Please put in one more chapter where ash and Misty go out in their first date and finally get together as a real couple I know Serena will be sad at first but if ashs happy she should be happy to plus having it end on this note dosent feel right either so please do end it on a good happy note where ash and Misty are enjoying their time together as a couple and being in each other's arms after all the waiting they did for that moment for them to finally happen

The amourshippers reviews in this make my stomach turn. And they wonder why they're the most hated ship in the whole fandom.

Will this story continue because I'm really interested in this story and I would love to see ash suprise misty by showing not just how much mature and less dense he's gotten since misty and ash last saw each other but also by asking her out on a date and eventually admit there feelings and become boyfriend and girlfriend

Awesome!

Okay Amourshipping weird, wannabes. Face the facts that some of us just don't like Serena. Don't expect us to be like, "Oh, MY, GOD! I LOOOVE Serena!" You guys can't force us and we just like Misty. What if we say. "You have to like Misty, done." No. Stupid airheads are just going around internet saying LIES what Misty is. We. like. Some of us. Love. Misty. So. Can. You. Please. Shut. Your. Annoying. Mouths. And. Deal. With. It? You like Serena all you want! I'm not saying anything, just leave us be reading in peace. Say happy 10th birthday to Serena!

OK Seriously what you pokeshippers have against Serena, it is not her fault of really and truthly loving Ash, Misty was just a friend for Ash. You seriously hate Serena, it is shown in your fanfic, you anti-amourshippers doesn't know what is truth love. Serena knows Ash since childhood, and when characters knows since their childhood they end together. You should start facing the hints of amourshipping on the serie XY, there are clear parts of truth love. Ash and Serena will be together forever.

Hey My friend Good story my friend is so good I loving it so much you know I follow you story you're a writter ok.

Okay so, since I'm on the way to work and it's a pretty long shift, I didn't want to get started reading a project like Wonderland and end up forgetting anything so I decided to review this instead.

This was pretty good although there were a few grammatical errors. I'm assuming you wanted Serena to feel "guilty" instead of good. Also attached to that moment, I think you forced Serena's feelings about Clemont too much. Like, the guilt I understand but then she immediately switched up and says she wants to get to know him one-on-one which is a little OoC. Also, where WERE Clemont and Bonnie in this? Just curious.

I thought it was interesting that Brock and Misty journeyed to Kalos for work, didn't mind that... But why was Misty there at all? Was she hoping to see Ash? Was her "Romantic" persons interested in seeing the sights? Why was she tagging along? (It would have been fun to add a joke where Ash laughs at her and claims she only came'cause she was hoping they'd run into each other, like she missed him.)

However their fighting was spot-on. Good job with that! :D

Also, why was Ash so inattentive towards Serena to begin with? There's no comment about something obviously being on his mind. And Pikachu was oddly irritable too...

I wanted to comment on was Brock flirting with Serena. He has NEVER flirted with someone younger then him in canon, always with older girls/women. Serena is TEN, and even if she's not in this fic, she's still at least a couple of years younger than him. Not to mention Brock gets up and leaves her alone without "assistance" from Misty or one of his Pokemon. That was odd too. Is he maturing?

I feel like Serena's climactic moment - i.e., "okay with that" - could have had better build up. She basically spent the entire thing trying to spend time with Ash alone only to get abandoned so he could hand with his old friends and them one line about her realizing there may be someone else for him and then... That's it. If nothing else, Serena's character has been presented in canon as rather obstinate and stubborn when it comes to moving on from Ash. She left home to meet him again and has practically shrugged off relationships with other characters (like Clemont), as well as taking the introduction of any girl her age who speaks Ash's name as a threat.

I'm not sure how far along down the road this is after they've met each other again but I don't think her initial reactions or even her final admission was strong enough.

Um, wow, I hope that didn't come out badly. I promise that I'm only trying to help! As a final note, you should try separating authors notes from the fic with some sort of symbol or line or something.

aww... that's sweet. Not much MistyXAsh moments but sweet

So many people ship Ash and Serena now I'm really glad you made this story

POKESHIPPING FOREVER TAKE THAT SERENA ahahaha

Everything is perfect in character. Written well. I even love Serena's self argument.

Pathetic pokeshippers will always stay pathetic.

This was actually a good anti-amour story. It wasn't all immature making Serena SUPER OOC It was more..chillaxed, y'now! Keep it up, and great job!

Excellent story, keep up the good work.