The egg better be a Beldum or ur vored

Rattata is actually a pretty good Pokemon.
Once evolved, it's hyper dang can beat a lot.

This can't be finished! Everything they went through is not there! I swear it can be longer! Because it doesn't make sense from Kanto to Orange Islands! I was completely confused and everyone else will be too! Ash's Eevee never evolved, The Water Tournament that Misty was in; never went in more sections, the whole thing with Legions and Team Rocket never solved, and more! I want to know it all!

Ashlesy your poke Mon story was great keep up the good work

Though I will say this your story is among best of Pokemon fanfic

Seriously. Godzilla

Don't know if I should say this, but this story strikes me as eerily similar to another I read a while ago. Namely, the premise of Ash getting a book that gives him a starting edge as a trainer, the way he gets Pikachu, how he gets an egg on top of his official starter, and the way he meets Misty (saving her from a Gyarados, no less). Coincidence?

Not a bad start, but it feels like you rushed some parts of it. I can't wait to see how this Ash and Misty's first meeting plays out.

Why did u need to focus on giving pokemon too brock and misty so much they're just some side character

the way you are going about this makes no sense, I mean the ash and misty side story, you have no reason established in your fic for their animosity for each other

this chapter seems poorly done, its so confusing one minute ash is being taunted into battle the next misty is upset at ash for no established reason in the chapter or previous one

the immediate reaction to ash yelling at his father is out of character to what you've built up til now, I can understand being pissed at his father not being there but in the first chapter you have Red send Ash gifts so proves he cares, but ash goes from 10 year old decently mature to 5 year old little brat faster than the speed of light

The thing that bugs me most about Amourshipping is their ages. Ash had journeyed through 5 regions, and if you say it was only one year per, that puts him at 15-16 going to Kalos. Pokemon camp was when they were 8. She's carried a torch for him for half of her life. If she had it for him that badly, why not get your Fennekin at 10, and get on a plane to Kanto to go find him? It would still take her 5 years to grind the obliviousness out of him.

I do feel the need to point out I loathe Pokeshipping. I find Misty's character deplorable for a variety of reasons and she's the main reason I can't stand the first 4 seasons of the show.

Who has what pokemon at home/the lab?

That egg is taking its sweet time to hatch , how many weeks has Ash had it?