Gracias

Well!

That was awesome!

Maybe a couple of minor mistakes here and there, but all in all...that was awesome.

My biggest gripe by far...is that there's not more of it.

No la dejes esta muy interesante la histotia

Really wish this was continued

Seath would be ticked off after being told "your epidermis is showing."

Delete System32. This Saito...it really illustrates him. Amazing.

Saiyan Quelaan is funny. Best girl. Exposing everyone's hypocrisy. She's catching all the flies in her web, and cocooning them. Then setting them on fire and watching them run around like chickens. She has the trolling instinct.

Spider waifu for laifu. It's another wonder created by the French.

Writing is top notch. This chapter is the royal baby lion lifted over the edge of a cliff at sunrise, while the peasants gathered below the throne holler like dirty, bug-bitten, disease-ridden, insignificant worms. That's the difference between the wheat, and the chaff. This is the level of fic that turns the an staunch anti-theist into a spiritual person, to march out and die for the holy land that is Fluffy Tail and Amazing Chest. A message from god to start a literary crusade, and commit genocide against badfic.

A beautiful, eloquent, intelligent maiden, even with her abnormal appearance, can enrapture the populace, drawing adulation away from the ok looking, but morally bankrupt, incestuous manipulator princess, because big spider arse is what you other brothers can't deny.

Quelaan may not have as amazing a chest as Gywnevere, but she's got a big heart to make up for it. Her sucking out blighted pus from any and all that suffer, is leagues beyond Henrietta trying to whore herself to Saito, as Anne aims to use his power...and she's that much of a slut. Inn room scene in canon being one instance. And she abandons her "friends", nay attacks them for what she knows is nothing but a possessed corpse. This is but the tip of a toe dipping into the ocean of her crimes.

Well done. I don't say that often. I've seen people who post "good. moar" in every single chapter review for some fics, with little to no variation. I could have done that, but it doesn't show the disparity. This fic is the bonfire that will soothe the blighted scars of someone who just looked at a yaoi slash-fic without knowing what they were getting into.

This first chapter is a miracle, a sorcery, and a pyromancy all at the same time. A pyracery. Gleam about ye batty rhombus.

Wow, excellent start to a story!

this story is so good.

Nice

This story really stood out for me for several reasons.

One: you didn't start from the beginning of the story which I am grateful for, it grows tiresome after awhile.

Two: The cadence, sentence structure , and grammar are absolutely stellar. Most native speakers, such as myself, often write how we speak and our writing can suffer for it. I did notice a few grammatical errors but they were largely inconsequential didn't hinder the story. Your writing style definitely lent Quelaan an alien sensation to the way she spoke, you could tell that she was otherworldy from just her words.

3: Choosing Quelaan as a summons was bold and truly unexpected. I never would of thought of her as an option but I thank you for making the choice.

I look forward to seeing more of your writing in the future if you decide to continue this.

You are an awesome writer D:!

don't worry about your English, it is perfect, better than most English speaking writers on this site :)
This story is intriguing, please update more :)

Your English is better than most people who have grown up with it :D
and I just love how this story going so give me more lol
oh yes Quelaan is awesome! can not forget that.
Hopefully I'll see more from you soon :D

This story is super good and I hope that you are going to continue on with this amazing story :D
Sincerely: Askasknot

Good Lord. So well written. Praise the sun indeed. :)