Damn. I know that it's necessary, but it doesn't mean I have to like it. Even though it's really well done. It's not like this story is pure gold. Nop. Not at all.

Hell who am I kidding... This story is really interesting. I pretty much like everything about it... expect... that I almost cried... like 3times... For the pure anguish and horror that Moka had to endure and felt...

You should change this stories tags to Tragedy and Drama. (Just kidding! Your story, your call lol)

But seriously, what a ride it have been. Definetely gonna come back to this story some time in the future!

Thank you for your hard work!

Well done.

Just damn. Thats deep. And harsh.

Holy shit. That's intense. Well done. Really liked the development and interactions between characters!

Ahhhhh, it's getting pretty intense! I like it!

I think that something big will happen next chapter lol

No, don't make her like Inner Moka. Let her be herself, and develop her as you see fit. She suffered. Harshly. Not only did she lost all her friends... family and world? She on top of that, suffered fate, some say, worse than death... It's.. fuck... it just too much.

Damn. this is interesting! I only hope that Natsu will 'man' up so to say.

It's too soon, I know, but I want more interactions between them lol :D The suspense is killing meeee

Well ,we will see, what Author did in the next chapter :)

Holy fuck! I didn't expect it to be that.. that dark. Holy fuck! Im sorry for Moka. Hell.

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Well, what can I say? I really like the first chapter. It's unique. Refreshing. I can't wait to read more. To be honest, I was scrolling down to press 'next' to read another chapter, when I noticed that your A/N is really long. I decided to read it through.

And oh boy, you are good!

I completely agree with you! Here, in fanfiction, no one is paying authors to write and no one is paying readers to read. We come here to either read or write. FOR FUN. TO PASS THE TIME. Not to flame and cry "why are you doing this and not that?" Fuck you. Go write it yourself if you don't like it. That's why I always appreciate authors work, even if I don't like something in it.

About the Outer and Inner Moka's. Honestly, If you don't already know from my profile picture, Im HUGE fan of Inner Moka. BUT. I like Outer all the same. SHE doesn't get enough attention. Of course she's not as strong or etc. as Inner, but still , she's an awesome character.

I don't know about 'hating' Inner Moka, yea she's arrogant and prideful, but still, after reading manga... She did it for a reason... And it's a damn well one. Of course, her upbringing factors it as well.

i completely support your opinion about OuterInner! Honestly, if Inner Moka didn't have grey'ish hair and red eyes, I would like them both equally lol :D They are both awesome characters, which has both positive things and negative things about it.

Of course, the best Moka is "True" Moka, which in my mind is the mix of both. But well, that's stretching and it's just my opinion :D To both have that caring side and that arrogance which is borderline petty. :D

Well, thank you for your work. And thank you for not TAKING SHIT FROM THOSE STUPID PEOPLE WHO DOESN'T APPREACIATE THE HARD WORK YOU, AUTHORS, DO.

ONTO the next chapter :)

Great chapter! Can't wait to see what happens next!

Honestly, I've always felt that Outer and Inner Moka should have been two halves of a same whole and that the end result should have been Outer and Inner Moka fusing to become the True Moka, Someone who is kind yet is confident and willing to fight for her beliefs. Outer Moka is too timid and Inner Moka was WAY too arrogant at the start of Canon for someone with zero combat training and just pure power and was only kicking the asses of low-level mooks. I suspect the real reasons that Outer Moka is hated are: She looks like a buxom Sakura Haruno from Naruto, She never tried to learn how to fight when she first learned that she couldn't pull off the Rosario by herself meaning that if she was attacked then she would be defenseless, She is basically a damsel in distress until the Rosario is pulled off which is something people have a tenancy to dislike.

did natsu really just get tired of running for like a couple minutes.

Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one!

Ok. First things first the ideas here are really quite good. Im assuming dark moka is the instincts of her race like lucy in elfen lied. The magic is interesting that shes using.

Im not sure what to think about laxus assulting her. Id like to know why is he just a ass in your mind or is it the magic that he uses that cuases that behavor. He did seem to regret things.

Also i understand u dont like ura moka. She does come of a bit strong. A friend of mine after seeing the initial anime found her to be arrogant and power hungry etc. She certainly comes off as such.

Know so were clear i like outer damn near as much as i like inner. Despite you not likeing inner please try to understand her character so that way outer can. Outer can learn a great deal from inner instead of having her confidence put down by here. Here inner self didnt really ever look down on her outer self.

Inner moka was for all intents a tragic character.
Looking at the enviroment she grew up in its no suprise inner was jaded.
She was also fiercly protective of her outer self. And frankly all of her friendships
This is the reason i like inner moka her selflessnes. The selfish mean vampire persona she showed all the time was a false... A facade.
Look at erza. How she came of so bitchy tell we learn about her.
Moka inner is very much similer. The reason she came of so dark and evil in the first 24 ch. Of the series was cuase just like how you have outer portrayed here in this fic inner bares self guilt and self hatred towards herself. She acted that way to keep tsukune away from here and pushed him on her outer self she was certain that if she got close to him shed hurt him.
She feels that she had to remain in side the seal or people would be hurt and that shed weaken to being normal like outer and by extension be unable to protect her and her loved ones. Inner played the martr she wanted everyone to hate her so they could love her outer self.

Im not saying this to u to critizise this story. The story is good. And i understand u dislike inner.
Im not asking you to change that. But outer doesnt hate her inner self. And like u despite knowing it was coming from even within season 1 and predicting outer would get axed i was heartbroken when it happened.
Outer and inner moka are two of my favorite female manga protaganists.

All im asking here is try to understand the other characters even if u dislike them. That way the enterpersonal relationships of the characters in this fic wont suffer for it.

Anyways great fic ive been enjoying it keep it up. Looking forward to outer gaining control and building a life and new relationships with the rest of the guild.