken out of a comic or manga) you could just write, ... person giggeled or so. That way the text flows a bit better I think. Hope that makes sense.

I’m just gonna say the only reason I finished reading this story is because I started it I don’t like to leave things unfinished

I wish is that Videl could be in the Cell Games to watch a whole fight between Gohan and Cell to see the truth

going to read part 2 good so far

great story going to read the next chapter

The plot demanded I make my way to Earth, conveniently with my tail removed, power drained and memory loss, so that I could give birth to you Videl.

I tried, I really tired to enjoy this, but it just became too much forced plot convenience and ridiculousness. The author knows how to write, but the story itself is lacking. If Videl being a Saiyan is your thing, give this a read, otherwise I wouldn't recommend.

Nearly cried for the first part. Good work!

awesome story at first I thought it was just going to be of their childhood and then I look on your profile and see that it's a whole series and I'm like Hallelujah

I love the directions you took this story. It's straight forward, sweet, and on top of that lays the groundwork for an exciting adventure. You have a really great way of telling a story, even back when you wrote this one.

Cudos and looking forward to reading another. :)

ALP

hurry make more

Aww. I loved that banter. And she's right. That long head of hair did make Gohan look adorable... and it was also one of his coolest cuts, lol. :)

Good work.

Really nice. I like the pace that this particular story has set and the way you've approached the training. You've been very thorough on it and that's always good. You've also captured the characters well and their personalities are well reflected in the writing.

Looking forward to reading more. :)

ALP