Curious how that line of strength and Himiko fits in that scene.
Your writing look's fine.

This is really good I'm excited to see what happens next.

I'm sorry if it's not the intended genre but I'm in love with your sense of humor and it makes the very minor OOCness totally worth it. This fic really made my day. You're awesome. Please write more.

Oh my yes please continue this!

Excellent start. Keep it going!