Interesting

Thank you for the amazing story so far. Hope you have a happy new year.

This story is extremely interesting so far, and it's a shame to see it hasn't updated in a while. Any chance that it might be updated in the future?

Ummm Unstable potential psycho detected?

Log Horizon is one of the very few fandoms in-which I don't mind OCs at all. Said OCs being well thought out and written is always nice though.

"Black Leaves"...

Is that... Is that a D&D reference?

Having read both chapters, I have to say that this is one of the best fanfictions I have had the pleasure to read. The writing is fluid, and the story quickly grabs the attention of the reader. However, there are a few minor grammar issues, something that is all but unnoticeable. A few questions I have I believe should be addressed. 1) While I have only seen the anime version of 'Log Horizon', I thought it was interesting that you chose to include blood within your story. Is there blood in the manga and will adventurers still come back to life in the cathedrals? 2) Why do you keep referring to Clancy as a 'ranger'? Does this reference have anything to do with his subclass? 3) Will all of the characters be affected by their avatar selves? 4) what is Algar's chef skill level? If it is low this would explain his poor cooking, but otherwise, you need to give a reason for the tasteless food that he prepared.
I would now like to compliment you on how you are handling Clancy's mental narrative as it compares to Orion's thought process. Not only are you showing true character development in the first part of the second chapter with the dream sequence, but you are also conveying a realistic sense of how different people would react to the situation in which these individuals have found themselves.
Finally, do not make the guild much larger. By limiting the number of characters, a more in depth examination can be given and more character development is able to occur.

Wow. I started your story and it's really interesting.
Hope to read more soon!

I really, really like your story. Good job. Please update soon, two months has already passed! (the word 'Londinium' reminded me of a certain anime/manga/novel.)

Good start(a bit worried about there not being an update for a month though), and a fairly standard, though rarely particularly well executed(I need more chapters to estimate how this turns out), region change.
It is good to see ACTUAL human reactions to such a world drop in. FAR too many simply accept it without ever considering the emotional turmoil of battle, let alone killing demihumans(something that I have a nagging suspicion that you are leading up to).
As for the region itself, have you considered just how much you can vary from the canon by this? The English Channel is fairly narrow and the People of the Land would definitely already be trading across it.
Not to mention the even more seafaring cultures of northern Europe. Since this is a Northern European server, the Scandinavian countries and northern France has to be included. I could easily imagine the Scandinavian countries having an event reminiscent of the Viking raids, where special Viking ships could act as temporary cathedrals.
Then there is also winter to consider. Would the characters need special equipment and so on during this(as it can get quite cold in winter)

Anyway, all of this is assuming that you keep writing on this story and develops it far beyond the initial woes of the protagonists.

Liking the look of this story immensely. The writing is good and the length is nice for a chapter. I would love to see if they ever go to the Japanese server and meet Shiroe and the gang. That would be immensely cool. Also looking forward to seeing how Londinium is governed. The logical choice would be similar to what they have in Akihabara but there are a whole host of systems you could choose from. Looking forward to where you take this story.

Very impressive. I prefer OC's in new regions anyways, and can't wait to see more of this.

Very nicely written, with an excellent attention to detail. Can't wait to read more.

My god this is good.

I'm not even joking here as I say that this is one of the better fanfictions I have read.

What you have done here, an OC-centric story of Log Horizon about a cast in a different server, is not a terrifyingly original idea but the execution was brilliant. The character's were introduced well and are all strong characters in their own sense. I'm especially impressed by the amount of character development that you were able to give Clancy in one chapter.

As for the technicalities, the writing is wonderful. The action scene was a good mix of explanation and movement. It's so good that I will soon proceed to read it over and over again in hopes that I'll learn to mimic your writing style, which I absolutely adore. (Hope you don't mind)

I give you my greatest regards and hope for another chapter soon.

Sincerely, Zikari8,fellow author and avid reader.

The concept of "taking another zone's story and making them your own" is well-executed in this first chapter. I must say that some of the other stories in this category that include [Original Characters] are mostly stuck in the Japanese server with the canon characters. Seeing the story of new characters in another server with other problems to deal with is a fresh breath of air.

That aside, the writing itself was of excellent quality, with little to no grammar or spelling errors. And for the characters, they seem to be well-balanced and realistic in their interactions with suddenly being sucked into a video game. Your inclusion of the "we can feel pain?!" factor was a wholesome addition as well.

I can honestly say that I haven't been this interested about an [Original Character]-centric story for a very long time, and that I will be following this to the very end. I tip my proverbial hat to you, good sir/ma'am.

May writer's block stay the f*ck away from you,

sayain673