i basically had this idea (but with more music) i haven't written it yet tho

Hey, just wanted to say that this is a really cool story and, just as a suggestion, you may consider changing CREM to CRME pronounced crime

Main Question: CAN RUBY BE SAVED

Well... this was fun and different. I have to say, though, that for me, the RWBY/Evil Conspiracy/Shade sections were far, FAR better than the rest. Its just so fun to see an Evil!Team RWBY. Just my two cents, what have you. Hope to see more of that. On my favs. Thanks for writing :)

Heh. This is a pretty neat idea. Though I do hope we get to see more of team RWBY than we got to see of Cinder/Roman and gang in the show. Still, this is cool. Look forward to reading what other chapters are up :D

Id probably be more ensnared if i didnt hate jaune with a burning passion, as it is it seems like hes going to be a big shot and sorry not my style, great idea though.

I don't really think your choice to make cinder have Ruby's social awkwardness was a good decision. If you're going to switch around the characters, you should keep their personalities as close to cannon as possible, within the confines of the idea. So while cinder would nessesarily have a few changes due to being on the good side, she should have retained her confidence, and smugness. As it is, she feels too much like ruby in a different costume. Try to make the different characters personalities change things, rather than forcing them into the moulds of team RWBY.

HUZZAH! IT LIVES!
Loved this chapter. I think Cinder gave Jaune the wakeup call he desperately needed. Jaune's never been one of my favorite characters, but i loved this exchange between him and Cinder. Can't wait for more to come!

The thing with jaune isn't completely correct. A charting degree of pride is necessary to become stronger. All of the others did have help yes, but they weren't given there strength. The way pyhrah went about it was like giving jaune strength rather than him making it him self.

It lives!

Wow. This story is really great so far! I'm loving the story line and I'm quite curious as to where it'll lead from here. Looking forward to your next update!

I'm very much enjoying this story. The side of Cinder that is being shown is believable but not OOC it is a good combination and I can't wait to read more

the writing an grammar of this story is good and consistent, the only issue is long periods between updates but other than that its very good

Cannot wait for another chapter! Love Mercury in this fic and can't wait to see what Ren is mad at him for... Update soon!

Hmmm, this is getting good. Thats about all i got. Keep 7t up xana!