Loved it. Please continue the story. Regards Toni Smith

Loved it, thanks for sharing x

Muy buena tu historia! Me gusto la referencia de canciones, playeras y nombres rocieros, gracias por compartir

Always will be a favorite, it's even better the second time around! Excellent job!

Just fallen in love with this story, thank you.

Hi, your story has been posted on Instagram twilight fan fiction recommendation page ( twifanfictionrec). Full review as below:
I know what you're thinking reading the name of the fan fiction, "naughty one" (read the fiction to get that reference). This fiction is a very sweet story with minimal drama or angst. The story contains lot of satisfying lemons, however, there is nothing too kinky which makes you wanna hide what you're reading. Overall, a very good read which will warm your heart. All Human.

Great story, i loved to read it. Thanks for writing this wonderfull story! Looking forward for more writing.

At first I was a little disappointed with their lack of communication, when they first headed downstairs at the art gallery. Only because they needed to talk, yet once again got distracted by sex. However, you changed my mind when she was sorting through all her internal thoughts. Or, I should say internal blocks. She finally saw what was right I front of her. Saw where it was currently, where it was headed, if she would just allow it to happen. I liked that she got her ILY yelled at her in the heat of the moment, as it was quite unique. I'm sure he knew exactly what he said, hoping it would get through to her. I loved that you went back to his point of view and he did, in fact, hear her whisper it back later that night. I loved that she did get the job with the school. Better yet, she ran to him first, to share the news. This was a wonderful little story and I rather enjoyed it. Thank you, once again, for sharing your imagination with us all. ~Christy

That's exactly what I was talking about in my review. They have her stay for a bit and then decide to make it permanent . . . it's a natural flow, not a immediate commitment. I loved that it was Edward that was there first. He's decided he doesn't want her to leave. I think he even shocked himself, lol. It was fun to read that they were running late as a result of her reaction to his suit. Then, they nearly had a relapse because of his reaction to her dress. Loved that. It is more than a little disturbing that she's spoken to everyone about her worries, over what she will do when winter comes, except Edward. Why is she not talking to him? It should be the very first person you should go to in a relationship, your partner. This is over by next chapter? How? There is so much story left. Hmmm.

That was a giant chapter. Both in length of words and what happened in it. Such a visual picturing how that leaky roof must've woken Charlie up. Good thing he was there to be woken. Even though Bella went back to her bed to call Edward when the roof came down on her, drenching her, it would've scared the crap out of her had she been sleeping. Which she would've been if Charlie wasn't there. Having her panic over moving in with Edward, was welcomed by this reader. Although some stories would use this as an opportunity to get these two moved in together, I like that you took it a different way. You made it into a talking point. One of possibly moving in together eventually, and him saying that neither of them were ready yet. If that changes while she's staying with him, that is realistic. However, jumping in right now as permanent, wouldn't be. That was great writing, what you did there. I'm laughing that they've not made it to an actual bed to have sex yet. It's been on his jet ski and for him in his shop, then now in his car. If she leaves him, which we know she won't, he'll have memories everywhere. Really liked that she said she trusted him and they went at it bare. Great chapter.

Yay! Charlie popped up randomly, just like I hoped he would. He likes Edward too! Woo~Hoo! He was great. It was funny that he wanted Edward to stick around for embarrassing stories about Bella. That was fantastic. His falling asleep instantly, was so interesting. I wish I had that ability some nights. Esme and her attempts at wake boarding was very fun. The BBQ with the families was delightful. I love that they all got along so very well. Each having something in common with the other. I'm seeing Charlie is skilled in the art of cockblocking quite well, lol.

Their time at the fair sounded like a bunch of fun. I was wondering when he'd find out about her lugging in her loot at the end of the night, in that neighborhood, alone. I don't blame him for his reaction. Only because you said no angst, no drama, did I know nothing would happen to her with doing that. However, had you not promised that, I'd have been worrying about it the whole time. In a different genre of story, something would've happened, I get Edward wanting her to be safer about the money . . . yelling at her about it in said neighborhood for all to hear that she is doing this nightly, probably wasn't the smartest thing to do on his part either.

Her taking charge, was so very hot. Going to his shop, locking it up, sneaking up on him, taking him with her mouth that way and then just leaving. Yes, very hot. Jasper's race happened. I didn't realize the days were slipping slowly by but, I guess they were. It had seemed longer, when it wasn't. I loved Esme's suggestion that Edward bring 'someone' to her upcoming exhibit. Surprised him, that it was a tattoo exhibit. Great date potential. Speaking of tattoos, I wonder if Charlie pops up at any point in this story for a visit? You did write that he was random that way. And, she did send him photos. I really liked his form of payment. So fun!

I'm thinking when she finally gives in to his chase, and falls to sleep afterwards in his bed, she'll get the best nights sleep since she's arrived in town. Him too. His drawings for her are so sweet. I hope he keeps those up, throughout their life together. Not just his chase. Hot as hell visual with the Cullen m n in their kilts, walking through town. Yummy! Funny song he sand. It was nice of his friend to let Edward call in his favor. Bella must've been beside herself watching that unfold before her eyes. Loved that she charged him for the ice cream, hehehe. Loved him thinking how much better it would be eating it off of her.

All of these outfits you describe for Rose, I honestly had in my own wardrobe at one time. I had the suede boots with fringe. I even had the acid washed jean jacket with the fringe as well. Went nice with the boots, lol. Had a lot of neon pink in my closest too. Good times. I liked that Edward saw what Bella was doing and called her on it. I didn't see it that way, until he pointed it out to her. Which means, neither did she. She kept running from him and that made sense. However, I did not put it up to her finding ways not to trust him. I think that is a part of it. The other part is her just running scared, from feelings she's never had before. I'm really surprised that Edward is actually chasing this hard. I'm very glad he is but, it is still surprising.