i just found this and i like it and im kinda already in love with this! so i would love if this would be continued :)

Oh, I didn't even realize English isn't your native language! Don't worry, even if you make a few mistakes (and I didn't see any) it's good practice. I would love to see where this story is going if you're willing to continue it.

I think your writing style is perfectly fine! No need for a beta unless you really wish to get one.

I like this idea :) please continue!

J'adore ta fanfic! Met vite à jour s'il te plait!

What I'm dying to know is… Is this AkaKuro? XD (Because if it is, I'm a fan)
Can't wait for more.

Oh dear.. I hope you could overcome this and please add me my fb name Frozen Pandora Mahaya... It might be not much, but I can support you :-D

Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! Your writing style is lovely and the story is just...wow (in a good way _)

I think you did a really good job on this one! The plot development is intriguing, and the first person narration is in-character. I like how you're incorporating many thoughtful concepts, perhaps symbolism is in store later?
I honestly don't think you need a beta reader, but if it would relieve some stress then you could...
And you're writing style is amazing. Please don't doubt yourself.
So- good work, and I'm looking forward to an update!

I liked it. The plot is interesting and very original, and you have good skills but the chapter was a little short for me but anyway i liked it a lot.

Please update soon!

Aw...I can't wait to see how Akashi will help!

I like your writing style just fine, don't worry W

Your writing style is fine :) Bringing out the emotions in a fic is an important factor, you might want to get a beta reader to put you at ease though :) harder to write on your own I guess?
You've got a good grasp on their inner thoughts, good luck and update if you can :3

"Miss peregrine's Home for Peculiar Children" huh? Yeah, Kuroko sure has a good taste in books (and of course you do too, author-san)
Just perfect, I was looking for angsty stories, definitely my thing, especially since a first person POV is so rare, off to a good start! :)
On to the next chapter

It was a very angst-y and tragic start for a story. I was in the verge of crying as I read the first couple of paragraphs. The way you wrote each sentence captured my attention. They portrayed the character's characteristics very well. Hm, if I'm going to criticize it...maybe the tenses of each verb? I do this mistake alot, so, be careful. If it was in past tense, make every verb past tense except for some instances. That's all for now. :)
I'm actually going to start reading Miss Peregrine's home of peculiar children. I will start it once I have spare time. There are lots of books in line anyway. sighs. XD

Nice job

Keep going!
Can't wait for the next following chapters!